香水— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be clearer and more concise. Start with a direct topic sentence (Yes/No + brief reason), correct vocabulary (perfume, not 'proven'), and use linking words to add one or two specific supporting details (scents you prefer and effect on you). Limit to 2–4 sentences and avoid confusing phrases like 'didn't have a really strong smile.'

範例: Yes, I like perfume, although I don't wear it often. I prefer natural, light scents such as orange or green tea because they smell fresh and help me feel relaxed.

建議: Give a direct answer and explain cultural reason clearly. Use correct words and reduce repetition. Use one linking phrase to introduce the cultural explanation, then give a personal conclusion. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

範例: No, I don't wear perfume every day. In my country many men avoid perfume because of social norms that see it as feminine, so I usually follow that custom and prefer not to use it.

建議: Answer directly and give concise reasons with clear vocabulary. Say you wouldn't buy perfume because you lack knowledge of others' preferences and it can be risky as a gift. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' and avoid filler words and incorrect forms.

範例: No, I probably wouldn't buy perfume as a gift because I don't know other people's scent preferences. Because tastes vary a lot, I prefer to choose a safer gift like a gift card or something more personal.

建議: Be concise and support your opinion with a clear reason and a brief comparison. Use correct vocabulary (expensive, add scent) and a linking word to introduce the alternative (for example, 'therefore' or 'so'). Keep to 2–3 sentences.

範例: Yes, I think perfumes are expensive because they often contain rare ingredients and brand markup. Therefore I usually prefer cheaper alternatives such as scented body lotions, which give a similar fragrance at a lower cost.

× I don't use proven but I like it, especially for the one who didn't have a really strong smile.

✓ I don't use perfume but I like it, especially the ones that don't have a very strong scent.

Word choice and adjective/adverb use: 'proven' is incorrect; should be 'perfume'. 'the one who didn't have a really strong smile' is incorrect and unclear; 'ones that don't have a very strong scent' correctly uses plural noun agreement and replaces 'really' with the adverb 'very' before 'strong'. Also 'scent' is the correct noun for smell. Suggestion: Use correct vocabulary (perfume, scent) and match modifiers (very strong scent).

× I would like the one with more natural and like some orange taste or like the tea flavor.

✓ I would like one that is more natural and has some orange notes or a tea fragrance.

Pronoun and sentence structure: 'the one' should be 'one' for general preference; 'with more natural' is missing a noun and an appropriate verb. 'Orange taste' and 'tea flavor' are unnatural for perfumes; use 'orange notes' and 'tea fragrance'. Suggestion: Use 'that' clauses to describe characteristics and prefer 'has' for features.

× I think that is really great and make me feel relaxed and peaceful.

✓ I think that it is really great and makes me feel relaxed and peaceful.

Subject-verb agreement: 'that' refers to 'it', singular, so verb must be 'makes' not 'make'. Also include 'it' after 'think that' for clarity. Suggestion: Ensure verb agrees with singular subject and include pronouns as needed.

× I don't use Pervam in my daily life because I think it is quite embarrassing for a man to use it.

✓ I don't use perfume in my daily life because I think it is quite embarrassing for a man to use it.

Spelling and word choice: 'Pervam' is a misspelling of 'perfume'. The rest of the sentence is grammatically acceptable. Suggestion: Use correct spelling and consistent vocabulary.

× In my country, for most of the boy, they seldom use Pervin because they think that it is quite embarrassing.

✓ In my country, most boys seldom use perfume because they think it is quite embarrassing.

Quantifier and noun form: 'for most of the boy' is incorrect; use 'most boys'. 'Pervin' is a misspelling of 'perfume'. Also avoid redundant 'they' if rephrasing. Suggestion: Use correct plural nouns with quantifiers (most boys) and correct spelling.

× Only the woman will use it.

✓ Only women use it.

Pronoun/noun number: 'the woman' implies a specific woman; general statement needs plural 'women'. Use simple present 'use' for habitual actions. Suggestion: Use plural nouns for generalizations and present simple for habits.

× Of course, it is a kind of stereotypes.

✓ Of course, it is a kind of stereotype.

Count noun form and sentence structure: 'stereotypes' is plural while 'a kind of' requires a singular noun 'stereotype', or rephrase to 'a kind of stereotype' or 'a stereotype'. Suggestion: Ensure determiner and noun number agree.

× Because of that I don't like to use.

✓ Because of that, I don't like to use it.

Missing object pronoun: 'use' requires an object; add 'it' referring to 'perfume'. Also add a comma after the introductory phrase. Suggestion: Always include the object when using transitive verbs like 'use'.

× I won't buy Pervam as a gift because I know nothing about Pervent.

✓ I won't buy perfume as a gift because I don't know anything about it.

Spelling and tense/word choice: 'Pervam' and 'Pervent' are misspellings; replace with 'perfume' and 'it'. 'I know nothing about' is okay but 'I don't know anything about it' is more natural. Suggestion: Use consistent vocabulary and natural negative constructions.

× Furthermore, I think that umm because I don't like what the people like for the sands.

✓ Furthermore, I think that I wouldn't know what people like about scents.

Sentence structure and word choice: The original is ungrammatical and unclear. Replace filler 'umm' and correct 'the sands' to 'scents'. Use 'I wouldn't know what people like' to express uncertainty. Suggestion: Plan the sentence before speaking; use clear verbs like 'know' and correct nouns like 'scents'.

× If you bought something they don't like to taste, it will be quite embarrassing and that it may be waste for my gift.

✓ If you buy something they don't like, it will be quite embarrassing and it may be a waste of a gift.

Pronoun/tense and word choice: Use present tense 'buy' in a conditional generalization. 'Don't like to taste' is odd; 'don't like' suffices. 'It may be waste for my gift' is ungrammatical; use 'a waste of a gift' or 'a waste'. Suggestion: Use zero conditional for general truths and correct noun phrases.

× So I won't bite Pervez as my primary.

✓ So I won't buy perfume as my main gift option.

Spelling and word choice: 'bite Pervez' is incorrect; should be 'buy perfume'. 'As my primary' is incomplete; use 'as my main gift option'. Suggestion: Use precise verbs and complete noun phrases.

× Yes, I think perfumes are expansive, maybe they have some special ingredients, but for me it is quite expensive for me to just adding some scents on my body.

✓ Yes, I think perfumes are expensive; maybe they have some special ingredients, but for me it is quite expensive to just add some scent to my body.

Word choice and verb form: 'expansive' is incorrect; use 'expensive'. Remove repeated 'for me'. 'Adding' should be base verb 'add' after 'to' or change structure. 'Scents' plural can be 'scent' or 'scents'; 'add scent to my body' is natural. Suggestion: Use correct adjective 'expensive' and correct verb forms after adjectives.

× I think other like body lotion can also having the same effects on my body so I won't buy for it.

✓ I think other products like body lotion can also have the same effect on my body, so I won't buy perfume for that purpose.

Verb form and noun agreement: 'can also having' is incorrect; after modal 'can' use base verb 'have'. 'Effects' should be singular 'effect' or 'the same effects' with article. 'I won't buy for it' is ungrammatical; use 'I won't buy perfume for that purpose'. Suggestion: After modals, use base verbs; ensure noun number and prepositional phrases are correct.