电子邮件— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答直接且能传达意思，但语法和用词有些错误，句子较长且重复。建议：1) 开头用一句明确的主题句（肯定或否定）。2) 用一到两句具体说明原因并举例。3) 注意时态与单复数（e-mail应用、receive emails）。4) 使用连接词简洁衔接，如 because / so / for example。

範例: Not really. I rarely use email in my daily life because messaging apps are more convenient. For example, I usually get official notices from my school by email, but I reply or discuss things on WeChat.

建議: 答案能回应问题但时态和表达不够准确，且有重复。建议：1) 使用正确时态（past tense for internship）。2) 给出一到两个具体场景并用连接词衔接。3) 精简句子避免冗余。

範例: During my last internship I sent emails to customers to share quotations and documents. Apart from work, I rarely use email for personal matters because I prefer instant messaging.

建議: 内容点到为止，但有语法错误、重复和表达不清。建议：1) 用更准确的词汇（applications, offer, contact customers abroad）。2) 去掉赘词和填充词（uh）。3) 给出具体对比并补充简短原因。

範例: Not really. Most people in China prefer WeChat or QQ because these apps are faster and have more features. Email is still common in companies, especially for formal communication with customers abroad.

建議: 观点明确但句子结构混乱且有多余填充词。建议：1) 用一句主题句表明观点。2) 用一两句理由支持并给出可能替代方式。3) 避免重复词汇（user friendly, although错误使用）。

範例: I think email will become less popular in the future because people prefer faster, more interactive apps. For example, messaging platforms with built-in file sharing and voice calls may replace many email functions.

× Not really, because they are not very practical in my daily life and I seldom use e-mail applications.

✓ Not really, because they are not very practical in my daily life and I seldom use e-mail applications.

原句主谓一致无明显错误。“they are not very practical”与复数主语“they”一致；“I seldom use”与主语“I”一致。此句保持原样。

× I only receive e-mail when there's some information from school officially.

✓ I only receive e-mail when there is official information from school.

原句中“from school officially”词序和用法不自然，应把副词位置调整并用形容词“official”修饰“information”。建议把“official”放在名词前，且使用完整形式“there is”。 建议：把修饰词放在被修饰名词之前，使句子更地道。

× Well, in my last internship period I use e-mail to send some quotation to my customers.

✓ Well, during my last internship I used e-mail to send some quotations to my customers.

本句描述的是过去发生的动作，应使用过去时“used”。此外，“last internship period”更自然的说法是“during my last internship”。“quotation”为可数名词，在此情境下用复数“quotations”或在前面加不定冠词。建议：谈及过去经历时动词用过去式，名词数与上下文一致。

× I think only in the workplace I would like to send emails to others.

✓ I think I would only send emails to others in the workplace.

原句中词序不自然影响主谓搭配与强调，调整为更自然的主句结构“I would only send...”。这样主语“I”和情态动词“would”搭配明确。建议：把情态结构放在主语之后，副词“only”放置于动词短语附近以表达限定。

× People in China mostly use WeChat or QQ because those application are more convenient and offers more and offer more features.

✓ People in China mostly use WeChat or QQ because those applications are more convenient and offer more features.

原句有复数名词与单数动词不一致问题，应把“application”改为复数“applications”，并且动词应与复数主语一致用“offer”。同时删去重复的“and offers more and offer more”。建议：注意名词单复数，并确保动词与主语在人称和数上一致。

× Uh, e-mail is still used, but mostly in workplace, uh, like some employees use it to contact with on the customers a role on abroad.

✓ E-mail is still used, but mostly in the workplace; for example, some employees use it to contact customers who work abroad.

原句存在多处介词和结构错误：应在“the workplace”前加定冠词“the”；“contact with”应为“contact”直接接宾语；“on the customers a role on abroad”语序和搭配混乱，应改为“customers who work abroad”或“customers abroad”。建议：注意介词固定搭配（contact + 人/机构），使用定冠词“the”表示特指场所，简化从句结构使表达清晰。

× I don't think that it would be more popular as I see it becomes less and less widespread with users globally.

✓ I don't think that it will become more popular, as I see it becoming less and less widespread among users globally.

句中时态与语气不一致。主句用现在时表示现在观点可用“don't think it will”；后半句描述趋势用进行式“becoming”更自然。“with users globally”搭配不当，改为“among users globally”。建议：主从句时态保持一致，使用正确的介词搭配“among”。

× And I think, uh, one day it will be replaced by although more convenient and uh, friendly, user friendly application in the future.

✓ And I think one day it will be replaced by a more convenient and user-friendly application in the future.

原句中“although”错误插入且影响句意，应删除。需要在可数名词“application”前加不定冠词“a”，并把形容词“user-friendly”连字符连接以构成复合形容词。建议：避免在句中插入不相关的连词，注意冠词使用和复合形容词的拼写。