电子邮件— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and avoid repetition and hesitations. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words (for example, "because" or "and"). Reduce filler words (uh, um).

範例: No, I rarely send emails because I usually use apps like Instagram or WhatsApp. These platforms are more instant and convenient since they allow voice messages and photo sharing.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence and organize supporting details with linking words (for example, "because" and "so"). Remove repetitions and hesitations. Provide one concise reason and a brief explanation of routine.

範例: I usually send emails in the evening because mornings are reserved for study and work. After finishing my day I feel more relaxed, so checking and replying to emails feels easier and quicker.

建議: Avoid vague statements and incorrect generalizations. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., "instant messaging apps" instead of naming WhatsApp if uncertain). Provide one clear reason and an example to support your opinion.

範例: I don't think email is very popular for daily chat in China because people prefer instant messaging apps like WeChat, which support voice messages, photos and quick group chats.

建議: Make a direct prediction sentence, then give two clear reasons linked with words like "because" or "therefore." Avoid repetition and unclear phrasing like "defensively."

範例: I think email will become less popular because people increasingly choose social media for faster communication. Also, composing formal emails takes more time, so many prefer quicker alternatives like instant messaging.

× I don't uh, often send them emails because I use social media application such as Instagram or WhatsApp instead of emails because it's more instant communication styles.

✓ I don't often send emails because I use social media applications such as Instagram or WhatsApp instead of email because they are more instant forms of communication.

Errors: 'them emails' is incorrect object order and extra pronoun; 'social media application' should be plural 'applications' when referring to more than one; 'emails' vs 'email' consistency — use 'email' as an uncountable noun when speaking generally; 'it's more instant communication styles' mixes singular/plural and uses 'it's' incorrectly. Suggestion: remove the extra pronoun, pluralize 'applications', use 'email' or 'emails' consistently, and say 'they are more instant forms of communication' for agreement and clarity.

× And also it's really convenient to communicate with others because it offers a lot of uh, services including photo service or voice message.

✓ It is also really convenient to communicate with others because they offer many services including photo sharing and voice messages.

Errors: 'it's' (singular) mismatches referent (social media applications) — use 'they'; 'a lot of uh, services' better as 'many services'; 'photo service' and 'voice message' are awkward — use 'photo sharing' and plural 'voice messages'. Suggestion: ensure subject-pronoun agreement and use natural noun phrases.

× I usually send emails in the evening because the in the morning time is really special for me.

✓ I usually send emails in the evening because the morning is really special to me.

Errors: 'the in the morning time' is redundant and ungrammatical; article 'the' is unnecessary before 'morning' in this context. Suggestion: use 'the morning' or 'in the morning' but not both; here 'the morning' or 'my mornings' is natural.

× So I want to spend my, in my morning time, uh, for my studying and work.

✓ So I want to spend my mornings studying and working.

Errors: 'spend my, in my morning time, for my studying and work' has wrong preposition 'for' and redundant phrasing. Suggestion: use 'spend my mornings' + gerund verbs without 'for' and avoid redundant 'in my morning time'.

× But, uh, but, but evening I quite tired after work, so I usually send emails, uh, which is really easy task for me.

✓ But in the evening I am quite tired after work, so I usually send emails, which are a really easy task for me.

Errors: missing verb 'am' ('I quite tired'); 'evening' needs determiner 'in the evening'; 'which is really easy task' has number mismatch — 'emails' plural requires 'are' and 'an easy task' or 'easy tasks'. Suggestion: include the correct auxiliary verb, use 'in the evening', and match singular/plural forms.

× I think sending emails is not popular in China because they usually use, uh, WhatsApp application, which is a communication, uh, social media.

✓ I think sending emails is not popular in China because people usually use apps like WhatsApp, which is a social communication platform.

Errors: 'they' ambiguous; 'WhatsApp application' unnatural — use 'apps like WhatsApp'; 'which is a communication, uh, social media' awkward word order. Suggestion: use 'people' for general reference, 'apps' plural, and 'social communication platform' or 'social media app'.

× Uh, it is quite more convenient than e-mail because it offers a lot of, uh, services like voice message or, uh, posting photos, which is really convenient.

✓ It is more convenient than email because it offers many services like voice messaging or photo posting, which is very convenient.

Errors: 'quite more convenient' is unidiomatic — use 'more convenient' or 'quite convenient'; 'voice message' should be 'voice messaging'; 'posting photos' better as 'photo posting' or 'sharing photos'; repeated 'which is really convenient' redundant. Suggestion: simplify comparative and use correct gerund/noun forms.

× I think sending e-mail is less popular in the future because people tend to use social media application more and more, and also defensively, uh, sending e-mail is uh, text quite a long time time consuming, so people prefer to use uh, social media.

✓ I think email will be less popular in the future because people tend to use social media apps more and more, and also, sending email is quite time-consuming, so people prefer to use social media.

Errors: tense and modality — use 'will be less popular' for future prediction instead of present 'is less popular in the future'; 'social media application' should be 'social media apps'; 'defensively' incorrect word; 'sending e-mail is uh, text quite a long time time consuming' is ungrammatical — use 'sending email is quite time-consuming'. Suggestion: use 'will' for future predictions, correct word choices, and remove filler words to improve clarity.