电子邮件— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Уменьшите количество заполнителей («uh», «actually») и повторов; начните с прямого топик‑предложения, затем добавьте 1–2 конкретных причины с логической связкой. Также избегайте грамматических ошибок и обеспечьте идеальную связку фраз (например, 'prefer to use instant messaging apps because they are faster').

範例: No, I rarely send emails. I find them too formal and time-consuming, so I prefer instant messaging apps like WhatsApp and Telegram because they allow quick, informal conversations with read receipts.

建議: Дайте более плавную структуру: начните с прямого ответа, затем используйте связки (например, 'for example', 'also') и добавьте более конкретный пример. Проверьте согласование артиклей и число (например, 'an internship', 'customer services').

範例: I usually send emails for formal matters, such as applying for a job or an internship, because they let me attach my CV and supporting documents. For example, I once emailed a company to request an internship and attached my portfolio.

建議: Уберите повторы и звуковые заполнители; сформулируйте полное предложение с правильной грамматикой и добавьте конкретный контекст или пример. Используйте связки ('especially', 'for instance') и правильную лексику ('formal messages' вместо 'message message messages').

範例: Yes, email is still popular in China, especially in formal settings. For instance, many companies use email to communicate official notices and send contracts to employees.

建議: Избегайте запинок и упростите фразу: начните с прямого мнения, затем объясните причину и приведите пример или прогноз. Исправьте структуру ('young generation' → 'the younger generation') и используйте связки ('because', 'therefore').

範例: I think emails will become less popular in the future, especially among younger people, because they prefer instant messaging apps which are faster and more convenient for everyday communication.

× I find it too formal and time consuming.

✓ I find it too formal and time-consuming.

The phrase 'time consuming' should be hyphenated when used as a compound adjective before a noun. Use 'time-consuming' to correctly modify the noun or concept. Also ensure consistency: 'too formal' and 'time-consuming' are parallel adjectives describing the same thing.

× I prefer to use uh, instant messaging apps, uh, and uh, social media platforms like Instagram, Telegram and WhatsApp to quick conversation.

✓ I prefer to use instant messaging apps and social media platforms like Instagram, Telegram, and WhatsApp for quick conversations.

After 'prefer to use' a noun phrase is expected; 'to quick conversation' is incorrect. Use 'for' plus a noun phrase: 'for quick conversations'. Also pluralize 'conversation' when speaking generally and add commas for list clarity.

× I usually send emails for formal conversations, especially when I need to apply for jobs or internship.

✓ I usually send emails for formal correspondence, especially when I need to apply for jobs or internships.

Use 'correspondence' rather than 'conversations' in the context of emails. 'Internship' needs to be plural ('internships') to match 'jobs' or use the article 'an internship'. Maintain parallel structure in the list.

× It allows me to attach my CV and other documents.

✓ It allows me to attach my CV and other documents.

This sentence is grammatically correct. No preposition error detected. 'Attach' correctly takes direct object 'my CV and other documents.'

× I also use emails for custom services.

✓ I also use emails for customer services.

'Custom services' implies tailored services; in the context of contacting companies, 'customer services' or 'customer service' is the correct collocation. Choose singular or plural depending on meaning: 'customer service' as a department, 'customer services' for multiple services.

× Yes, uh, sending emails popular in China, especially formal, uh, settings, umm, so many businesses and companies uh, send uh, uh, formal message message messages.

✓ Yes, sending emails is popular in China, especially in formal settings, so many businesses and companies send formal messages.

The original sentence lacks the verb 'is' after 'sending emails' (There be/verb missing). Remove filler words and repetitions. Use 'in formal settings' with preposition 'in' and correct plural 'messages'. Simplify 'businesses and companies' if desired.

× I reckon, uh, now, uh, sending us emails will be, uh, less popular, especially among young people, Uh, so preferences of uh, young generation focused, uh, focus on, uh, instant, uh, message.

✓ I reckon that sending emails will become less popular in the future, especially among young people, because the preferences of the younger generation focus on instant messaging.

Replace 'sending us emails' with 'sending emails' (pronoun error). Use future-oriented phrasing 'will become less popular in the future' for clarity. 'Preferences of young generation focused' is ungrammatical; use 'the preferences of the younger generation focus on' or 'are focused on'. Use 'instant messaging' rather than 'instant message.'