香水— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more fluent and reduce fillers (uh). Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific reason or example. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and use a linking word to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, I do like perfume because pleasant scents can improve my mood. For example, citrus fragrances make me feel more energetic in the morning, while floral scents help me relax in the evening.

建議: Correct grammar and be concise. Begin with a direct answer, then give a brief, specific reason. Avoid unclear phrases like “Neither I work or study.” Use a linking word to contrast ideas.

範例: No, I don't use perfume every day because I prefer a more natural scent. However, I enjoy smelling perfumes occasionally, for instance when I go out for special events.

建議: Use correct tense and word choice (e.g., 'If I had a girlfriend, I would give her perfume'). Start with a clear topic sentence and add one specific occasion or reason. Keep it natural and concise.

範例: Yes, I would buy perfume as a gift if I had a girlfriend because it is a personal and thoughtful present. I would choose it for occasions like Valentine's Day or her birthday.

建議: Combine sentences to avoid sentence fragments and correct grammar (e.g., 'A normal perfume costs about CN¥500, which I think is too expensive'). Provide a brief justification or comparison to support your opinion.

範例: Yes, I think perfumes are expensive. A typical bottle in China costs about CN¥500, which I find quite pricey compared with other personal items like deodorant.

× Yes, I like perfume because it smells good and, uh, can make you feel pleasant.

✓ Yes, I like perfume because it smells good and can make you feel pleasant.

Remove the filler 'uh' for clarity. The sentence uses adjectives/adverbs correctly but the filler interrupts fluency. Keep the coordinated verbs parallel: 'smells good and can make you feel pleasant.' Suggestion: avoid fillers and ensure parallel structure.

× No, as a man, I don't like well perfume in my daily life.

✓ No, as a man, I don't like wearing perfume in my daily life.

The phrase 'well perfume' is incorrect. The correct verb is 'wear' when talking about using perfume on oneself. This is a problem with word choice/quantifier-like use. Suggestion: use the verb 'wear' after 'like' to express preference about using perfume.

× Neither I work or study.

✓ I neither work nor study.

'Neither...or' is incorrect; the correlative pair is 'neither...nor' and subject-verb order should be 'I neither work nor study.' This is a sentence structure issue. Suggestion: use the correct correlative conjunction and normal subject-verb order.

× However, I like the smell of perfume because it makes me feel pleasant.

✓ However, I like the smell of perfume because it makes me feel pleasant.

This sentence is grammatically correct. Tenses are consistent: present simple to state a habitual preference and effect. No correction needed.

× Yes, if I had a girlfriend, I will give her a perfume as a gift, especially on special occasions such as Valentine's Day or International Women's Day.

✓ Yes, if I had a girlfriend, I would give her a perfume as a gift, especially on special occasions such as Valentine's Day or International Women's Day.

This is a conditional sentence. Using 'if I had' (second conditional) requires 'would' in the main clause, not 'will.' This is a modal verb usage error. Suggestion: use 'would' for unreal or hypothetical present situations.

× Yes, they are quite expensive. In China a normal perfume cost about CN¥500.

✓ Yes, they are quite expensive. In China, a normal perfume costs about CN¥500.

Two issues: missing comma after 'In China' (stylistic) and subject-verb agreement with 'a normal perfume' requires 'costs' (present simple). This is primarily an article/verb agreement issue; ensure singular noun takes singular verb. Suggestion: use 'costs' for singular and include a comma after introductory phrase.

× Which is a totally over.

✓ Which is totally overpriced.

'Which is a totally over' is ungrammatical. The intended meaning is 'overpriced.' This is a sentence structure and word choice error. Suggestion: use the adjective 'overpriced' to describe something that costs too much, and avoid starting a sentence with 'Which' when it does not modify a preceding noun clause; better to attach it to the previous sentence with a comma: '...CN¥500, which is totally overpriced.'