电子邮件— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is relevant and provides context, but it could be more concise and natural. Avoid redundancy such as 'I do send emails' and use simpler phrases like 'I often send emails'. Also, 'others shareholders' should be 'other shareholders'. Try to limit your answer to around 3-4 sentences for clarity.

範例: Yes, I often send emails because I work as an assistant accountant. I communicate with suppliers, banks, and other shareholders mainly through email to manage work-related matters efficiently.

建議: Your answer has some grammatical errors and unclear phrases, such as 'send emails to earth' which seems incorrect. Also, avoid repeating 'stakeholders or shareholders' unnecessarily. Use linking words like 'for example' or 'such as' to make your answer more coherent. Try to be more specific about the situations when you send emails.

範例: I usually send emails when I need to request information or documents from stakeholders, or to communicate with my work colleagues about tasks and updates.

建議: Your answer is honest but lacks confidence and clarity. Instead of saying 'I don't know', try to give a general opinion based on your experience. Also, avoid repeating phrases like 'I would say'. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

範例: Although I am not certain, I believe that sending emails is popular in China because communication worldwide has become more globalized. Many people likely use emails as an effective way to communicate.

建議: Your answer addresses the question but has some grammatical mistakes and incomplete sentences. Try to structure your answer clearly with a topic sentence followed by supporting reasons. Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example' to improve coherence. Also, complete your thoughts fully.

範例: I think sending emails will become more popular in the future because it is a secure and effective method of communication. For example, emails allow people to track requests and keep evidence of conversations.

× Yes, I do send emails.

✓ Yes, I send emails.

The use of 'do' here is unnecessary for simple present tense affirmative sentences. 'I send emails' is the correct form to express habitual actions.

× the way I communicate with stakeholders such as suppliers, banks and others shareholders is by mail.

✓ the way I communicate with stakeholders such as suppliers, banks and other shareholders is by mail.

The phrase 'others shareholders' is incorrect; it should be 'other shareholders' because 'other' is the correct determiner before plural nouns.

× I do send emails to earth when I have some requests of if I need to obtain some information from a specific stakeholders or shareholders or I need to send emails to my work colleagues.

✓ I do send emails to others when I have some requests or if I need to obtain some information from specific stakeholders or shareholders, or I need to send emails to my work colleagues.

The word 'earth' is incorrect in this context; it should be 'others'. Also, 'a specific stakeholders' is incorrect because 'stakeholders' is plural and should not have the singular article 'a'. The sentence also needed commas for clarity.

× I don't know if send any mails is popular in China, I don't have any knowledge about that.

✓ I don't know if sending any mails is popular in China; I don't have any knowledge about that.

The verb 'send' should be in the gerund form 'sending' after 'if' to function as a noun. Also, a semicolon or period is needed to separate the two independent clauses.

× But I would say based on my experience and that the world is well globalized in communication, I would say that they use emails as a good way of communicating.

✓ But I would say, based on my experience and the fact that the world is well globalized in communication, that people use emails as a good way of communicating.

The phrase 'and that the world' is awkward; 'and the fact that the world' is clearer. Also, 'they' is vague; 'people' is more appropriate here.

× I would say in the future sending emails it will be more popular.

✓ I would say that in the future, sending emails will be more popular.

The original sentence has an unnecessary 'it' which disrupts sentence structure. Removing 'it' and adding 'that' improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× This is the way that many people are using is an effective method because it's a a secure method and you can get different requests, you can track the answers, you have evidence of the.

✓ This is a way that many people use; it is an effective and secure method because you can receive different requests, track the answers, and have evidence of them.

The original sentence is a run-on with repeated 'is' and 'a a'. The correction splits the sentence for clarity, removes redundancy, and completes the final phrase 'evidence of the' to 'evidence of them'.