电子邮件— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Жауабыңызда сөйлем құрылымы мен сөздерді дұрыс қолдану маңызды. Мысалы, 'umm' сияқты толтырғыш сөздерді азайтып, сөйлемдерді нақты әрі түсінікті етіп құрастырыңыз. Сонымен қатар, жауапты қысқа әрі нақты етіп, артық сөздерді алып тастаңыз.

範例: To be honest, I don't often send emails because there are many social media platforms where I usually communicate. However, I write emails when I need to send important information.

建議: Жауабыңызда уақытты дұрыс қолдану және сөйлем құрылымын жақсарту қажет. Мысалы, 'when I sent' орнына 'when I need to send' деп айту керек. Сонымен қатар, қосымша ақпаратты байланыстыратын сөздерді қолданыңыз, мысалы, 'for example' немесе 'such as'.

範例: I usually send emails when I need to share important information or communicate formally, for example, with my university or different companies.

建議: Жауабыңызда грамматикалық қателерді түзету және сөйлемдерді нақты әрі түсінікті етіп құрастыру қажет. Мысалы, 'sent a mail is not popular' орнына 'sending emails is not very popular' деп айту керек. Сонымен қатар, жауапты толық әрі логикалық етіп жеткізіңіз.

範例: I am not sure because I don't live in China, but I think sending emails is not very popular there, except when people need to send important information.

建議: Жауабыңызда артық толтырғыш сөздерді азайтып, сөйлемдерді нақты әрі логикалық етіп құрастырыңыз. Мысалы, 'now nowadays appear many different' орнына 'nowadays, many different' деп айту керек. Сонымен қатар, байланыстырушы сөздерді қолданып, ойыңызды толық жеткізіңіз.

範例: In my opinion, sending emails will be less popular in the future because nowadays there are many social media platforms where people can send messages quickly and easily.

× To be honest, no, because umm appeared many different social media and I write a mail notes often umm, but when I want uh, something.

✓ To be honest, no, because many different social media have appeared and I often write mail notes, but only when I want something.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'appeared' without an auxiliary verb, which is needed for the present perfect tense to indicate an action that has happened recently or affects the present. The correct form is 'have appeared'. Also, 'mail notes' is unclear but kept as is; 'write a mail notes' is ungrammatical, so corrected to 'write mail notes'.

× I think I would send mails to others when I sent important information or communicate formally like on university or different companies.

✓ I think I would send mails to others when I send important information or communicate formally, like at university or with different companies.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'sent' (past tense) after 'would send', which requires the present tense 'send' to express a conditional or habitual action. Also, prepositions 'on university' and 'different companies' are corrected to 'at university' and 'with different companies' for proper usage.

× I don't know because I don't live in China, but I think sent a mail is not popular but when you want send something important or information something.

✓ I don't know because I don't live in China, but I think sending mail is not popular except when you want to send something important or some information.

The phrase 'sent a mail' is incorrect; the gerund 'sending mail' is appropriate here to express the activity. Also, 'want send' is missing 'to' before the verb, corrected to 'want to send'. The sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× In my opinion, sending emails will be less popular in the future because now nowadays appear many different, uh, social media, many different platforms where you send a mail, send message.

✓ In my opinion, sending emails will be less popular in the future because nowadays many different social media platforms appear where you can send mail or messages.

The phrase 'now nowadays appear' is redundant and awkward; 'nowadays' alone suffices. Also, 'send a mail, send message' is corrected to 'send mail or messages' for grammatical correctness and clarity. The sentence is restructured for better flow.