电影— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to avoid redundancy and incomplete sentences. Provide a clear, concise answer with a topic sentence and supporting details, using linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

範例: I usually watch movies on weekends because I have more free time. Since it's my day off, I like to relax and enjoy different films after a busy week.

建議: Focus on clear and coherent sentences. Use linking words properly and avoid unclear or irrelevant details. Provide specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

範例: I usually watch comedy movies because they are funny and help me relax. For example, watching comedies reduces my stress and cheers me up when I feel bored.

建議: Answer directly and clearly. Avoid incomplete sentences and irrelevant information. Use linking words to explain your preference with specific reasons.

範例: I prefer watching movies at the cinema because I enjoy spending time with my friends in a social setting. Also, the big screen and sound system make the experience more exciting.

建議: Provide a clear, structured answer with proper linking words. Use specific examples and correct vocabulary to explain the benefits of watching movies in other languages.

範例: Yes, watching movies in other languages is very useful because it helps me learn about different cultures. Moreover, it improves my listening skills and expands my vocabulary in that language.

× I usually watch movies on the weekend because I have more time. And it's my day off and I like to relax and enjoy different films after a busy week. And.

✓ I usually watch movies on the weekend because I have more time. It's my day off, and I like to relax and enjoy different films after a busy week.

The original sentence ends with 'And.' which is an incomplete sentence fragment. Starting sentences with 'And' is generally discouraged in formal speech and writing. The sentence should be combined properly to avoid fragments and improve clarity.

× I usually watch comedy movies to 'cause it is very funny and it makes me laugh.

✓ I usually watch comedy movies because they are very funny and make me laugh.

The phrase 'to 'cause' is an informal and incorrect conjunction here. The correct conjunction is 'because'. Also, 'it is' should be 'they are' to agree with the plural noun 'comedy movies'.

× More over, it will reduce my stress and I feel so happy whenever I feel tedious.

✓ Moreover, it reduces my stress, and I feel happy whenever I feel tired.

The word 'More over' should be 'Moreover' as one word. 'It will reduce' is better as 'it reduces' to match habitual action. 'I feel so happy' is acceptable but 'I feel happy' is more natural. 'Whenever I feel tedious' is incorrect; 'tedious' describes something boring, not a feeling. The correct word is 'tired'.

× That time I watched this movie changed it in the candy store.

✓ At that time, I watched a movie called 'Changed It' in the candy store.

The original sentence is unclear and ungrammatical. It seems to refer to watching a movie at a candy store. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I preferred the watching movie at cinema.

✓ I prefer watching movies at the cinema.

'Preferred' is past tense, but the question is about general preference, so present tense 'prefer' is appropriate. 'The watching movie' is incorrect; it should be 'watching movies'. Also, 'at cinema' needs the article 'the' before 'cinema'.

× The cause.

✓ The reason is that

'The cause.' is a sentence fragment and unclear. It should be expanded to 'The reason is that' to introduce an explanation.

× I like to spend time with my friends in social society.

✓ I like to spend time with my friends in social settings.

'Social society' is redundant and awkward. 'Social settings' or 'social gatherings' is more natural English.

× The big screen and.

✓ I enjoy the big screen experience.

'The big screen and.' is an incomplete sentence fragment. It should be completed to express the intended meaning.

× Doctor Redmon creates the movie Mercy.

✓ Doctor Redmon created the movie 'Mercy'.

The sentence should use past tense 'created' to indicate the movie was made in the past. Also, movie titles should be in quotes.

× Yes. Definitely it is very beneficial to watch films in another language is because it helps tooken over knowledge like.

✓ Yes, definitely it is very beneficial to watch films in another language because it helps to gain knowledge such as

The sentence is ungrammatical and awkward. 'Is because' is incorrect; 'because' alone is sufficient. 'Helps tooken over knowledge' is incorrect; it should be 'helps to gain knowledge'. The sentence is rephrased for clarity.

× The culture to another country and.

✓ the culture of another country, and

The preposition 'to' is incorrect here; 'of' is the correct preposition to indicate possession or relation.

× It is very helpful for. Listening skills and I have the knowledge about the language of our country.

✓ It is very helpful for listening skills, and I gain knowledge about the language of our country.

The sentence is fragmented and awkward. 'Helpful for. Listening skills' should be combined. 'I have the knowledge' is better as 'I gain knowledge' to indicate learning. The sentence is restructured for clarity and correctness.