网络— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 你的回答中有语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，建议简洁明了地回答问题，并避免重复。可以先直接回答开始使用互联网的时间，然后简要说明用途。

範例: I started using the internet when I was a primary school student. At that time, I mainly used it to play games and watch videos for entertainment. I think the internet is very important because it brings me happiness.

建議: 回答较为自然，但有语法错误和表达不够准确。建议注意时态和句子结构，使用连接词使表达更流畅。

範例: I go online several times every day. Usually, I check social media and send messages to my friends. However, sometimes I spend too much time online, which I think is a bad habit, so I am trying to reduce it.

建議: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不完整的问题。建议使用正确的时态和完整的句子，清晰表达原因和感受。

範例: Yes, I remember when my parents restricted my internet access during senior high school. They took away my phone and computer because they thought I was spending too much time online, which negatively affected my preparation for the Gaokao exam. Although it was frustrating at first, I understood their concerns.

建議: 回答内容具体，但语法和表达有误。建议注意单复数和词汇搭配，使用连接词使句子更连贯。

範例: Yes, I usually spend about seven hours online every day, which negatively affects my life. For example, it affects my sleep and reduces the time I can spend on hobbies and exercise. I am trying to change this bad habit by setting time limits on my devices, but it is not very effective yet.

建議: 回答中有语法错误和表达不自然的问题。建议简洁明了地表达观点，避免重复，并使用连接词使表达更流畅。

範例: Without the internet, I would spend more time chatting and meeting with my friends and family. I enjoy sharing my life with them and listening to their stories. I think this would be a good way to strengthen our relationships.

× I usually check the social medias and send messages to my friends.

✓ I usually check social media and send messages to my friends.

“social media”是不可数名词，不需要加复数形式“medias”。

× Sometimes it may be spend too much time on this.

✓ Sometimes I may spend too much time on this.

情态动词“may”后应直接跟动词原形，且缺少主语“I”。

× my parents are restricted my Internet access during Senior High School.

✓ my parents restricted my Internet access during Senior High School.

描述过去发生的事情，应使用过去时态“restricted”，而非现在时“are restricted”。

× because they saw the spending too much time online order negatively affect my preparation for gaokao, which is very important exam in China.

✓ because they saw that spending too much time online would negatively affect my preparation for gaokao, which is a very important exam in China.

“saw the spending”结构不正确，应使用“saw that spending”；“order”应为“would”；“important exam”前需加不定冠词“a”。

× Although it was frustrating at first, I understood their concerns and.

✓ Although it was frustrating at first, I understood their concerns.

句子末尾“and”后缺少内容，导致句子不完整，应去掉“and”。

× which I think has a very negative affect on my life.

✓ which I think has a very negative effect on my life.

“affect”是动词，名词应为“effect”。

× For example is affect my sleep and reduces the time I could spend all hobbies and exercise.

✓ For example, it affects my sleep and reduces the time I could spend on hobbies and exercise.

“affect”应为“affects”，且“spend”后应加介词“on”；句首缺逗号。

× I'm trying to change this bad habits by setting time limits on my devices but it quite shallow.

✓ I'm trying to change these bad habits by setting time limits on my devices, but it is quite shallow.

“habits”前应使用复数指示代词“these”；“it quite shallow”缺少动词，应为“it is quite shallow”。

× Maybe I will chat with my friends and my family. Will I meet my friends or family?

✓ Maybe I will chat with my friends and my family. Will I meet my friends or family?

第二句疑问句结构不正确，应改为“Will I meet my friends or family?”或更自然表达。

× Will I meet my friends or family? I always have a lot of things to talk with them.

✓ I will meet my friends or family. I always have a lot of things to talk about with them.

疑问句“Will I meet...”不符合上下文，应改为陈述句；“talk with”后应加介词“about”。

× I like to share my life with them and also like through listening to their life.

✓ I like to share my life with them and also like listening to their life.

“like through listening”结构不正确，应去掉“through”。

× So without Internet, I think this is also a good way to improve our good relationships.

✓ So without the Internet, I think this is also a good way to improve our relationships.

“Internet”前应加定冠词“the”；“good relationships”中“good”多余，关系本身即可表达正面含义。