老师— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 你的回答有语法错误和表达不清晰的问题。建议你用完整的句子直接回答问题，并且避免不相关的描述。可以多用连接词使句子更连贯。

範例: Yes, my favourite teacher is my English teacher because she teaches me a lot of useful knowledge and encourages me to be brave.

建議: 回答不够清晰，表达混乱。建议直接回答问题，并用简单明了的句子说明原因。避免使用不准确的词汇。

範例: No, I am not in touch with my primary school teacher because we are not allowed to use mobile phones now, but my parents still keep in contact with her.

建議: 回答不够具体，句子结构混乱。建议先直接回答问题，然后用具体例子说明老师如何帮助你。使用连接词使表达更流畅。

範例: My favourite teacher helped me by teaching me many new English words and explaining difficult grammar points clearly in class.

建議: 回答较好，但句子可以更自然流畅。建议用连接词连接句子，并用更丰富的词汇表达你的想法。

範例: Yes, I want to be a teacher in the future because my grandfather is a kind teacher, and I hope to help others and contribute to society like him.

× I send them.

✓ I send her.

The pronoun 'them' is plural, but the teacher is singular. Use 'her' to refer to a singular female teacher.

× Is a beautiful girl, I like beauty and she teach me many knowledge about English and teach me how to be a brave girl.

✓ She is a beautiful girl. I like her beauty, and she teaches me a lot of knowledge about English and how to be a brave girl.

The original sentence lacks a subject in the first clause and has run-on sentences. Also, 'teach' should be 'teaches' to agree with the singular subject. 'Many knowledge' is incorrect; 'a lot of knowledge' is appropriate.

× We can't use the mobile phone in this period, so I don't have, but my parents are contacted.

✓ We can't use mobile phones during this period, so I don't have one, but my parents are in contact.

'Can't' is used correctly, but 'I don't have' is incomplete; it should specify what is not had. 'Are contacted' is passive and incorrect here; 'are in contact' is the correct expression.

× I think so because they are connected all the time.

✓ I think so because they are always connected.

'They' is unclear; it likely refers to parents and the student, so 'they' is acceptable but 'connected all the time' is awkward. 'Always connected' is more natural.

× She is an English teacher, so she can teach me many English words, vocabulary, whatever and besides that they all.

✓ She is an English teacher, so she can teach me many English words and vocabulary. Besides that, she teaches me everything else.

'Whatever and besides that they all' is unclear and ungrammatical. 'She teaches me everything else' clarifies the meaning.

× she teach me many knowledge about English and teach me how to be a brave girl.

✓ she teaches me a lot of knowledge about English and teaches me how to be a brave girl.

The verb 'teach' must be conjugated as 'teaches' to agree with the third person singular subject 'she'.

× You know, it's a best way to teach me directly in the class.

✓ You know, it's the best way to teach me directly in class.

Use the definite article 'the' before 'best' as it is a superlative adjective. Also, 'in class' is more natural than 'in the class' in this context.

× Yes, I will, because my grandfather is a teacher, is a kind one.

✓ Yes, I will, because my grandfather is a teacher and a kind one.

The sentence is missing a conjunction 'and' to connect the two clauses properly.

× I want to be a teacher like him, to be a useful man for the society.

✓ I want to be a teacher like him, to be a useful person for society.

'Man' is gender-specific; 'person' is more appropriate. Also, 'the society' is incorrect; 'society' without 'the' is correct here.