钓鱼— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Perbaiki pengucapan kata 'fish' dan hindari kesalahan pengucapan seperti 'face' dan 'feast'. Gunakan kalimat yang lebih jelas dan langsung, serta hindari pengulangan kata seperti 'really really much'.

範例: Yes, I like eating fish because it is delicious and very nutritious. Fish is considered a healthy food, so I enjoy it a lot.

建議: Perbaiki struktur kalimat agar lebih jelas dan singkat. Gunakan kata penghubung yang tepat dan hindari pengulangan yang tidak perlu. Misalnya, jelaskan kegiatan dengan kalimat yang terstruktur dan mudah dipahami.

範例: I go to the fish market almost every week with my mom. She usually buys fish there and cooks it for our dinner once a week.

建議: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan gunakan kata yang tepat seperti 'criteria' menjadi 'types' atau 'kinds'. Hindari pengulangan kata dan gunakan kalimat yang lebih alami dan efektif.

範例: Fishing is not very popular in my country because people prefer other hobbies, especially sports like football and basketball.

× Face actually is my thing because I found that feast is very delicious and also has a lot of nutrition and fish is considered as a healthy food also.

✓ Fish actually is my thing because I find that fish is very delicious and also has a lot of nutrition and is considered a healthy food.

The word 'Face' is a typo and should be 'Fish'. 'Feast' is incorrect in this context and should be 'fish'. 'Found' should be 'find' to match the present tense of liking something. 'Fish is considered as a healthy food also' should be 'is considered a healthy food' without 'as' and 'also' at the end for better clarity.

× So I love fish, uh, really really much.

✓ So I love fish very much.

The phrase 'really really much' is informal and awkward. 'Very much' is the correct quantifier to express strong liking.

× Almost every week because I have to accompany my mom to go to fish market to look for some fish and after that buy some of it and my mom sudden my mom is usually cook.

✓ Almost every week because I have to accompany my mom to go to the fish market to look for some fish and after that buy some of it, and my mom usually cooks.

The phrase 'go to fish market' needs the definite article 'the' before 'fish market'. 'Sudden my mom is usually cook' is incorrect and unclear; it should be removed or corrected to 'my mom usually cooks' to indicate habitual action.

× My mom usually cook a fish for our dinner once a week.

✓ My mom usually cooks fish for our dinner once a week.

The verb 'cook' must agree with the third person singular subject 'my mom', so it should be 'cooks'. Also, 'a fish' is unnatural here; 'fish' as a food is uncountable.

× My mom usually cook a fish for our dinner once a week.

✓ My mom usually cooks fish for our dinner once a week.

Using 'a fish' implies a single whole fish, which is less natural in this context. 'Fish' as an uncountable noun is more appropriate when referring to food in general.

× Especially people in my countries often have a hobbies that related to sport such as football and basketball.

✓ Especially people in my country often have hobbies that are related to sports such as football and basketball.

'Countries' should be singular 'country' to match the context. 'A hobbies' is incorrect because 'hobbies' is plural; remove 'a'. 'That related' needs the verb 'are' to be correct. 'Sport' should be plural 'sports' when referring to multiple types.