香水— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答は意味が伝わりますが、文法の誤りや不自然な表現が多く、文のつながりも不十分です。より自然で効果的な回答にするために、文法を正しくし、接続詞を使って文をつなげ、具体的な理由を明確に述べる練習をしましょう。

範例: Yes, I like perfume because I sometimes use it before I go out with my friends or go shopping with my family. The pleasant smell makes me feel more comfortable and relaxed.

建議: 回答は内容が明確で、基本的な構造もありますが、文のつなぎ方や語彙の選択に改善の余地があります。例えば、接続詞を使って文を滑らかにつなげ、'festive'の使い方を見直すとより自然になります。

範例: I usually wear perfume only on special occasions, such as parties or family gatherings. For example, I like to use it during anniversaries because it makes me feel more confident and festive. On regular days, I prefer to keep things simple and not use any fragrance.

建議: 回答は理由を述べていますが、文法の誤りや不自然な表現が多く、意味が伝わりにくい部分があります。より明確で自然な英語にするために、文を短くし、正しい語彙と文法を使う練習をしましょう。

範例: I probably won't buy perfume as a gift because it is too expensive for me as a student. Also, I don't know their favorite scents, so if I choose the wrong one, my friends might not be happy.

建議: 回答は内容が不明瞭で、文法や語彙の誤りが多いです。質問に直接答え、理由を明確に述べる練習をし、文を簡潔で論理的に構成することが必要です。

範例: I don't know much about perfumes, but I think they are expensive. When I visit shops in the city, I often see that perfumes cost a lot, so it is hard for me as a student to buy them.

× If I say so, yes.

✓ Yes, I do.

The original sentence 'If I say so, yes.' is awkward and unclear. A simple and direct answer to the question 'Do you like perfume?' is 'Yes, I do.' which is grammatically correct and natural in English.

× I like perfume because I sometimes. Used perfume when I come before I hang out with my friends or go shopping with my family and.

✓ I like perfume because I sometimes use it before I hang out with my friends or go shopping with my family.

The original sentence is fragmented and has incorrect punctuation. 'Used perfume' should be 'use perfume' to match the present tense. Also, 'when I come before' is incorrect; it should be 'before I hang out'. The sentence should be combined into one coherent sentence.

× The smell makes me more comfortable or relaxing.

✓ The smell makes me feel more comfortable and relaxed.

The phrase 'more comfortable or relaxing' is incorrect because 'comfortable' is an adjective describing a feeling, while 'relaxing' is a present participle acting as an adjective. The correct form is 'feel more comfortable and relaxed' to express two feelings.

× I usually only wear perfume on special occasions such as parties. Or family gathering for example.

✓ I usually only wear perfume on special occasions such as parties or family gatherings, for example.

The original sentences are fragmented. 'Or family gathering for example.' is a sentence fragment. It should be combined with the previous sentence and 'gathering' should be plural 'gatherings' to match 'parties'.

× I like to use it during anniversary's because it makes me feel more confident in festive.

✓ I like to use it during anniversaries because it makes me feel more confident and festive.

'Anniversary's' is incorrect; it should be plural 'anniversaries' without an apostrophe. Also, 'in festive' is incorrect; it should be 'and festive' to connect two adjectives describing feelings.

× On regular days I prefer to keep things simple and not use any fragrance.

✓ On regular days, I prefer to keep things simple and not use any fragrance.

A comma is needed after the introductory phrase 'On regular days' to improve sentence clarity.

× Maybe no because it's too expensive for me to buy because I'm a student and also I can't understand their favorite sense and if I couldn't choose the best one, I think my friends and other people who I give on the presence will be unhappy.

✓ Maybe not, because it's too expensive for me to buy since I'm a student. Also, I don't know their favorite scent, and if I can't choose the best one, I think my friends and other people who I give the present to will be unhappy.

'Maybe no' is incorrect; it should be 'Maybe not'. 'Favorite sense' should be 'favorite scent'. 'If I couldn't choose' should be 'if I can't choose' to match the present/future context. 'Give on the presence' is incorrect; it should be 'give the present to'. The sentence is also too long and should be split for clarity.

× I'm not well known at perfumes but yes, I think so because when I go to shops and. And shops in cities.

✓ I'm not well knowledgeable about perfumes, but yes, I think so because when I go to shops in cities,

'Well known at perfumes' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'well knowledgeable about perfumes'. Also, the sentence is fragmented and repeated 'and shops' should be removed.

× I often say that perfumes are very expensive and I can buy it with my. A person and I think it's hard to buy as a student.

✓ I often say that perfumes are very expensive and I cannot afford to buy them. I think it's hard to buy perfumes as a student.

The original sentences are fragmented and unclear. 'I can buy it with my. A person' is incorrect and unclear. It should be 'I cannot afford to buy them'. The sentences should be combined and clarified.