电脑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答需要更直接并用一到两句概括何时使用电脑，随后用1-2句具体说明场景并用连接词使句子更连贯。注意时态一致（过去与现在对比时明确表达），并避免冗长或语法错误。可以用更贴切的词汇如 “devices” , “research”, “assignments”。

範例: I use a computer mainly for study and work. For example, I use my laptop or tablet to research information and complete assignments because they are more convenient and portable than a desktop.

建議: 回答应更简洁地给出时间点，之后用1-2句说明原因和具体活动。注意语法（'first time' 不作主语；'compulsory subject' 用单数或复数需一致；动词搭配如 'use Word' 或 'use the Internet'）。

範例: I first used a computer in primary school because computer classes were compulsory. In those lessons we learned basic skills like using Microsoft Word and browsing the Internet.

建議: 开门见山回答假设情形，然后用具体例子说明影响并使用连接词如 'for example' 或 'as a result'。改正词汇搭配（'search everything' → 'find information'；'in library' → 'in the library'）。保持句子简短清晰。

範例: Life without a computer would be much harder because finding information would take longer. For example, I would have to go to the library to look up sources and books when preparing homework, which would be less efficient.

建議: 先明确说明具体困难（例如网络不佳或硬件问题），然后解释为什么会受影响并给出例子。注意语法和词汇（'connection of Wi-Fi' → 'Wi‑Fi connection'; 'tracking e-mail' → 'checking emails'; 最后一家公司/品牌表述不清，应改为清楚句子）。

範例: It is difficult for me to use a computer when the Wi‑Fi connection is poor because I mainly rely on it to search for information and check emails. For instance, slow internet prevents me from downloading articles or sending important messages.

× When I was young I used to use the computer for project or any academic work.

✓ When I was young I used to use the computer for projects or any academic work.

句中 “project” 應為可數名詞複數或加不定冠詞。因為說的是一般情況下做各種專案，應使用複數形式 “projects” 或 “a project”。建議：遇到表示泛指多個項目時用複數。

× But nowadays I usually use the laptop or iPad, some tablet to replace the computer which is more convenient and I can use.

✓ But nowadays I usually use a laptop, an iPad or a tablet to replace a computer because they are more convenient and easier for me to use.

原句中冠詞和連詞使用不當：“the laptop or iPad, some tablet” 應分別使用不定冠詞 a/an；“which is more convenient and I can use” 結構不清，應改為 because + 主從句；此外要一致使用複數或代詞指代前述設備。建議：單指一類物品用不定冠詞，連接原因時用 because。

× When I was a primary school student, I used a computer as my first time because the computer is one of the compulsory subject for us and we have to learn how to use it, such as opening the word or opening Internet.

✓ When I was a primary school student, the first time I used a computer was at school because computer studies were one of our compulsory subjects and we had to learn how to use it, such as opening Word or accessing the Internet.

原句時態與詞形錯誤："used a computer as my first time" 表達不自然，應改為 "the first time I used a computer was..."；"is one of the compulsory subject" 主詞與名詞數不一致且時態應與過去事件一致，改為 "were one of our compulsory subjects"；"opening the word" 和 "opening Internet" 用詞不準確，應為 "opening Word"（指 Microsoft Word）和 "accessing the Internet"。建議：敘述過去事件時保持過去時態，注意主謂一致及固定片語用法。

× If my life is without a computer, I think it would be more complex to search everything.

✓ If my life were without a computer, I think it would be more complicated to search for everything.

虛擬條件句應使用與現在相反的語氣，第二類條件句主句用 would，從句應用過去式或虛擬語氣（were）；此外 “more complex to search everything” 用詞不當，應為 “more complicated” 或 “harder” 並加介詞 “search for”。建議：虛擬與假設語氣使用 were + would，注意固定搭配 “search for”。

× For example, if I need to prepare my homework, I have to search any details or information in library.

✓ For example, if I need to prepare my homework, I have to search for details or information in the library.

“search any details” 不自然，應為 “search for details” 或 “look for details”；“in library” 缺冠詞，應為 “in the library”。建議：動詞 search 後常用介詞 for，單數可數名詞前加定/不定冠詞。

× If the connection of Wi-Fi is bad, it is hard for me to use a computer because I mainly use computer for searching information or tracking e-mail.

✓ If the Wi-Fi connection is bad, it is hard for me to use a computer because I mainly use computers to search for information or check emails.

“connection of Wi-Fi” 表達不自然，應為 “Wi-Fi connection”；“use computer” 應加冠詞或用複數 “computers”；“for searching information or tracking e-mail” 用法不當，應為 “to search for information” 和 “check emails”。建議：常用名詞短語順序為 Wi-Fi connection，search 後接 for，check emails 更常用。

× If I used it with Dell network I can do this anymore.

✓ If I used it with the Dell network, I couldn't do that anymore.

條件句時態混亂：原句混合過去與現在時，且表達否定結果應用 couldn't/do not anymore 根據語境或應為 “wouldn't be able to” 。另外缺定冠詞 “the Dell network”。建議：條件從句與主句時態保持一致，對過去假設用過去時從句 + would/could。