广告— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammar and clarity: start with a clear topic sentence, correct tense and subject-verb agreement, and add one specific example. Keep it within 2–4 sentences and use linking words like “because” or “for example.”

範例: Yes. When I was a child I was especially attracted to advertisements for snacks and soft drinks because they used bright colors and fun characters. For example, a soda ad with a dancing mascot always caught my attention, which made me ask my parents to buy it.

建議: Make the response more natural and specific: state a clear topic sentence, correct article use and plural forms, and give one clear example with linking words like “for example” or “such as.”

範例: Yes, I see a lot of advertising on trains and other public transport. For example, every time I take the MRT I notice posters promoting local tours and travel agencies, which are usually placed above the seats.

建議: Clarify and simplify your opinion: use correct grammar (articles, infinitives) and explain one specific reason with a linking phrase like “because” or “so.” Avoid repetition and keep to 2–3 sentences.

範例: Personally, I don't like commercials because they often create a strong atmosphere that makes me forget whether I really need the product or just want it. As a result, I try to ignore most ads when I shop.

建議: Be specific and complete your thought: begin with a clear statement, explain why you prefer that style, and give one concrete example. Use linking words such as “because” or “for example.”

範例: I prefer advertisements with an artistic or elegant atmosphere, like those for luxury brands, because they focus on style and storytelling rather than loud sales messages. For example, a perfume commercial with cinematic visuals and soft music appeals to me.

建議: Organize your answer: start with a clear sentence, correct verb forms and word order, and give one specific example of where you see ads. Avoid filler words and finish the idea with a consequence or opinion.

範例: Yes, I see ads very often on my phone and computer. For example, when I watch videos on YouTube there are pre-roll ads and banner ads on the page, which I usually skip because they interrupt the viewing experience.

× Yes, yes, when I was child I always attracted by those advertisement related to the beverage or snacks because they knows how to attract our eyes by the fancy equipment and.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I was always attracted by those advertisements related to beverages or snacks because they know how to catch our eyes with fancy equipment.

Errors: missing article 'a' before 'child' (noun countability), 'attracted' needs passive with 'was', 'advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements', 'beverage' should be plural 'beverages' to match general reference, 'they knows' incorrect subject-verb agreement (should be 'they know'), 'attract our eyes' is awkward; use 'catch our eyes', and 'by the fancy equipment and' incomplete—replaced with 'with fancy equipment'. Suggestion: add articles where required, make nouns plural for general references, ensure subject-verb agreement, and use appropriate verbs and prepositions.

× Yes, there are so many advertisement on the train and MRT. For example when every time I took the trains I always see the post on the car showing the introduced to travel.

✓ Yes, there are so many advertisements on the train and MRT. For example, whenever I took the trains I always saw the posters on the cars introducing travel destinations.

Errors: 'on the train and MRT' is acceptable but 'advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements'. 'Every time' used twice; use 'whenever'. Tense consistency: 'took' (past) so main verb should be past 'saw' not 'see'. 'post' should be plural 'posters' and 'on the car' -> 'on the cars'. 'showing the introduced to travel' is incorrect structure; use 'introducing travel destinations'. Suggestion: ensure noun plurals, maintain consistent tense, choose correct prepositions and verb forms.

× Personally I don't like the commercials because I would be immersed by their atmosphere to forgot if I really need to buy a things or just because I want it.

✓ Personally, I don't like commercials because I get so immersed in their atmosphere that I forget whether I really need to buy something or just want it.

Errors: 'would be immersed' is an incorrect modal/context—use simple present 'get so immersed' to state habitual reaction. 'to forgot' should be 'that I forget', using correct conjunction and verb form. 'a things' incorrect article and plural; use 'something'. 'just because I want it' -> 'just want it' more natural. Suggestion: use correct tense for habitual feelings, correct verb forms and articles, and clear conjunctions ('that'/'whether').

× I like to see the advertisement with artistic atmosphere around, for example some luxury brand. They would provide a very good view and.

✓ I like advertisements that have an artistic atmosphere, for example those from some luxury brands. They provide very appealing visuals.

Errors: 'the advertisement with artistic atmosphere around' is awkward; use relative clause 'that have an artistic atmosphere'. 'some luxury brand' should be plural 'some luxury brands' or 'a luxury brand'; 'They would provide a very good view and.' is incomplete and uses conditional 'would' unnecessarily—use simple present 'They provide' and 'appealing visuals' to complete idea. Suggestion: use clear relative clauses, correct plurality, avoid unfinished sentences, and use appropriate tense/modal verbs.

× Yes, no doubt, because when I using my YouTube they always have a post to introduce the uh advertisement. I don't need it. I not sure because.

✓ Yes, no doubt, because when I use YouTube there are always ads introducing products I don't need. I'm not sure why.

Errors: 'when I using my YouTube' should be 'when I use YouTube' (use base form after 'when' for present habitual). 'they always have a post to introduce the uh advertisement' is unclear—use 'there are always ads introducing products'. 'I don't need it' -> 'I don't need them' or 'I don't need it' adjusted; combined to 'products I don't need'. 'I not sure because' needs auxiliary and explanation: 'I'm not sure why.' Suggestion: maintain correct present simple for habitual actions, use 'there' for existence of ads, ensure subject-verb forms and complete clauses.