钓鱼— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make your answer more concise and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence stating whether you like fish, then give one or two specific supporting details (use linking words) about cooking preference and buying ready-made fish. Correct grammar (e.g., “I find it hard to cook fish” and word order) and avoid redundancy.

範例: Yes, I do like eating fish, but it depends on how it’s cooked. For example, I prefer grilled or baked fish because it tastes fresher, but I find it hard to cook fish at home, so I often buy ready-made or fried fish from a shop.

建議: Be direct and clear about past and present experience. Use correct tense and avoid confusing phrasing like “I've really got to the fish market.” Explain briefly why you no longer go, using linking words (e.g., “but” or “because”). Keep it to two sentences maximum.

範例: Yes, I used to go to the fish market because my previous office was nearby. However, I rarely go now because it’s far from my home and I don’t like the strong smell.

建議: Give a clear, direct answer and support it with specific, accurate reasons. Use linking words (e.g., “because” and “for example”) and correct grammar (e.g., “rural areas” not “rural”). Provide one or two concise examples to show popularity (coastal communities, recreational fishing, festivals).

範例: Yes, fishing is quite popular in Japan because we have a long coastline and many rivers. For example, coastal communities rely on fishing for work, and many people enjoy recreational fishing or attend local fishing festivals.

× Yes, I like eating fish but I feel it depends on how it's cooked.

✓ Yes, I like eating fish, but I feel it depends on how it is cooked.

The original sentence is mostly correct but uses the contraction "it's" which is acceptable; however, in formal speech writing, using the full form 'it is' after a comma improves clarity. No grammatical error in verb+ -ing here, but ensure comma before conjunction joining independent clauses.

× Additionally, I feel hard to cook fish so I sometimes buy fish or fried fish I prefer.

✓ Additionally, I find it hard to cook fish, so I sometimes buy fish or fried fish, which I prefer.

The phrase 'feel hard to cook fish' is incorrect. After 'feel' to express difficulty use 'find it hard to + verb'. Also add commas to separate clauses and use a relative clause 'which I prefer' to clarify preference.

× Yes, I've been to the fish market because my previous office was near the fish market, but now I've really got to the fish market because it's too far from my home and it's too stinky.

✓ Yes, I've been to the fish market because my previous office was near it, but now I rarely go to the fish market because it's too far from my home and it smells bad.

Multiple issues: 'really got to' is ungrammatical—use 'rarely go' or 'don't go anymore'. Repetition of 'fish market' can be reduced with pronoun 'it'. 'Too stinky' is informal; use 'it smells bad'. This corrects tense and word choice while keeping present perfect for experience.

× Yes, fishing is popular in my country Japan, because there are a lot of beautiful ships in Japan and also river as well.

✓ Yes, fishing is popular in my country, Japan, because there are a lot of beautiful ships and rivers.

Use commas around apposition 'Japan'. 'Also river as well' is redundant; use plural 'rivers'. Remove repeated 'in Japan'. This fixes preposition/redundancy and noun number.

× So fishing is sometimes enjoyed by the people who live in rural.

✓ So fishing is sometimes enjoyed by people who live in rural areas.

The phrase 'live in rural' is incorrect. Use the noun phrase 'rural areas'. Also 'the people' is unnecessary; 'people' is more natural. This corrects pronoun/determiner and noun usage.