休息— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to reduce filler words like 'uh' and 'well' to make your answer sound more natural and fluent. Also, use linking words such as 'because' or 'so' to connect your ideas clearly. For example, start with a clear topic sentence and then explain why you go there and what activities you do.

範例: I usually go to the park near my house to relax because it offers a peaceful environment. There, I practice yoga and do other outdoor activities, which help me feel energetic and active throughout the day.

× I go to park uh, in order to relax myself

✓ I go to the park, uh, in order to relax myself

In English, when referring to a specific place like 'park', the definite article 'the' is required. Omitting 'the' before 'park' is incorrect. Always use 'the' before singular, countable nouns when the listener knows which one is being referred to.

× which is a, a stone throw away from my uh house

✓ which is a stone's throw away from my uh house

The correct phrase is 'a stone's throw away', which is a fixed expression meaning a short distance. Using 'stone throw' without the possessive 's is incorrect.

× I usually go over there in order to uh, do yoga as well as other outdoor activities

✓ I usually go there in order to, uh, do yoga as well as other outdoor activities

The preposition 'over' is unnecessary here. 'Go there' is sufficient and more natural when indicating going to a place.

× so that I can become uh, energetic as well as active person for the whole day

✓ so that I can become, uh, an energetic as well as active person for the whole day

The noun 'person' is singular and countable, so it requires an article 'an' before it. Omitting the article is incorrect.

× I usually relax, uh, whether my friends

✓ I usually relax, uh, with my friends

The word 'whether' is incorrect here. The correct preposition to indicate company is 'with'.

× playing the cricket

✓ playing cricket

In English, when referring to sports in general, the definite article 'the' is not used. So, 'playing cricket' is correct, not 'playing the cricket'.

× which not only maintain my physical fitness, but to improve my mental ability as well as it also improve my

✓ which not only maintains my physical fitness, but also improves my mental ability as well as it also improves my

The verbs should agree with the singular subject 'which'. Therefore, 'maintain' and 'improve' should be in third person singular form 'maintains' and 'improves'. Also, parallel structure requires 'but also' instead of 'but to'.

× Honestly speaking, I think the dad is listening to music is also an relaxing activity

✓ Honestly speaking, I think that listening to music is also a relaxing activity

The phrase 'the dad is' is incorrect and seems to be a mishearing or typo. The correct structure is 'I think that listening to music is...'. Also, 'an relaxing' should be 'a relaxing' because 'relaxing' starts with a consonant sound.

× there are certain in certain genres of music which provide not only students to the people's mind

✓ there are certain genres of music which provide not only solace to people's minds

The phrase 'certain in certain genres' is incorrect and redundant. Also, 'students to the people's mind' is unclear and likely incorrect. Possibly intended meaning is 'provide solace or comfort to people's minds'. Prepositions and word choice need correction.

× it also it also works as a stressbuster for people

✓ it also works as a stressbuster for people

The phrase 'it also it also' is a repetition error. Only one 'it also' is needed.

× In order to relax myself, I perform a number of activities not in my home but also in the outer places to example 5 in my field of board or one to myself

✓ In order to relax myself, I perform a number of activities not only at my home but also in outdoor places, for example, playing in my backyard or spending time alone

The phrase 'not in my home but also in the outer places' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'not only at my home but also in outdoor places'. 'To example 5 in my field of board or one to myself' is unclear and likely a mishearing; corrected to 'for example, playing in my backyard or spending time alone'. Prepositions and sentence structure are corrected.

× At home I I prefer to listen music

✓ At home, I prefer to listen to music

The verb 'listen' requires the preposition 'to' when followed by an object. Also, the repeated 'I' is a mistake.

× Apart from this, when I'm the outside that I'm I prefer to go to the park to perform meditation

✓ Apart from this, when I'm outside, I prefer to go to the park to meditate

The phrase 'when I'm the outside that I'm' is incorrect and redundant. Correct form is 'when I'm outside'. Also, 'perform meditation' is better expressed as 'meditate'. Prepositions and sentence structure are corrected.