梦想— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the answer more direct, fluent and better organized. Start with a clear topic sentence stating whether you remember dreams, then give one or two specific examples. Reduce hesitations and grammatical errors (use past tense or present habits correctly) and keep it within 3–4 sentences. Use linking words like “for example” to add detail.

範例: Yes, I can remember some dreams. For example, when I was younger I dreamed twice about becoming a singer because I enjoy singing in my free time. I still sing regularly now, so those dreams reflected my hobby and ambitions.

建議: Organize the answer: state clearly whether you share dreams, then explain with a specific example. Fix grammar (e.g. “my mom is happy” not “can happiness”) and use linking words like “because” or “so” for clarity. Avoid vague phrases and filler sounds.

範例: Yes, I usually share my dreams with my mother because she supports me. For example, she was very happy when I told her I wanted to sing, and she gave me advice and encouragement to practice and improve.

建議: Give a clear opinion followed by a specific reason or example. Correct grammar (e.g. “dreams have special meanings” and “you can practise to improve and become the best version of yourself”). Use linking words such as “because” or “for example” to make your point coherent and logical.

範例: Yes, I think dreams can have special meanings because they often show our desires and goals. For example, if you dream about performing on stage, it might mean you want to improve your confidence and pursue singing, so you can practise to become a better version of yourself.

建議: Answer directly and clearly: state the dream and describe concrete steps you are taking. Fix grammar (singular/plural, tenses) and use clear linking words like “so” or “therefore.” Replace vague terms (“show problems problem showing skill”) with precise skills (e.g. classroom management, presentation skills). Keep to 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I definitely want to make my dreams come true. I want to become a teacher in the future, so I practise leadership, communication and classroom management skills by volunteering and preparing lessons. These activities help me become better prepared for that career.

× I am a person who like to uh, sing and I umm, always sing when I have free time.

✓ I am a person who likes to sing, and I always sing when I have free time.

Subject-verb agreement requires the verb after 'who' to agree with 'person' (singular). Use 'likes' not 'like'. Also remove filler words and extra commas for clarity. Suggestion: Practice matching verbs to singular or plural nouns and avoid unnecessary fillers.

× To be honest, I always hear uh, something with my mom, uh, specifically is I in the past, I usually share my dream with my mom.

✓ To be honest, I always talk with my mom; specifically, in the past I usually shared my dreams with her.

'Hear something with my mom' is incorrect — use 'talk with' or 'share with'. Pronoun 'her' should replace 'my mom' in the second clause to avoid repetition. Also verb tense adjusted to past for consistency ('shared'). Suggestion: Use appropriate verbs for communication (talk, tell, share) and replace repeated nouns with pronouns.

× Uh, my mom can happiness and uh, it trains me some things related to my dreams.

✓ My mom brings me happiness, and she taught me some things related to my dreams.

'Can happiness' is not grammatical; use 'brings me happiness' or 'makes me happy'. 'It trains me some things' is incorrect — use 'she taught me' or 'she trained me in'. Also change tense to past 'taught' to match 'in the past'. Suggestion: Choose appropriate verbs for meanings (bring/make for emotions; teach/train for skills) and ensure subject clarity.

× Yes, absolutely Dreams are special meanings uh, when someone have a dreams, you can umm uh practice to improve, to become a a best versions to uh become uh this dream.

✓ Yes, absolutely. Dreams have special meanings. When someone has a dream, they can practice to improve and become the best version to achieve that dream.

Multiple errors: missing punctuation; 'Dreams are special meanings' is awkward — better as 'Dreams have special meanings'. 'Someone have a dreams' wrong subject-verb agreement and number: use 'someone has a dream'. 'A best versions' incorrect article and number; use 'the best version'. Pronoun consistency: use 'they' for singular 'someone'. Suggestion: Ensure subject-verb agreement and singular/plural consistency; simplify sentences and correct articles.

× The fact is, I want to make my dreams come true, uh, in the futures, I want to become a, a, a teachers and I always practice, uh, to improve my leadership skills, uh, communication skill and show problems problem showing skill.

✓ The fact is I want to make my dreams come true. In the future, I want to become a teacher, and I always practice to improve my leadership skills, my communication skills, and my problem-solving skills.

'In the futures' should be 'in the future' (singular). 'A teachers' wrong article and plural — use 'a teacher'. 'Communication skill' and 'show problems problem showing skill' are incorrect; use plural 'communication skills' and 'problem-solving skills'. Ensure parallel structure in the list. Suggestion: Use correct singular/plural forms, proper articles, and standard compound nouns like 'problem-solving skills'.