电影— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer lacks clarity and coherence. Try to directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, then add specific details using linking words. Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences.

範例: I often watch movies, especially Korean series on Netflix. For example, my favorite is 'Italian Class,' which really captivated me because I related to the main character's experiences.

建議: Your answer is somewhat unclear and repetitive. Provide a clear topic sentence, then explain why you like that genre using specific reasons and linking words to improve coherence.

範例: I usually watch musical movies, such as 'The Greatest Showman.' I enjoy them because they combine beautiful music with inspiring stories, which always leave me feeling amazed and emotionally moved.

建議: Your answer is relevant but a bit long and slightly unclear. Use linking words to connect ideas and keep sentences concise. Also, avoid unnecessary details that do not directly answer the question.

範例: I prefer watching movies at home because I can skip advertisements and multitask. For instance, I often watch movies while taking a bath, which helps me relax and enjoy the experience.

建議: Your answer addresses the question but contains grammatical errors and some redundancy. Try to structure your response with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words for coherence.

範例: Yes, watching movies in other languages is very useful. For example, as a Japanese learner of English, I watch English movies to hear natural expressions and improve my language skills.

× I quite often watched movies like Netflix Netflix series, my favorite Netflix series it Italian class, which is Korean movie.

✓ I quite often watch movies like Netflix series; my favorite Netflix series is Italian Class, which is a Korean movie.

The student incorrectly used the past tense 'watched' instead of the present tense 'watch' to describe a habitual action. Also, the sentence structure was unclear and needed correction for clarity and proper verb usage.

× I when I watch that I've in I was into that movie.

✓ When I watch that, I get really into the movie.

The original sentence is grammatically incorrect and confusing. The past tense 'was' is used incorrectly with 'when I watch' which is present tense. The sentence was rephrased to present tense to match the habitual action and to clarify meaning.

× So my hair was also the same of the the character.

✓ So my hairstyle was also the same as the character's.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'hair' and 'the same of' which is ungrammatical. The correct phrase is 'the same as' and 'hairstyle' fits better here. Also, possessive form 'character's' is needed.

× So I was like.

✓ So I felt like that.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'felt like that' completes the thought and makes the sentence meaningful.

× I think that movie is quite great combination of music and some phrases of Doctors, which is really stunning, astonishing and always fell into the fell into love, fell loving, fell into love.

✓ I think that movie is a great combination of music and some phrases from Doctors, which is really stunning and astonishing; I always fall in love with it.

The sentence has multiple errors: missing article 'a' before 'great combination', incorrect preposition 'of' instead of 'from', misuse of adjectives and adverbs, and incorrect verb forms 'fell' instead of 'fall'. The sentence was corrected for grammar and clarity.

× I prefer that watching at home because I can skip the advertisements in my home and I can watch it during the other tasks which is really effective for me.

✓ I prefer watching at home because I can skip the advertisements and watch it while doing other tasks, which is really effective for me.

The phrase 'prefer that watching' is incorrect; 'prefer watching' is correct. Also, 'during the other tasks' is better expressed as 'while doing other tasks' for naturalness.

× And when I watch some movies I usually watch in the bathroom with a taking a bath which is for which makes me really relaxed and fun.

✓ And when I watch some movies, I usually watch them in the bathroom while taking a bath, which makes me really relaxed and happy.

The original sentence has incorrect prepositions and awkward phrasing. 'With a taking a bath' is incorrect; 'while taking a bath' is correct. Also, 'fun' is an adjective, so 'happy' fits better to describe feelings.

× I think it's used for to uh, watch movies in other languages because it's helps me a lot.

✓ I think it's useful to watch movies in other languages because it helps me a lot.

The phrase 'it's used for to' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'it's useful to'. Also, 'it's helps' is incorrect; it should be 'it helps'.

× It helps me to learn about learn other language like English.

✓ It helps me to learn other languages like English.

The phrase 'learn about learn other language' is redundant and incorrect. Also, 'language' should be plural 'languages' when referring generally.

× if I watch English drama or movies, I watched in the English and I think it's good way to learn English because they say natural English that use natural life.

✓ If I watch English dramas or movies, I watch them in English, and I think it's a good way to learn English because they use natural English that reflects real life.

The sentence incorrectly mixes present and past tense ('watch' and 'watched'). Consistent present tense is needed. Also, 'in the English' is incorrect; it should be 'in English'. The phrase 'say natural English that use natural life' is unclear and corrected for clarity.