网络— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to give a clear and direct answer first, then add specific details. Avoid unclear phrases like 'in your knee' and incomplete sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

範例: I started using the Internet when I was in my early teens. At that time, I mainly used it to search for study materials on Google, which was very helpful for my schoolwork. Nowadays, I use the Internet for many purposes, including learning and entertainment.

建議: Provide a clear structure by stating your frequency first, then supporting details. Avoid unclear or incomplete phrases. Use linking words like 'however' or 'but' to connect ideas.

範例: I don't spend much time online during weekdays because of my busy schedule. However, I usually check my messages and emails during lunch and tea breaks. On weekends, I have more free time to browse social media and the Internet.

建議: Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific details. Avoid filler words like 'uhm' and incomplete sentences. Use linking words such as 'however' and 'but' appropriately.

範例: Yes, during my exam period, my mother didn't allow me to spend much time on the Internet. However, I still checked messages occasionally. This helped me focus more on my studies during that time.

建議: Give a direct answer first, then explain with specific reasons. Avoid awkward phrases like 'the words up'. Use linking words like 'because' and 'however' to connect ideas.

範例: I don't think I spend too much time online because I have a busy schedule with work and family. However, I do make time to catch up with friends by chatting on social media and WhatsApp.

建議: Provide a clear and organised answer with linking words. Avoid unclear phrases like 'I allow gardening' and incomplete sentences. Use specific examples and connect ideas logically.

範例: If I didn't have the Internet, I would spend more time reading books. Also, I enjoy gardening, which helps me relax and calm my mind. Sometimes, I would go out with my friends to socialise.

× I started using the Internet when I was in your knee because the Internet helped me through the like a Google search when I wanted to.

✓ I started using the Internet when I was in your year because the Internet helped me through things like a Google search when I wanted to.

The phrase 'in your knee' is incorrect and likely a mispronunciation or misuse; it should be 'in your year' to indicate school year. Also, 'through the like a Google search' is awkward; it should be 'through things like a Google search' to correctly express the idea.

× I was using the Internet for is.

✓ I was using the Internet for that.

The sentence 'I was using the Internet for is' is incomplete and ungrammatical. It should be corrected to 'I was using the Internet for that' to make sense and complete the thought.

× It was very helpful on that time and nowadays Internet is very useful.

✓ It was very helpful at that time and nowadays the Internet is very useful.

The phrase 'on that time' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'at that time'. Also, 'Internet' should be preceded by 'the' when referring to it generally.

× On the week days I won't get that much time to spend on online but during my lunch break and then she breaks are will check with the messages 1 towards urbancic that Gmail and on the Facebook as well but on the weekend I will get.

✓ On weekdays I don't get much time to spend online, but during my lunch break and tea breaks I will check messages on Gmail and Facebook as well. On the weekend I get more time.

'On the week days' should be 'On weekdays'. 'Spend on online' is incorrect; it should be 'spend online'. 'She breaks are will check with the messages 1 towards urbancic that Gmail' is unclear and likely a mishearing; corrected to 'tea breaks I will check messages on Gmail'. 'On the Facebook' should be 'on Facebook'. The sentence is fragmented and needs restructuring for clarity.

× I think it was during my exam period, my mom wasn't letting me to spend that much time on the Internet.

✓ I think it was during my exam period; my mom wasn't letting me spend that much time on the Internet.

The verb 'let' is followed directly by the base form of the verb without 'to'. Therefore, 'letting me to spend' is incorrect; it should be 'letting me spend'.

× I don't think I'm spending too much time online because of my busy schedule at work and with children and family.

✓ I don't think I spend too much time online because of my busy schedule at work and with children and family.

The present continuous 'I'm spending' is less appropriate here; the simple present 'I spend' is better to express habitual action.

× However, I will find time to spend on the online to catch up with my friends and chatting with them through social media and the words up.

✓ However, I will find time to spend online to catch up with my friends and chat with them through social media and WhatsApp.

'Spend on the online' is incorrect; it should be 'spend online'. 'Chatting' should be parallel with 'catch up', so 'chat'. 'The words up' is a mishearing of 'WhatsApp' and should be corrected.

× I will definitely spend time on reading books if we don't have Internet, unless I will spend time on the gardening because I allow gardening.

✓ I will definitely spend time reading books if we don't have the Internet; otherwise, I will spend time gardening because I love gardening.

'Spend time on reading books' should be 'spend time reading books'. 'Unless' is incorrectly used; 'otherwise' fits better. 'I allow gardening' is incorrect; it should be 'I love gardening'.

× Sometimes I will go out with my friends. This is my schedule. If I don't have it, it's time on.

✓ Sometimes I will go out with my friends. This is my schedule if I don't have Internet time.

The sentence 'If I don't have it, it's time on' is unclear and ungrammatical. It should be rephrased to 'This is my schedule if I don't have Internet time' to clarify meaning.