梦想— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và mạch câu: Tránh lặp từ và sửa lỗi thì (use simple past or present perfect consistently), rút gọn câu dài và loại bỏ tiếng ngập ngừng. Thêm liên từ để làm rõ ý và cung cấp một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể hơn về giấc mơ (ví dụ cảm xúc hoặc ảnh tượng).

範例: Yes, I often remember my dreams, although the details are sometimes vague. For example, I once dreamed about two fish swimming in a bright river, and I felt peaceful watching them.

建議: Sửa cấu trúc câu và dùng từ chính xác: tránh từ sai (e.g., “soon” nên là “son” hay “friend”), loại bỏ tiếng ngập ngừng, dùng liên từ để diễn đạt lý do vì sao chia sẻ giấc mơ và đưa ví dụ cụ thể về phản ứng của người nghe.

範例: Yes, I sometimes share my dreams with friends because they find them funny or strange. For instance, I told a friend about a dream where I was flying and she laughed and asked for more details.

建議: Làm rõ ý và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp: giải thích rõ vì sao bạn nghĩ giấc mơ có ý nghĩa, nêu ví dụ cụ thể và dùng kết nối logic (because, so, therefore). Tránh câu mơ hồ như “quiet it started after timing hours” — thay bằng mô tả thời gian và kết quả cụ thể.

範例: Yes, I do. For example, whenever I feel stressed late at night I often have nightmares, so I believe my dreams reflect my emotions. Therefore, I always try to relax before bed to avoid bad dreams.

建議: Làm rõ và tổ chức lại câu: nêu rõ bạn không muốn biến giấc mơ thành hiện thực và giải thích lý do một cách mạch lạc (ví dụ vì giấc mơ là vô thức hoặc chứa nội dung tiêu cực). Sử dụng cấu trúc ngắn, tránh số và từ không rõ nghĩa như “9 May” hay “prefilled”.

範例: No, I don't usually want my dreams to come true because they are often strange or unpleasant. For example, I sometimes have nightmares that I would never want to happen in real life.

× I often remember the dreams I had dreamed before.

✓ I often remember the dreams I had dreamed before.

No change needed; 'dreams' plural correctly matches 'I had dreamed'—no singular/plural error.

× Sometime the details in the dreams not too clearly, but I still remember the content in that.

✓ Sometimes the details in the dreams are not very clear, but I still remember the content of them.

Use 'sometimes' (adverb) not 'sometime'; place 'not' with auxiliary 'are' to form a correct negative: 'are not very clear'. 'Content in that' is awkward; use 'content of them'. Suggestions: use 'sometimes' and include the auxiliary verb 'are' and choose 'clear' adjective with 'very' adverb.

× For example, when I uh, remember when I dreamed about two fish, I remember the same.

✓ For example, when I remember dreaming about two fish, I recall it exactly the same.

Avoid repetitive 'remember when I dreamed'; use 'remember dreaming' or 'recall dreaming'. 'I remember the same' is unclear; 'recall it exactly the same' clarifies meaning. Suggestions: simplify the clause and use a clear verb for recalling.

× Yes, sometime I say my dream with others, you know, a dream with like uh, my soon.

✓ Yes, sometimes I tell my dreams to others, you know, like a dream I had about my son.

Use 'sometimes' and the verb 'tell' with the preposition 'to': 'tell my dreams to others'. 'Say my dream with others' is incorrect. 'Soon' is wrong word; likely 'son'. Suggestions: use 'tell ... to', plural 'dreams' for general habits, and correct vocabulary 'son'.

× So sometime I have interesting dream, I will share it with all the people and they will track my dream.

✓ So sometimes I have an interesting dream, I will share it with people and they will follow my dream.

Use 'sometimes' and singular 'an interesting dream' or plural 'interesting dreams'. 'All the people' is unnatural; 'people' suffices. 'Track my dream' is incorrect collocation; 'follow my dream' or 'listen to my dream' works better. Suggestions: fix adverb, article before singular countable noun, and choose correct verb collocation.

× However.

✓ However, that's not always the case.

Single-word fragment 'However.' is a sentence fragment. Complete the thought by adding what 'however' contrasts. Suggestions: attach a main clause after connective words.

× Yes, I think so.

✓ Yes, I think so.

No change needed; present tense correctly expresses the opinion.

× For example, when I quiet it started after uh, timing hours.

✓ For example, when I feel quiet after long periods of time,

Original is ungrammatical and unclear. 'When I quiet it started after timing hours' has multiple errors. Interpret as 'when I feel quiet after long periods of time'. Suggestions: use 'feel quiet' and 'after long periods of time' to express duration.

× I often dreamed a horror dream, so I always relax myself before I go to bed.

✓ I often dream about horror scenarios, so I always relax before I go to bed.

Use simple present 'dream' for habitual actions rather than past 'dreamed'. 'Dream a horror dream' is awkward; use 'dream about horror scenarios' or 'have nightmares'. 'Relax myself' is unnatural; use 'relax'. Suggestions: use present tense for habits and natural verb phrases.

× Actually no, because I think dream is something very so I don't want to make it become true.

✓ Actually no, because I think dreams are something private, so I don't want them to come true.

Use plural 'dreams are' for general statements. 'Something very' is incomplete—replace with 'something private' or appropriate adjective. 'Make it become true' is awkward; use 'come true'. Suggestions: match subject-verb number and use natural expressions for 'come true'.

× Something I have 9 May and I don't.

✓ Some dreams are things I have no desire to realize.

Original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear ('9 May' likely misrecognition). Provide a plausible correction that fits context: expressing lack of desire to realize certain dreams. Suggestions: avoid numeric/garbled fragments and state the idea clearly.

× I totally don't want it to be true.

✓ I totally don't want them to be true.

Pronoun 'it' mismatches plural 'dreams'; use 'them' for plural. Also 'totally don't want them to be true' correctly expresses the negative preference. Suggestions: ensure pronoun number matches the antecedent.

× It's not prefilled or fine.

✓ It's not pleasant or good.

'Prefilled' is incorrect word choice; likely misused for 'pleasant' or 'preferable'. Use clear adjectives 'pleasant' or 'good'. Suggestions: choose appropriate adjectives to convey meaning.