梦想— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is a bit long and slightly repetitive. Try to be more concise and directly answer the question first, then add a specific detail. Also, watch your grammar and word choice to sound more natural.

範例: Yes, I can remember my dreams quite clearly. For example, I often dream about achieving my career goals, which motivates me to work hard every day.

建議: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to organise your ideas more clearly, use linking words properly, and avoid incomplete sentences. Also, be specific about how sharing dreams helps you.

範例: Yes, I often share my dreams with friends because it helps us understand each other better. Moreover, hearing their dreams motivates me to stay focused on my own goals.

建議: Your answer is somewhat confusing and grammatically incorrect. Try to express your opinion clearly with a topic sentence, then explain your reasoning with specific details. Avoid run-on sentences.

範例: I don't believe dreams have special meanings. Instead, I think they represent our hopes and goals, which encourage us to work hard to achieve them.

建議: Your answer is repetitive and contains hesitations. Try to give a clear and concise response with supporting details. Also, avoid repeating phrases and focus on fluency.

範例: Yes, I definitely want to make my dreams come true. I have a clear plan to achieve success by working hard and staying focused on my goals.

× I believe that all the human beings live based on their dream and dream push each and every person to pursue and to work hard and achieve their goal to become successful.

✓ I believe that all human beings live based on their dreams and dreams push each and every person to pursue, work hard, and achieve their goals to become successful.

The word 'human beings' is plural, so 'dream' should be plural as 'dreams' to match. Also, 'dream push' should be 'dreams push' to agree in number. Additionally, 'goal' should be plural 'goals' to correspond with 'each and every person' pursuing their own goal. This correction ensures subject-verb and noun agreement in plural form.

× Yes, I often shared my dreams with others even I'm very much interested on other stream as well as I think it's an opportunity to get to know each other and how we can manage our lives by considering others.

✓ Yes, I often share my dreams with others and I'm very much interested in other streams as well. I think it's an opportunity to get to know each other and how we can manage our lives by considering others.

The question is about a habitual action, so present tense 'share' is appropriate instead of past tense 'shared'. Also, 'interested on' is incorrect preposition; it should be 'interested in'. 'Other stream' should be plural 'other streams' to indicate multiple areas. The sentence is also split for clarity and correctness.

× Yes, I often shared my dreams with others even I'm very much interested on other stream as well as I think it's an opportunity to get to know each other and how we can manage our lives by considering others.

✓ Yes, I often share my dreams with others and I'm very much interested in other streams as well. I think it's an opportunity to get to know each other and how we can manage our lives by considering others.

The preposition 'on' is incorrect after 'interested'; the correct preposition is 'in'. Also, 'as well as' is better replaced with 'and' for smoother connection in this context.

× I don't think actually dreams have a special meaning because dreams is for me dream is like something that always connected with us and we just need to follow that and we just need to work on that so that ultimately we can avail our dream that.

✓ I don't think dreams have a special meaning because, for me, a dream is something that is always connected with us and we just need to follow it and work on it so that ultimately we can achieve our dreams.

The sentence has subject-verb agreement errors: 'dreams is' should be 'dream is' because 'dream' is singular here. Also, 'connected' needs 'is' to form 'is connected'. The phrase 'avail our dream that' is incorrect; 'achieve our dreams' is more appropriate. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I don't think actually dreams have a special meaning because dreams is for me dream is like something that always connected with us and we just need to follow that and we just need to work on that so that ultimately we can avail our dream that.

✓ I don't think dreams have a special meaning because, for me, a dream is something that is always connected with us and we just need to follow it and work on it so that ultimately we can achieve our dreams.

The pronouns 'that' are used incorrectly referring to 'dream'; 'it' is the correct pronoun for singular 'dream'. Also, the sentence is rephrased to improve clarity and pronoun reference.

× I think we all have our we we all have a plan to become successful in our life by following our dream.

✓ I think we all have our plans to become successful in our lives by following our dreams.

The phrase 'we all have our we we all have a plan' is repetitive and incorrect. 'Plan' should be plural 'plans' to match 'we all'. 'Life' should be plural 'lives' because it refers to multiple people. 'Dream' should be plural 'dreams' to match 'our'. This correction ensures proper subject-verb agreement and pluralization.

× So it is very much obvious that I also want to I also want myself to become successful by following my dream.

✓ So it is very obvious that I also want to become successful by following my dream.

The phrase 'I also want myself' is incorrect; 'myself' is unnecessary and incorrect reflexive pronoun here. The correct form is 'I want to become successful'. The sentence is simplified for clarity and correctness.