梦想— Part 1 評分報告

建議: ควรปรับปรุงโครงสร้างประโยคให้สมบูรณ์และใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่อความลื่นไหล เช่น ใช้ 'because' ให้ถูกต้องและเพิ่มรายละเอียดที่ชัดเจนขึ้น

範例: No, I usually can't remember my dreams because I am a very deep sleeper. Therefore, I rarely recall anything from my sleep at night, but I wish I could remember some.

建議: ควรใช้คำศัพท์ที่ถูกต้องและปรับปรุงไวยากรณ์ เช่น ใช้ 'dreams' แทน 'streams' และเชื่อมประโยคให้สมบูรณ์และชัดเจน

範例: I am interested in other people's dreams because they seem excited when they share them with me. Also, I like to give advice when they ask for it.

建議: ควรปรับปรุงไวยากรณ์และความชัดเจนของประโยค รวมถึงเพิ่มคำเชื่อมและรายละเอียดที่สมบูรณ์

範例: Yes, I think dreams have special meanings because I have heard that they reflect what is on a person's mind. For example, if someone has a nightmare, it might mean they are feeling stressed.

建議: ควรปรับปรุงการใช้คำและโครงสร้างประโยคให้ถูกต้องและชัดเจน เช่น แก้คำผิดและเพิ่มรายละเอียดที่สมบูรณ์

範例: Yes, I sincerely want to make my dreams come true, even if they are big. For example, I want to have a position in an organization, so I try very hard to achieve it.

× No, I usually can't remember about my dreams because I am the person who. Are a very deep sleep.

✓ No, I usually can't remember my dreams because I am a person who sleeps very deeply.

The original sentence has a sentence fragment and incorrect structure. 'I am the person who. Are a very deep sleep.' is incomplete and incorrect. The correct form is 'I am a person who sleeps very deeply.' This fixes the sentence structure and uses the correct verb form and adverb.

× No, I usually can't remember about my dreams because I am the person who. Are a very deep sleep.

✓ No, I usually can't remember my dreams because I am a person who sleeps very deeply.

The phrase 'remember about my dreams' is incorrect. The verb 'remember' does not require the preposition 'about' when followed by a direct object. The correct phrase is 'remember my dreams.'

× So I can remember anything during my sleep at night.

✓ So I cannot remember anything during my sleep at night.

The previous sentence states inability to remember dreams, so this sentence should reflect that. The original sentence contradicts the previous statement. Also, 'can' should be 'cannot' to express inability.

× I am interested in other streams because all their dreams seemed to be excited when they shared to me.

✓ I am interested in other people's dreams because their dreams seem exciting when they share them with me.

The word 'streams' is a mishearing or typo for 'dreams.' Also, 'all their dreams seemed to be excited' is incorrect; dreams cannot be excited. The correct expression is 'their dreams seem exciting.' 'Shared to me' should be 'share them with me.'

× An when they want the advice, I am the person who can give them the advice. In.

✓ And when they want advice, I am the person who can give it to them.

The phrase 'want the advice' should be 'want advice' without 'the' unless referring to specific advice. Also, 'give them the advice. In.' is incomplete and incorrect. The correct form is 'give it to them.'

× Dreams have a special meanings.

✓ Dreams have special meanings.

The word 'meanings' is plural, so the article 'a' should not be used. 'A' is used with singular countable nouns. The correct phrase is 'special meanings' without 'a.'

× Since I have heard from others when they told me about that dreams is seem like uhm they have something in their mind.

✓ Since I have heard from others when they told me that dreams seem like they have something in their mind.

The phrase 'about that dreams is seem like' is incorrect. It should be 'that dreams seem like.' Also, 'in their mind' is acceptable but 'on their mind' is more common. The verb 'is' is incorrect with plural 'dreams.'

× For example if they have a nightmare, maybe they are still.

✓ For example, if they have a nightmare, maybe they are still feeling scared.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'feeling scared' completes the thought. Also, a comma after 'For example' is needed.

× Yes, I want to make my dream come true, sincerely even is a big dream, but I will do my best to achieve the ghost an for example, I want to be something in the organization, so I try so hard to get it.

✓ Yes, I want to make my dream come true. Even if it is a big dream, I will do my best to achieve it. For example, I want to be someone in the organization, so I try very hard to get it.

The original sentence has multiple errors: 'sincerely even is a big dream' is incorrect; it should be 'Even if it is a big dream.' 'Achieve the ghost' is likely a mishearing or typo; 'achieve it' is correct. 'Be something in the organization' should be 'be someone in the organization.' Also, sentence structure is improved by splitting into multiple sentences.