网络— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to make your response more natural and concise by directly stating when you started using the internet and why. Avoid incomplete sentences and unclear phrases.

範例: I started using the internet when I was a teenager because I wanted to connect with my friends through social media. It was an exciting new experience for me at that time.

建議: Your answer is clear but contains minor grammatical mistakes and could be more natural. Use correct verb forms and link your ideas smoothly. Also, avoid redundancy by combining sentences effectively.

範例: I usually go online a few times a week because I prefer playing sports or reading books. I think it's healthier not to spend too much time online.

建議: Your answer is incomplete and lacks clarity. Make sure to finish your sentences and provide specific details. Use linking words to connect ideas and explain the reason behind the restriction.

範例: Yes, during a family vacation, my parents asked us to disconnect from the internet so we could enjoy nature and spend quality time together.

建議: Your answer has repetition and grammatical errors. Try to express your ideas clearly and avoid repeating phrases. Use linking words to explain your efforts to reduce internet use.

範例: Yes, I spend too much time online because I often check social media and emails. However, I am trying to set limits to reduce my internet usage.

建議: Your answer is incomplete and slightly awkward. Complete your sentences and use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. Provide specific examples and explain the benefits clearly.

範例: Without the internet, I would spend more time doing outdoor activities like cycling, hiking, or playing sports. Being outdoors not only improves physical health but also boosts mental well-being.

× I began exploring the Internet in my teenage years, primarily driven by the lower the two of social media and the ability to connect with friends.

✓ I began exploring the Internet in my teenage years, primarily driven by the lure of social media and the ability to connect with friends.

The phrase 'the lower the two of' is incorrect and unclear. The intended meaning is likely 'the lure of,' which means an attraction or appeal. Using the correct phrase improves clarity and correctness.

× It was quiet a novel experience at the time and.

✓ It was quite a novel experience at the time.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'and' and uses 'quiet' instead of 'quite.' 'Quite' is the correct adverb meaning 'very' or 'completely.' The sentence should be complete and properly punctuated.

× I don't go online too much, maybe just a few times a week, and I prefer to playing a sport outside or reading a book.

✓ I don't go online too much, maybe just a few times a week, and I prefer playing a sport outside or reading a book.

After 'prefer,' the verb should be in the gerund form without 'to.' 'Prefer to playing' is incorrect; it should be 'prefer playing.' This is a common modal verb usage error.

× I distinctly remember a family vacation where my parents insisted that we disconnect from the Internet to fully appreciate their natural environment and they wanted us to engage more with.

✓ I distinctly remember a family vacation where my parents insisted that we disconnect from the Internet to fully appreciate the natural environment and wanted us to engage more with it.

The sentence is incomplete and ends abruptly with 'engage more with.' It needs an object to complete the thought. Also, 'their natural environment' is better as 'the natural environment' since it refers to the environment around them, not owned by parents.

× I'm always checking social medias and emails and it's something I'm working by trying by trying to set limit for checking Internet.

✓ I'm always checking social media and emails, and it's something I'm working on by trying to set limits for checking the Internet.

'Social medias' is incorrect; 'social media' is an uncountable noun. Also, 'set limit' should be plural 'set limits,' and 'working by trying by trying' is repetitive and incorrect. The phrase 'working on' is the correct collocation.

× Without the Internet, I would engage more in outdoor activities such as cycling, hiking or playing sports and being outdoors not only improves physical health but also mental well-being it's.

✓ Without the Internet, I would engage more in outdoor activities such as cycling, hiking, or playing sports. Being outdoors not only improves physical health but also mental well-being.

The original sentence is a run-on and ends awkwardly with 'it's.' It should be split into two sentences for clarity and proper punctuation.