梦想— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 답변이 자연스럽지 않고 문법 오류가 있습니다. 'me and my family went' 대신 'my family and I went'로 수정하고, 'incidentally the fire started'는 더 자연스럽게 'because a fire accidentally started'로 표현하세요. 또한, 문장을 2~3개로 나누어 명확하게 전달하는 연습이 필요합니다.

範例: Yes, I definitely remember a dream I had. My family and I went on a summer vacation, but unfortunately, our hotel caught fire because a fire accidentally started.

建議: 답변이 다소 길고 중복된 표현이 있습니다. 'sometimes'가 두 번 반복되었고, 문장 연결이 자연스럽지 않습니다. 'because I sometimes forget my dreams and they don't always make sense, so I feel embarrassed to share them'처럼 간결하고 자연스럽게 표현하세요.

範例: I usually don't share my dreams because I sometimes forget them, and they don't always make sense, so I feel embarrassed to tell others.

建議: 답변이 명확하지만, 'you can win a lottery' 대신 'it means you might win the lottery'처럼 더 자연스럽고 구체적으로 표현하는 것이 좋습니다. 또한, 연결어를 사용해 문장을 부드럽게 연결하세요.

範例: I think dreams have special meanings. For example, in Korea, if you dream about a pig, it means you might win the lottery.

建議: 'sometimes'는 불필요하게 느껴지고, 'it seems really interesting if it came true'는 문법적으로 부자연스럽습니다. 'I had a dream about flying across the sky, and it would be amazing if it came true'처럼 수정하세요.

範例: Yes, I want to make my dreams come true. For instance, I once dreamed about flying across the sky, and it would be amazing if that became real.

× It was a dream about me and my family went to summer vacation but our hotel burned out because incidentally the fire started.

✓ It was a dream about me and my family going on a summer vacation, but our hotel burned down because the fire started accidentally.

The phrase 'me and my family went to summer vacation' incorrectly uses the past tense verb 'went' directly after 'about' without a proper gerund or clause. It should be 'me and my family going on a summer vacation' to correctly express the action within the dream. Also, 'burned out' is not the correct phrasal verb for a hotel catching fire; 'burned down' is appropriate. 'Incidentally the fire started' is awkward; 'the fire started accidentally' is clearer.

× It was a dream about me and my family went to summer vacation but our hotel burned out because incidentally the fire started.

✓ It was a dream about me and my family going on a summer vacation, but our hotel burned down because the fire started accidentally.

The sentence mixes verb forms incorrectly. 'Went' is past tense but used improperly after 'about'. The correct form is the gerund 'going'. Also, 'burned out' is incorrect; 'burned down' is the correct past tense phrasal verb for a building catching fire.

× I don't share my dreams with others because I sometimes forget about my dream and also it is sometimes it doesn't make sense so it is embarrassing to tell them.

✓ I don't share my dreams with others because I sometimes forget my dreams, and sometimes they don't make sense, so it is embarrassing to tell them.

The sentence has redundancy and awkward phrasing. 'I sometimes forget about my dream' should be 'I sometimes forget my dreams' for clarity. The phrase 'it is sometimes it doesn't make sense' is incorrect; it should be 'sometimes they don't make sense'. This correction improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I think dreams have special meanings. For example, in Korea, I believe that if a pig is in my dream, then you can win a lottery.

✓ I think dreams have special meanings. For example, in Korea, I believe that if a pig appears in my dream, then I can win the lottery.

The pronoun 'you' is incorrectly used when referring to the speaker's own experience. It should be 'I' to maintain consistency. Also, 'win a lottery' should be 'win the lottery' as it refers to a specific concept.

× I had a dream about flying across the sky and it seems really interesting if it came true.

✓ I had a dream about flying across the sky, and it would seem really interesting if it came true.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly. 'It seems' is present tense, but the context is hypothetical about a past dream. Using 'would seem' correctly expresses the conditional mood. Also, adding a comma improves readability.