蛋糕— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答时应避免使用口头语“Uh”，并且可以更自然地表达观点，增加细节使回答更丰富。

範例: Yes, I really enjoy sweet foods such as chocolates because they can lift my mood when I'm feeling down.

建議: 回答中应避免使用不确定词汇如“believe”，并且可以用连接词使句子更连贯。

範例: Yes, there is a traditional Chinese cake called GAO from my hometown Suzhou, and I like it because it tastes very nice and fluffy.

建議: 回答中应避免重复表达，如“successful triumph”，并且可以用更准确的词汇描述失败的原因。

範例: Yes, I once made a yogurt cake for my mother's birthday, but it wasn't very successful because the bottom got burnt.

建議: 回答较好，但可以用连接词使句子更流畅，并且避免重复“eat the cakes”。

範例: Yes, I enjoyed eating cakes, but my parents believed that too much sweet food could harm my teeth, so I didn't eat them very often as a child.

建議: 回答中有语法错误和用词不当，如“carbon addition”，应改为“carbohydrate intake”，并且避免重复表达。

範例: No, recently I have stopped eating desserts after meals because I want to reduce my carbohydrate intake and stay fit.

× Yes, I believe there's a kind of Chinese cake called GAO in Suzhou, my hometown, and I also like them because they taste very nice and fluffy.

✓ Yes, I believe there's a kind of Chinese cake called GAO in Suzhou, my hometown, and I also like it because it tastes very nice and fluffy.

这里的主语是单数的“a kind of Chinese cake”，所以后面指代的代词应该用单数“it”，而不是复数“them”。同时，动词也应与单数主语一致，使用“tastes”。

× Yes, I once made a cake for my mother to celebrate her birthday. It's a yogurt cake, but I don't think it's actually a successful triumph, as the cake got some black spots on its bottom.

✓ Yes, I once made a cake for my mother to celebrate her birthday. It was a yogurt cake, but I don't think it was actually a successful triumph, as the cake got some black spots on its bottom.

描述过去的事件时，应该使用过去时态。这里“It's”应改为“it was”，表示过去的状态。

× Yes, I enjoy eating cakes, but my parents think it's not beneficial for children to eat too much sweet food as they can harm the teeth, so I didn't eat the cakes very frequently during my childhood.

✓ Yes, I enjoyed eating cakes, but my parents thought it was not beneficial for children to eat too much sweet food as it can harm the teeth, so I didn't eat cakes very frequently during my childhood.

这里描述的是过去的习惯和观点，应该使用过去时态。动词“enjoy”应改为“enjoyed”，“think”改为“thought”，“is”改为“was”。

× No, recently I don't have dessert after meals because I need to cut the carbon addition for me and keep fit so I won't have some desserts after meal.

✓ No, recently I don't have dessert after meals because I need to cut down on carbohydrates and keep fit, so I won't have any desserts after meals.

“cut the carbon addition”表达不正确，应该是“cut down on carbohydrates”（减少碳水化合物摄入）。“some desserts after meal”应改为“any desserts after meals”，因为否定句中通常用“any”。

× No, recently I don't have dessert after meals because I need to cut the carbon addition for me and keep fit so I won't have some desserts after meal.

✓ No, recently I don't have dessert after meals because I need to cut down on carbohydrates and keep fit, so I won't have any desserts after meals.

“cut the carbon addition for me”中的介词使用错误，正确表达是“cut down on carbohydrates”。此外，“after meal”应为“after meals”，表示饭后。