蛋糕— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and be more concise. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add specific supporting details using linking words for coherence. For example, mention specific occasions and types of sweets you enjoy.

範例: Yes, I really enjoy eating cakes and other sweet foods. For instance, I usually eat cakes during birthday parties and anniversaries. Additionally, I like to have ice cream after dinner as a dessert.

建議: Avoid hesitation and unclear statements. Give a direct answer and if you don't know, say so clearly and briefly. You can also mention cakes from your own country to enrich the answer.

範例: I am not very familiar with traditional Chinese cakes. However, in my country, popular cakes include chocolate cake and red velvet cake.

建議: Avoid irrelevant or confusing phrases. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then add specific details with linking words to make your answer coherent.

範例: Yes, I can make cakes. For example, during the COVID pandemic, I baked a cake for my mother's birthday since we were all staying at home.

建議: Be more specific and avoid vague phrases like 'the circumstances'. Use linking words to connect ideas and clarify your answer.

範例: Yes, I loved eating cakes as a child because they tasted delicious. In particular, I enjoyed cakes decorated with cartoon characters, which made them more fun to eat.

建議: Avoid filler words and incomplete ideas. Give a clear reason why you like desserts and use linking words to make your answer logical and complete.

範例: Yes, I enjoy having desserts after meals. Since childhood, I have liked eating ice cream after dinner because sweets add pleasure to life and make meals more enjoyable.

× I love to eat uh cake as uh, cakes are quite delicious and usually I eat the food especially on the birthday parties anniversaries.

✓ I love to eat cakes as cakes are quite delicious and usually I eat them especially on birthday parties and anniversaries.

The word 'cake' should be plural 'cakes' to match the context of general preference. Also, 'the food' is vague; 'them' refers back to cakes. 'Birthday parties anniversaries' needs 'and' to connect the two plural nouns properly.

× I also uh, like to eat a sweeter foods, especially ice cream.

✓ I also like to eat sweeter foods, especially ice cream.

The article 'a' should not be used before the plural noun 'foods'. Removing 'a' corrects the quantifier usage.

× I do not have a sufficient knowledge regarding the traditional Chinese cake because, uh, I, I have a knowledge regarding the cakes only of my country, like, uh, chocolate cake, but it's not the cake, red velvet cake, but I don't uh, think about.

✓ I do not have sufficient knowledge regarding traditional Chinese cakes because I only have knowledge about the cakes of my country, like chocolate cake and red velvet cake, but I don't think much about them.

'Knowledge' is uncountable and does not take 'a'. 'Traditional Chinese cake' should be plural 'cakes' to refer generally. 'Have a knowledge' is incorrect; 'have knowledge' is correct. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammar.

× I I can make a case.

✓ I can make a cake.

'Case' is a mispronunciation or typo; the correct word is 'cake' which fits the context.

× I prepared cake on my mother's birthday party.

✓ I prepared a cake for my mother's birthday party.

'Prepared' is correct past tense. 'Cake' should have an article 'a' as it is a singular countable noun. 'On' should be replaced with 'for' to indicate purpose.

× I loved to eat the cakes because the cakes are quite delicious as well as the circumstances and at that time I loved to eat cartoons cake.

✓ I loved to eat cakes because cakes are quite delicious, and at that time I loved to eat cartoon cakes.

'The cakes' is unnecessarily definite; 'cakes' is better for general statement. 'Cartoons cake' should be 'cartoon cakes' plural to match the context.

× I love to have some desserts after meal.

✓ I love to have some desserts after meals.

'Meal' should be plural 'meals' to indicate the general habit of having desserts after any meal.