电子邮件— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific reason and an example. Avoid vague phrase 'like online' and redundant wording such as 'because it is more useful than sending emails.'

範例: Not really. I mostly use messaging apps such as WeChat and WhatsApp for daily chats because they deliver messages instantly and are easier for group conversations. For example, I coordinate plans with friends in group chats rather than writing emails.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence, then provide specific contexts and a brief reason. Fix grammar (e.g., 'record on it by the words' → 'have a written record'). Use linking words to improve coherence.

範例: I usually send emails for formal matters. For instance, I email colleagues about job openings or task assignments because emails provide an official written record that everyone can refer back to.

建議: Start with a direct answer, then contrast groups with clear linking words. Avoid awkward phrasing ('it is a customary'). Be specific about who prefers which method.

範例: It depends on the group. For example, businesspeople in China still rely on emails for formal communication, while younger people prefer WeChat or WhatsApp for casual conversations and quick coordination.

建議: Provide a concise prediction with one clear reason and a specific example. Avoid vague phrases like 'the famous function' and use more precise vocabulary ('features').

範例: I think email use will decline in the near future because messaging apps keep adding features like file sharing and message search. For example, WeChat already supports voice messages, video calls and file transfers, making it more convenient for everyday use.

× No, I don't usually send emails in my daily life.

✓ No, I don't usually send emails in my daily life.

Keep as is. 'Emails' is correctly plural; no article needed. (No correction required.)

× Instead, I often use messaging apps like online and WhatsApp because it is more useful than sending emails.

✓ Instead, I often use online messaging apps like WhatsApp because they are more useful than sending emails.

Use of 'online' should modify 'messaging apps' (adjective placement). 'Like online and WhatsApp' is incorrect. Also 'it is' should agree with plural 'apps', so use 'they are'. Suggest reordering to 'online messaging apps like WhatsApp'.

× I usually send emails when I have to inform important and formal matters like job opportunities and the job assignment to my colleagues because I have to record on it by the words.

✓ I usually send emails when I have to inform colleagues of important and formal matters, such as job opportunities and assignments, because I need to record them in writing.

Problems: incorrect preposition 'inform ... to' should be 'inform ... of' (11), awkward phrasing 'important and formal matters like job opportunities and the job assignment' improved to 'such as job opportunities and assignments'. 'Record on it by the words' is ungrammatical; use 'record them in writing'. Also verb tense/patterns adjusted to present simple consistency.

× It depends.

✓ It depends.

Sentence is correct as is; 'It depends' needs no change. (Included as confirmation; no correction needed.)

× For example, if you are a business person, you have to send many emails because it is a customary for Chinese business people and entrepreneurs to interact by sending emails.

✓ For example, if you are a businessperson, you have to send many emails because it is customary for Chinese businesspeople and entrepreneurs to communicate by email.

Use 'businessperson' or 'business person' consistently and remove extra article 'a' before 'customary' ('it is customary' is correct). 'Interact by sending emails' is awkward; 'communicate by email' is more natural. Also prefer 'businesspeople' as plural and 'email' (uncountable) rather than 'emails' in that phrase.

× However, younger people tend to use messaging apps like WhatsApp.

✓ However, younger people tend to use messaging apps like WhatsApp.

Sentence is correct as is; present tense 'tend to use' is appropriate. (No correction needed.)

× I definitely believe that sending emails will be less popular in the near future because there are various types of useful and convenient messaging apps such as WhatsApp and WeChat.

✓ I definitely believe that sending emails will become less popular in the near future because there are many useful and convenient messaging apps such as WhatsApp and WeChat.

'Will be less popular' is acceptable, but 'become less popular' is more natural for a change over time. 'Various types of' is wordy; 'many' is simpler. Tense remains future; no major change beyond style improvement.

× I think the IT industries will try to improve the famous function.

✓ I think the IT industry will try to improve popular features.

Problems: 'IT industries' should be singular collective 'IT industry' or 'IT industries' without 'the' depending on meaning; 'famous function' is unnatural—use 'popular features'. Also 'features' is plural to match 'improve'. This correction keeps future intent while using natural collocations.