香水— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is understandable but try to use correct vocabulary and grammar. For example, use 'fragrance' instead of 'fragments' and avoid repetition. Also, make your sentences clearer and more natural.

範例: Actually, I usually don't like perfume because I'm very sensitive to strong fragrances. However, recently my brother gave me a gift of a perfume that had a very soft and sweet scent. I liked it so much that I used it twice when I went out.

建議: Try to improve grammar and vocabulary. Use 'fragrance' instead of 'fragments' and avoid mixing tenses. Also, add linking words to make your answer more coherent.

範例: Yes, I only use soft perfumes because I am sensitive to strong fragrances. For example, I usually wear sweet and smooth scented perfumes when I go shopping or visit my siblings.

建議: Your answer is good but try to avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

範例: Yes, I would buy perfume as a gift because many people enjoy smelling nice. For instance, my friend Sabina loves perfume, so I am planning to buy one for her birthday.

建議: Improve grammar and sentence clarity. Use linking words to organize your ideas better and avoid repetition.

範例: I think the price of perfumes depends on the brand. There are many expensive brands that I have never tried. Personally, I prefer affordable perfumes, but people who can afford it might choose expensive ones.

× Actually it's a no for me because I'm very sensitive to the fragments, which is hard.

✓ Actually, it's a no for me because I'm very sensitive to the fragrances, which is hard.

The word 'fragments' is incorrect here; the correct word is 'fragrances' which refers to scents or smells. This is a vocabulary error related to adjective use.

× That perfume was so smooth, soft, it was sweet and the fragments was really nice, very soft.

✓ That perfume was so smooth, soft, it was sweet and the fragrances were really nice, very soft.

The word 'fragments' should be 'fragrances' and since it is plural, the verb should be 'were' instead of 'was' to agree in number.

× So I used it twice when I went.

✓ So I used it twice when I went out.

The sentence is incomplete; 'went' usually requires an object or adverb to complete the meaning. Adding 'out' clarifies the action in past tense.

× Umm yeah, the soft ones only because I am very sensitive to the strong fragments, so I used the smooth and the sweet flavor perfume when I go to shopping or visiting my siblings.

✓ Umm yeah, the soft ones only because I am very sensitive to strong fragrances, so I use the smooth and sweet scented perfume when I go shopping or visit my siblings.

Again, 'fragments' should be 'fragrances'. Also, 'flavor' is incorrect for perfume; 'scented' or 'fragrance' is appropriate. The verb tense should be present tense 'use' and 'go shopping' and 'visit' are correct forms.

× And also my friends called Sabina, she likes perfume very much and I'm planning to buy perfume for her birthday gift.

✓ Also, my friend called Sabina likes perfume very much and I'm planning to buy perfume as a birthday gift for her.

The phrase 'my friends called Sabina' is incorrect; it should be 'my friend called Sabina' (singular). Also, 'birthday gift for her' is better expressed as 'perfume as a birthday gift for her'.

× I think it's depend on brands what kind of perfume they use.

✓ I think it depends on the brand what kind of perfume they use.

'It's depend' is incorrect; the verb should be 'depends' to agree with singular subject 'it'. Also, 'brands' should be singular 'brand' to match the context.

× There are many expensive brands that I haven't used in my life.

✓ There are many expensive brands that I haven't used in my life.

This sentence is correct; no correction needed.

× I always prefer the affordable ones and those who can afford they might buy expensive ones.

✓ I always prefer the affordable ones, and those who can afford might buy expensive ones.

The phrase 'those who can afford they might buy' is incorrect; the pronoun 'they' is unnecessary and causes redundancy. Removing 'they' corrects the sentence.