生日— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and be more concise. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add specific details using linking words to improve coherence. For example, you could say: "I usually don't do much on my birthday now, but when I was a child, my family used to hold a small party with a special dinner and cake."

範例: I usually don't do much on my birthday now, but when I was a child, my family used to hold a small party with a special dinner and cake.

建議: Avoid repeating phrases like 'gathered together' and try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, provide more specific details to enrich your answer. For example: "When I was young, my family held a small party for me. We all gathered to enjoy a special dinner and birthday cake, which created lovely childhood memories."

範例: When I was young, my family held a small party for me. We all gathered to enjoy a special dinner and birthday cake, which created lovely childhood memories.

建議: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Be sure to directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, then explain your reasons using correct grammar and linking words. For example: "Yes, I think it's important to celebrate birthdays because they only happen once a year. Also, the first birthday is especially significant and should be celebrated with friends."

範例: Yes, I think it's important to celebrate birthdays because they only happen once a year. Also, the first birthday is especially significant and should be celebrated with friends.

建議: Your answer is incomplete and contains many hesitations. Try to give a full, clear response with a topic sentence and supporting details. Use linking words to explain your opinion. For example: "I think it is most important to celebrate the birthdays of elderly people because, in Asian culture, respecting and honouring elders is highly valued."

範例: I think it is most important to celebrate the birthdays of elderly people because, in Asian culture, respecting and honouring elders is highly valued.

× Yes of course because Thursday is the only one day in a in a year so it's very special day and the 1st birthday people person should be celebrated by others friends.

✓ Yes, of course, because a birthday is the only special day in a year, so it's a very special day and the first birthday person should be celebrated by other friends.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'Thursday' instead of 'birthday' and has tense and article errors. 'Thursday' is a specific weekday and does not fit the context. The phrase 'the only one day in a in a year' is awkward and incorrect; it should be 'a birthday is the only special day in a year'. Also, 'others friends' should be 'other friends' as 'other' is the correct determiner here. The sentence needs commas for clarity. The correction aligns the sentence with proper past tense and article usage.

× Yes of course because Thursday is the only one day in a in a year so it's very special day and the 1st birthday people person should be celebrated by others friends.

✓ Yes, of course, because a birthday is the only special day in a year, so it's a very special day and the first birthday person should be celebrated by other friends.

The phrase 'the only one day' is incorrect; 'only' already implies singularity, so 'one' is redundant. Also, 'very special day' needs the article 'a' before it. The correction improves adjective usage and article placement for clarity and grammatical correctness.