电子邮件— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid grammar errors and redundancy, and add one specific detail. Use linking words if you add more detail.

範例: Yes, I send emails every day because my job requires regular communication. For example, I often email clients to confirm project updates and schedule meetings, which helps keep work on track.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence, correct phrasing, and combine short fragments into one coherent answer using linking words and specific examples of timing or purpose.

範例: I usually send emails during work hours, especially in the morning and after meetings, to update clients or resolve issues. For instance, I email clients right after a call to summarize action points and deadlines.

建議: Avoid fillers and incomplete sentences. Provide a direct answer followed by a specific reason and an example, using correct collocations (e.g., "official way to communicate").

範例: Yes, email is very popular in Chinese workplaces because it is seen as the most official way to communicate about business. For example, companies often use email to send contracts, meeting minutes, and formal notices.

建議: Be explicit in your opinion and finish your thought. Support your view with reasons and a brief prediction; avoid unfinished sentences and repetition.

範例: I don't think email will become less popular because it remains the most formal method for business communication. In the future, email will likely coexist with instant messaging, but companies will still rely on email for official records and contracts.

× Yes, I send emails every day because my work requires to do it.

✓ Yes, I send emails every day because my work requires me to do so.

The phrase 'requires to do it' is ungrammatical. The verb 'require' followed by an object needs either a noun/pronoun plus infinitive (requires me to do) or a gerund (requires doing), but the natural form here is 'requires me to do so.' Also 'do so' is clearer than 'do it.' Use the object pronoun 'me.'

× I need to keep touch with my clients, my emails.

✓ I need to keep in touch with my clients via email.

The correct phrase is 'keep in touch' not 'keep touch.' Also 'my emails' is unclear; use 'via email' or 'by email' to indicate the method of communication. 'Email' as a medium is uncountable here.

× According to my job requirement, I need to send emails at work time to keep touch with my clients.

✓ According to my job requirements, I need to send emails during working hours to keep in touch with my clients.

Use plural 'requirements' when speaking generally. 'At work time' is unnatural; use 'during working hours.' Also correct 'keep touch' to 'keep in touch.' These are prepositional and word-choice issues.

× To solve the issues.

✓ I do this to solve any issues.

As written, 'To solve the issues.' is a sentence fragment lacking a subject and finite verb. Attach it to the previous sentence or make it complete: 'I do this to solve any issues.' This supplies a subject and verb and clarifies meaning.

× Yes, definitely sending emails uh, very popular in Chinese workplace because.

✓ Yes, definitely sending emails is very popular in the Chinese workplace because...

The original lacks the verb 'is' after the subject, so it's missing a linking verb. Also add article 'the' before 'Chinese workplace.' Keep 'definitely' and 'very' but ensure correct verb placement.

× Using e-mail is the most official way to talking business and work.

✓ Using email is the most official way to talk about business and work.

After 'way to' use the base form 'talk,' not the gerund 'talking.' Also 'email' is usually written without a hyphen, and 'talk about business' is the correct collocation.

× No, I don't think so.

✓ No, I don't think it will become less popular.

Context: the examiner asked whether email will be more or less popular. 'No, I don't think so.' is short but acceptable in speech; however to be clear and match the question tense use a full sentence: 'No, I don't think it will become less popular.' This clarifies the opinion and uses future structure.

× I believe e-mail is the most formal and official way to keep in touch with business clients.

✓ I believe email is the most formal and official way to keep in touch with business clients.

Mainly formatting: 'email' without hyphen is preferred. Grammar and tense are correct; this correction standardizes form. No tense change needed.

× And the.

✓ And that's why people will continue to use it.

'And the.' is an incomplete fragment. Expand it into a complete clause that finishes the speaker's thought, for example 'And that's why people will continue to use it.' Provide subject and verb for completeness.