艺术— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tốt nhưng có một số lỗi ngữ pháp và cách diễn đạt chưa tự nhiên, ví dụ như "trying improve" nên là "it helps me improve". Bạn cũng nên tránh sử dụng từ ngữ không cần thiết như "uh" và câu trả lời nên ngắn gọn hơn, tránh dài dòng.

範例: Yes, I really enjoy drawing because it is one of my favorite hobbies. It helps me relax and relieve stress after a busy day. Additionally, it improves my creativity and organizational skills since I plan and arrange the elements carefully.

建議: Bạn nên chú ý phát âm và chính tả, ví dụ từ "Edwards" có thể là lỗi đánh máy hoặc phát âm sai từ "artworks" hoặc "exhibits". Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên có cấu trúc rõ ràng hơn và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như "which inspired me a lot" nên là "which inspires me a lot".

範例: Yes, I enjoy going to galleries because they are peaceful places where I can appreciate beautiful artworks. I especially like seeing masterpieces by famous artists from around the world, which inspires me a lot.

建議: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tốt nhưng có một số lỗi nhỏ về cách dùng từ, ví dụ "deal directly into" nên là "delve into". Bạn nên sử dụng các từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và tránh lặp từ "it" quá nhiều.

範例: Yes, I want to learn more about art because I'm interested in exploring its various aspects. I would like to delve into different art forms and understand masterpieces created by famous artists worldwide. This will help me appreciate art more deeply and broaden my cultural knowledge.

建議: Câu trả lời có lỗi ngữ pháp và câu cuối bị thiếu hoặc không rõ nghĩa ("it spread my"). Bạn nên hoàn chỉnh câu và sử dụng từ đúng, ví dụ "professional looking sketch" nên là "professional-looking sketches". Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên ngắn gọn và rõ ràng hơn.

範例: Yes, I learned drawing when I was a kid because I was very interested in art. My parents enrolled me in an art class where the teacher taught me various drawing techniques and how to create professional-looking sketches. I enjoyed it a lot because it helped me improve my skills.

× Moreover, trying improve my creativity and organizational skills since I often have to plan what to draw and decide how to arrange the elements.

✓ Moreover, trying to improve my creativity and organizational skills since I often have to plan what to draw and decide how to arrange the elements.

The verb 'trying' should be followed by the infinitive form 'to improve' rather than the base form 'improve'. This is because 'try' is commonly followed by 'to' plus the base verb when expressing an attempt to do something.

× I do like going to the gallery because it is a peaceful place where I can express myself and appreciate beautiful Edwards.

✓ I do like going to the gallery because it is a peaceful place where I can express myself and appreciate beautiful artworks.

The word 'Edwards' is incorrect in this context; the intended word is likely 'artworks' or 'paintings'. Using the correct noun is essential for clarity and meaning.

× which inspired me a lot.

✓ which inspires me a lot.

The relative clause refers to a general truth or ongoing inspiration, so the present tense 'inspires' is more appropriate than the past tense 'inspired'.

× I would like to deal directly into different art forms and understand masterpieces created by famous artists from around the world.

✓ I would like to deal directly with different art forms and understand masterpieces created by famous artists from around the world.

The verb 'deal' is commonly followed by the preposition 'with' rather than 'into'. Using the correct preposition is important for grammatical accuracy.

× So my parents enrolled me in an art class where my teacher taught me various drawing techniques and how to create professional looking sketch.

✓ So my parents enrolled me in an art class where my teacher taught me various drawing techniques and how to create professional-looking sketches.

The phrase 'professional looking' should be hyphenated as 'professional-looking' when used as a compound adjective before a noun. Also, 'sketch' should be plural 'sketches' to match the context.

× I enjoyed it a lot because it helped me improve my skill and it spread my.

✓ I enjoyed it a lot because it helped me improve my skills and it broadened mine.

The noun 'skill' should be plural 'skills' to refer to multiple abilities. Also, the phrase 'it spread my' is incomplete and unclear; 'it broadened mine' (meaning 'my knowledge' or 'my abilities') is more appropriate.