道路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 文法の誤りを修正し、より自然で効果的な表現を使いましょう。また、具体的な例や理由を加えて内容を豊かにしてください。

範例: Yes, the roads in my hometown are often busy, and traffic jams happen frequently. This situation is particularly dangerous for young children and elderly people because it increases the risk of accidents.

建議: 文法と語彙の使い方を改善し、接続詞を使って論理的に話を展開しましょう。具体的な理由や例を加えると良いです。

範例: Yes, many people, including children, have to cross busy roads near where I live, such as Bury White and the main road in Tokyo. Because of the heavy traffic, it is quite dangerous, so I believe widening the roads would help reduce accidents.

建議: 回答の構成を改善し、接続詞を使って自然に話をつなげましょう。また、具体的な改善案や理由を明確に述べてください。

範例: The main roads in my city are quite old and narrow since they were built in the 1960s or 1970s. Therefore, I think the local government should take action to renovate and widen these roads to improve safety.

建議: 文法の誤りを直し、より自然な表現を使いましょう。また、具体的な理由や緊急性を明確に述べると良いです。

範例: Yes, I believe the local government and politicians need to discuss road extensions urgently because the current roads are dangerous, especially for children and elderly people. Immediate improvements are necessary to ensure public safety.

× Yes, and it seems that many traffic jams are happened in my hometown.

✓ Yes, and it seems that many traffic jams have happened in my hometown.

The verb phrase 'are happened' is incorrect because 'happen' is an intransitive verb and does not use the passive form here. The correct form is the present perfect 'have happened' to indicate events that occurred in the past and are relevant now.

× and there are chances to get accident there.

✓ and there are chances of getting accidents there.

The phrase 'chances to get accident' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'of' after 'chances', and 'getting accidents' is the proper gerund form to express the possibility of accidents occurring.

× I think the extension of the road is necessary for avoid it.

✓ I think the extension of the road is necessary to avoid it.

The phrase 'necessary for avoid it' is incorrect. After 'necessary', the infinitive form 'to avoid' should be used instead of 'for avoid'.

× And it seems that the main road is very old and narrow because it was made in 1960s or 1970s.

✓ It seems that the main road is very old and narrow because it was made in the 1960s or 1970s.

The sentence starts with 'And' which is unnecessary and informal here. Also, decades should be preceded by 'the' and use plural form with 's' (the 1960s). Removing 'And' and adding 'the' improves clarity and correctness.

× Furthermore, it seems that the local government should take action so that they can avoid.

✓ Furthermore, it seems that the local government should take action to prevent it.

The phrase 'so that they can avoid' is incomplete and unclear. It should specify what to avoid, and 'take action to prevent it' is a clearer and grammatically correct expression.

× I think the local governments and the politicians should take discussions for a long time about the extensions of the Lord because it's very dangerous, especially among young children and older people.

✓ I think the local government and politicians should have long discussions about the extension of the road because it's very dangerous, especially for young children and older people.

'Take discussions for a long time' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'have long discussions'. 'Extensions of the Lord' is a typo; it should be 'extension of the road'. Also, 'local government' is usually singular when referring to one area, and 'for' is the correct preposition with 'dangerous'.