生日— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 你的回答有些语法错误和重复用词，表达不够自然。建议注意时态一致性，避免重复词汇，并且句子结构更清晰。

範例: On my birthday, my parents usually host a small party for me. I invite several friends, and in the evening, we cut the birthday cake and sing the birthday song together. Finally, I make a wish.

建議: 回答较简短，缺少连接词使内容显得零散。建议使用连接词使句子更连贯，并丰富细节。

範例: When I was young, my parents always celebrated my birthday with a small party. I invited several friends, and we played video games and board games together. Those moments are really memorable to me.

建議: 回答中有语法错误和重复词汇，表达不够自然。建议注意主谓一致，避免重复，并使用更准确的词汇。

範例: Yes, I think birthdays are important because they provide a good opportunity to gather close friends and family members to enjoy a nice meal. It's also a great way to relieve stress and catch up with friends.

建議: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不清晰。建议理清句子结构，使用正确的时态和单复数形式，并具体说明“16 or 17”的含义。

範例: I think my parents' birthdays are the most important to celebrate in China because, according to Chinese values, parents are the most important people in one's life. Also, birthdays on the 16th or 17th day of the lunar month have special meanings and are considered milestones.

× On my birthday, my parents had a small party for me and I invite several friends together together and along out at night we will cut the birthday cake and sing the birthday song.

✓ On my birthday, my parents have a small party for me and I invite several friends together, and along with going out at night, we cut the birthday cake and sing the birthday song.

句子中描述的是通常发生的事情，应该使用一般现在时而不是过去时。将“had”改为“have”，将“will cut”改为“cut”以符合习惯表达。

× On my birthday, my parents had a small party for me and I invite several friends together together and along out at night we will cut the birthday cake and sing the birthday song.

✓ On my birthday, my parents have a small party for me and I invite several friends together, and along with going out at night, we cut the birthday cake and sing the birthday song.

“along out at night”表达不正确，应该使用“along with going out at night”表示“同时出去”。

× Finally I will make a wish to.

✓ Finally, I make a wish.

句子描述的是习惯动作，应该用一般现在时，且“make a wish to”结构不完整，去掉“to”。

× When I was young, my parents celebrated my birthday with a small party.

✓ When I was young, my parents celebrated my birthday with a small party.

该句时态正确，无需修改。

× I invited several friends.

✓ I invited several friends.

该句时态正确，无需修改。

× We played video games and board games.

✓ We played video games and board games.

该句时态正确，无需修改。

× That time is really memorized in my heart.

✓ That time is really memorable in my heart.

“memorized”是“记忆”的过去分词，表达不当，应使用形容词“memorable”表示“难忘的”。

× Yes, obviously birthday is a good excuse to invite you close friend and family members together together and enjoy a good meal.

✓ Yes, obviously birthdays are a good excuse to invite your close friends and family members together and enjoy a good meal.

“birthday”应为复数形式“birthdays”，且“you close friend”应为“your close friends”，保持主谓一致和名词复数。

× Yes, obviously birthday is a good excuse to invite you close friend and family members together together and enjoy a good meal.

✓ Yes, obviously birthdays are a good excuse to invite your close friends and family members together and enjoy a good meal.

“you”应为“your”，表示“你的”，指代正确。

× It's a good way to release your pressure and meet with your friends.

✓ It's a good way to relieve your pressure and meet your friends.

“release your pressure”表达不当，应为“relieve your pressure”；“meet with your friends”中“with”多余，直接用“meet your friends”。

× My answer is my parents birthday, because in China's value, parents is the most important person in your life.

✓ My answer is my parents' birthdays, because in Chinese values, parents are the most important people in your life.

“parents birthday”应为复数所有格“parents' birthdays”；“parents is”应为“parents are”，主谓一致；“person”应为复数“people”。

× I think their birthday on 16 or 17 is very important because in China it's meaning it's different.

✓ I think their birthdays on the 16th or 17th are very important because in China their meanings are different.

“birthday on 16 or 17”应加定冠词和序数词，“the 16th or 17th”；“it's meaning it's different”表达不清，应改为“their meanings are different”。

× It's like milestone.

✓ It's like a milestone.

“milestone”前缺少不定冠词“a”，表示“一个里程碑”。