语言— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Correct errors like “respond it” → “respond in English” and avoid vague words like “sometime.”

範例: I speak Thai as my native language and I can understand English. I can respond in simple English sentences, but I am still improving my speaking and listening skills.

建議: Give a clear opinion sentence, then explain with one or two specific reasons using linking words (because, so, for example). Avoid repetitions and filler words.

範例: Yes, I think learning a new language is difficult because your brain must learn new vocabulary and grammar. For example, when I started English I had to practise pronunciation and memorise many words.

建議: Give a direct answer then add a concise reason with correct grammar and clearer vocabulary. Replace vague phrases like “a couple language” with “languages” and avoid fillers like “umm.”

範例: Yes, I will. I am interested in learning Japanese and Chinese because many of my clients are from Asia, so these languages will help me communicate better at work.

建議: Start with one clear reason, then add a second reason using linking words (also, besides). Fix grammar (e.g. “No one speak Thai” → “Few people speak Thai”) and avoid short fragmented sentences.

範例: I learn English because it is necessary for travel and work. Also, since few people speak Thai outside Thailand, English helps me communicate when I travel and when I deal with international clients.

× I can speak Thai, it is my native language and I can understand English, so I can respond it sometime in a simple sentence.

✓ I can speak Thai; it is my native language, and I can understand English, so I can respond in it sometimes with simple sentences.

The pronoun 'it' refers to 'English' but the preposition and adverb placement are incorrect. Use 'respond in it' not 'respond it'. 'Sometime' should be 'sometimes' to mean occasionally. Also split clauses with proper punctuation and use plural 'simple sentences' for natural expression.

× Yes I do. Learning a new language is is difficult like in your brain know nothing about this so like you were a child and have to learn the new thing so is it difficult?

✓ Yes, I do. Learning a new language is difficult because your brain does not know anything about it, so you feel like a child who has to learn new things; therefore, it is difficult.

Multiple issues: duplicated 'is is' (typo), incorrect clause structure and tense/subject-verb agreement ('your brain know' should be 'your brain does not know'), incorrect pronoun/reference ('this' -> 'it'), and awkward repetition 'like' and question tag. Rewriting into clear clauses with correct auxiliary verb, relative clause ('who has'), and plural 'things' improves clarity.

× Yes I will, I'm interest and a couple language such as umm Japanese and Chinese because right now my client is an Asian so I think learning the language is more beneficial in the future.

✓ Yes, I will. I'm interested in a couple of languages, such as Japanese and Chinese, because right now my clients are Asian, so I think learning those languages will be more beneficial in the future.

Use adjective 'interested' not 'interest' (incorrect form). Add preposition 'in' after interested and 'a couple of languages' requires plural 'languages'. 'Client' should be plural if referring to multiple Asian clients; 'is an Asian' is wrong. Use 'those languages' to refer back. Also use 'will be' for future benefit. Punctuation split into sentences improves clarity.

× I learn English because it is necessary and important in my life. I love to travel and I can speak Thai. No one speak Thai in this world except us. So I have to learn English to communicate with. I travel and the second is for my work.

✓ I learn English because it is necessary and important in my life. I love to travel, and I can speak Thai. No one speaks Thai in the world except us, so I have to learn English to communicate with others. I travel, and secondly it is for my work.

Several pronoun and verb issues: 'No one speak' needs third-person singular 'speaks'. 'in this world' -> 'in the world' is more natural. 'communicate with' requires an object like 'others'. The final fragment 'I travel and the second is for my work' is unclear; rewrite as 'I travel, and secondly it is for my work.' Also punctuation and conjunctions fixed.