科学— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to make your answer more natural and concise by avoiding redundancy and adding linking words. For example, start with a clear topic sentence and then support it with specific reasons using connectors like 'because' or 'as'.

範例: Yes, I enjoyed studying science at school, especially chemistry and biology, because I found the topics fascinating and scored well in chemistry due to my strong interest.

建議: Your answer is good but could be improved by adding linking words and more specific examples to make it clearer and more coherent.

範例: Yes, I use my science knowledge daily because science is everywhere around us. For instance, computer science helps me use technology, while social sciences improve my understanding of human interactions.

建議: Try to structure your answer more clearly with a topic sentence followed by supporting details, and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

範例: I would like to learn more about human factors and patient safety because, as a medical complaints specialist, understanding these concepts would help me improve healthcare environments.

建議: Your answer needs to be clearer and more coherent. Use complete sentences and linking words to explain your opinion with specific reasons.

範例: Yes, it is important for everyone to study science because it helps us understand the world and human interactions, which are essential for daily life and social development.

建議: Avoid unclear or incorrect phrases like 'when I was a cat'. Also, keep your answer concise and relevant, using linking words to connect ideas.

範例: I used to enjoy watching science cartoons and science fiction movies as a child. However, now I have little free time, but I still engage with science by teaching my daughter from her science book.

× When I was at school, I enjoyed studying chemistry and biology classes.

✓ When I was at school, I enjoyed studying chemistry and biology.

The word 'classes' is unnecessary here because 'studying chemistry and biology' already implies attending those classes. Removing 'classes' makes the sentence clearer and more natural.

× I'm highly interested in studying the content of different chemistry topics.

✓ I'm highly interested in studying different chemistry topics.

The phrase 'studying the content of different chemistry topics' is wordy and awkward. It's better to say 'studying different chemistry topics' to express the idea clearly and concisely.

× Science is everywhere around us in daily life.

✓ Science is everywhere around us in daily life.

This sentence is correct as is; no correction needed.

× We use computer science, life sciences, social sciences, and many other different sciences to interact with the things and people around us.

✓ We use computer science, life sciences, social sciences, and many other different sciences to interact with the things and people around us.

This sentence is correct as is; no correction needed.

× Because I'm working as medical complaints specialist and regulatory authority, I'm interested in pursuing a higher degree and a human factor and patient safety to enable me to understand better concepts about patient safety and different environments.

✓ Because I'm working as a medical complaints specialist and regulatory authority, I'm interested in pursuing a higher degree in human factors and patient safety to enable me to better understand concepts about patient safety and different environments.

The sentence lacks the article 'a' before 'medical complaints specialist'. Also, 'a human factor and patient safety' is incorrect; it should be 'in human factors and patient safety'. Additionally, 'understand better concepts' should be 'better understand concepts' for natural word order.

× It's very important to study science because science is the fundamental of a human being on earth.

✓ It's very important to study science because science is the fundamental aspect of human beings on earth.

The phrase 'the fundamental of a human being' is incorrect. It should be 'the fundamental aspect of human beings' to correctly express the idea that science is fundamental to humans.

× While we interact with each other daily, we are developing social sciences about understanding of a human interactions and.

✓ While we interact with each other daily, we are developing social sciences to understand human interactions.

The phrase 'developing social sciences about understanding of a human interactions and' is grammatically incorrect and incomplete. It should be 'developing social sciences to understand human interactions' for clarity and correctness.

× When I was a cat, I was watching different science cartoons and science fiction movies.

✓ When I was a child, I used to watch different science cartoons and science fiction movies.

The phrase 'When I was a cat' is incorrect; it should be 'When I was a child'. Also, 'I was watching' is better expressed as 'I used to watch' to indicate habitual past action.

× Nowadays I don't have a free time to watch science TV programs.

✓ Nowadays I don't have free time to watch science TV programs.

The phrase 'a free time' is incorrect because 'time' is an uncountable noun here. It should be 'free time' without the article 'a'.

× However, I I am teaching my daughter her science book.

✓ However, I am teaching my daughter her science book.

There is a repeated word 'I I' which is a typographical error. Removing the duplicate 'I' corrects the sentence.