生日— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is a bit long and has some grammatical errors. Try to make your response more concise and use correct verb tenses. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then add supporting details with linking words like 'also' or 'after that'.

範例: On my birthday, I usually invite my friends and family to celebrate together. We play some games and take pictures. Also, my friends and family surprise me with gifts. After the party, I like to post the pictures on my Instagram.

建議: Your answer has some grammatical mistakes and lacks coherence. Use past tense consistently and link your ideas clearly. Avoid redundancy and try to be more specific about your experiences.

範例: When I was a kid, I celebrated my birthday with my school friends and family. I used to bring packets of candies to share with my friends. Also, when I got home, my parents gave me a cake, and I cut it with joy.

建議: Your answer is unclear and has grammatical errors. Try to express your ideas clearly using simple sentences and correct grammar. Use linking words like 'because' or 'also' to connect your points logically.

範例: Yes, I think celebrating birthdays is important because it makes life special. Also, it allows people to spend quality time with family and friends, which strengthens relationships. Moreover, celebrating birthdays can make life more enjoyable.

建議: Your answer is good but can be improved by using more natural expressions and linking words. Avoid repeating similar ideas and try to be more concise and clear.

範例: I believe every person's birthday is important and deserves respect. However, in my experience, I especially celebrate my parents' birthdays with joy because they are very important to me.

× Well, every time during my birthday I always invited my friends, my family members and we usually celebrate together and also my friends and family surprised me with the gifts and we always do a little bit games and click picture and after that I posted those on my Instagram platform because I like to do that.

✓ Well, every time during my birthday I always invite my friends, my family members and we usually celebrate together and also my friends and family surprise me with gifts and we always play a few games and click pictures and after that I post those on my Instagram platform because I like to do that.

The student used past tense verbs 'invited', 'surprised', and 'posted' incorrectly when describing habitual actions. For habitual actions, present tense should be used. Also, 'a little bit games' is incorrect; it should be 'a few games' as 'games' is countable. 'Click picture' should be 'click pictures' to match plural form.

× we always do a little bit games and click picture

✓ we always play a few games and click pictures

'Games' is a countable noun, so 'a little bit' is incorrect; 'a few' is appropriate. Also, 'click picture' should be plural 'click pictures' to match the plural noun.

× When I was kid, at that time I celebrated my birthday with my school friends as well as with my family.

✓ When I was a kid, at that time I celebrated my birthday with my school friends as well as with my family.

The phrase 'When I was kid' is missing the article 'a' before 'kid'.

× And I always remember that at that moment I just bring both a packet of the candies and give that to my friend.

✓ And I always remember that at that moment I just brought a packet of candies and gave that to my friend.

The verbs 'bring' and 'give' should be in past tense 'brought' and 'gave' to match the past time frame described.

× I just bring both a packet of the candies

✓ I just brought a packet of candies

'Both' is unnecessary and incorrect here; 'a packet of candies' is singular and correct without 'both'. Also, 'the candies' should be 'candies' as it is general.

× And also when I reached at my home, my parents give me a cake and I cut that cake and really surprised.

✓ And also when I reached home, my parents gave me a cake and I cut that cake and was really surprised.

'Give' should be past tense 'gave' to match past narration. 'Reached at my home' is incorrect; 'reached home' is correct. 'Really surprised' needs auxiliary verb 'was' to form correct past tense.

× when I reached at my home

✓ when I reached home

'Reach' does not require the preposition 'at' before 'home'.

× by celebrating birthday, one can easily make their life more special as well as on a birthday one can easily spend more time with their family members and make their relationship more with good with their friends and with their family.

✓ By celebrating birthdays, one can easily make their life more special as well as spend more time with their family members and improve their relationships with friends and family.

The sentence is wordy and awkward. 'Make their relationship more with good' is incorrect; it should be 'improve their relationships'. Also, 'birthday' should be plural 'birthdays' when speaking generally.

× by celebrating birthday

✓ by celebrating birthdays

'Birthday' should be plural 'birthdays' when referring to the general act of celebrating birthdays.

× one can easily make their life more special

✓ one can easily make his or her life more special

The pronoun 'one' is singular and should be matched with singular possessive pronouns 'his or her' instead of plural 'their'.

× if a person celebrate their birthday, they can also become more curious to life and more enjoyable.

✓ if a person celebrates their birthday, they can also become more curious about life and enjoy it more.

'Celebrate' should be 'celebrates' to agree with singular subject 'a person'. 'Curious to life' is incorrect; correct phrase is 'curious about life'. 'More enjoyable' is an adjective; here, 'enjoy it more' is appropriate.

× if a person celebrate their birthday

✓ if a person celebrates their birthday

The verb 'celebrate' must be in third person singular form 'celebrates' to agree with the singular subject 'a person'.

× more curious to life

✓ more curious about life

'Curious' is followed by the preposition 'about', not 'to'.

× One can always take respect to other birthday as well.

✓ One can always show respect for others' birthdays as well.

'Take respect to' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'show respect for'. Also, 'other birthday' should be plural possessive 'others' birthdays'.

× other birthday

✓ others' birthdays

'Birthday' should be plural 'birthdays' and possessive 'others'' to indicate belonging to other people.

× But if I'm going to talk about my own experience and my own way, I think so.

✓ But if I'm going to talk about my own experience and my own way, I think that...

The phrase 'I think so' is incomplete and unclear here; it should be followed by a clause or omitted.

× I always try to celebrate my parents birthday with more cheerful and enjoyable moment because my parents are very important for me.

✓ I always try to celebrate my parents' birthday with more cheerful and enjoyable moments because my parents are very important to me.

'Parents birthday' needs possessive apostrophe: 'parents''. 'Moment' should be plural 'moments' to match 'more'. 'Important for me' should be 'important to me'.