生日— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Tapai ko uttar ma thulo sentence haru cha ra kehi grammatical mistakes pani chan. Tapai le answer lai thulo sentence ma bhanda chhoto ra spashta banau, ra grammar ma dhyan dinu parcha. English ma 'I am grew up' bhanda 'I have grown up' bhannu parcha. Tapai le answer ma linking words jastai 'because' ra 'but' ko prayog ramro gareko cha, tara sentence structure ma sudhar garnu parcha.

範例: I usually love celebrating my birthday, but nowadays I don't enjoy it much because of my busy schedule and because I have grown up. When I was a child, I used to invite my friends and distribute chocolates to celebrate.

建議: Tapai ko answer ma repetition ra thulo sentence cha. 'and, and, and' jasto repetition hataunu parcha. Sentence lai clear ra concise banau. Linking words jastai 'then' ko prayog ramro cha, tara sentence structure ma sudhar garnu parcha. English ma 'I love cutting cakes and enjoy' bhanda 'I loved cutting cakes and enjoying with friends' bhannu ramro huncha.

範例: When I was young, I used to go to the temple after waking up. Then, I would invite my friends to celebrate my birthday. I loved cutting cakes and enjoying the party with them.

建議: Tapai ko answer ma thulo sentence cha ra kehi grammatical mistakes chan. 'one of the special day' bhanda 'one of the special days' bhannu parcha. Tapai le answer ma supporting details diye ko cha, tara sentence lai chhoto ra clear banau. Linking words jastai 'because' ra 'also' ko prayog ramro cha.

範例: Yes, it is important to celebrate birthdays because they are special days in our lives. They bring happiness and joy, and provide an opportunity to enjoy with friends and family by cutting cakes and receiving wishes from loved ones.

建議: Tapai ko answer ma grammar ra vocabulary ma thulo sudhar chahinchha. 'should be celebrate' bhanda 'should be celebrated' bhannu parcha. 'Chinese countries' bhanda 'China' matra bhannu parcha. Tapai le answer ma specific ra relevant details dinu parcha. Linking words jastai 'because' ko prayog ramro cha, tara sentence structure ma sudhar garnu parcha.

範例: In China, I think the birthdays of important leaders like the president and prime minister should be celebrated widely because they play significant roles and have done great work for the country.

× I think I am grew up so I really don't enjoy celebrating my birthday.

✓ I think I have grown up so I really don't enjoy celebrating my birthday.

The phrase 'I am grew up' is incorrect because 'grew' is the simple past tense of 'grow' and cannot be used with 'am'. The correct form is the present perfect 'have grown' to indicate a change up to the present.

× when I was child and at school I used to celebrate my birthday by by inviting my friends and also distributing some chocolates.

✓ when I was a child and at school I used to celebrate my birthday by inviting my friends and also distributing some chocolates.

The word 'child' is singular and needs the article 'a' before it. Also, the repeated word 'by' is a typographical error and should be corrected.

× I used to go to temple of after waking up

✓ I used to go to the temple after waking up

The phrase 'to temple of' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'to the temple'. Also, 'of' is unnecessary and should be removed.

× I love cutting cakes and enjoy.

✓ I love cutting cakes and enjoying it.

The verb 'enjoy' should be in the gerund form 'enjoying' to parallel 'cutting'. Also, adding 'it' clarifies what is being enjoyed.

× it is one of the special day in our life.

✓ it is one of the special days in our life.

The phrase 'one of the special day' is incorrect because 'one of the' must be followed by a plural noun, so 'days' is correct.

× it gives a chance to enjoy with our friends and family by cutting cakes and getting a wish from our loved ones.

✓ it gives a chance to enjoy time with our friends and family by cutting cakes and receiving wishes from our loved ones.

The preposition 'with' is correct but 'enjoy with' is incomplete; 'enjoy time with' is better. Also, 'getting a wish' is better expressed as 'receiving wishes'.

× the birthday of the president and prime ministers of Chinese, Chinese countries should be celebrate more widely

✓ the birthdays of the president and prime ministers of China should be celebrated more widely

'Birthday' should be plural 'birthdays' because it refers to multiple people. 'Chinese countries' is incorrect; 'China' is the correct country name. Also, 'celebrate' should be in passive form 'celebrated'.

× should be celebrate more widely

✓ should be celebrated more widely

The verb 'celebrate' should be in the past participle form 'celebrated' to form the correct passive voice.

× they are the important person in our country and they did really great job.

✓ they are important people in our country and they did a really great job.

'Person' should be plural 'people' to agree with plural subject 'they'. Also, 'did really great job' needs the article 'a' before 'really great job'.