游泳— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答は質問に直接答えていますが、文法の誤りや冗長な表現が見られます。より自然で効果的な英語表現を使い、文を簡潔にまとめることが重要です。例えば、過去形の使い方や主語の一致に注意し、感情や理由を明確に述べると良いでしょう。

範例: No, I don't like swimming because I'm not good at it. When I was a child, I took swimming lessons with my friends, but I struggled to learn. I didn't enjoy the feeling of being in the water.

建議: 回答は質問に答えていますが、表現が不自然で意味が伝わりにくい部分があります。具体的な理由を明確にし、適切な接続詞を使って論理的に話を展開しましょう。また、'practice in the house'は不自然なので、適切な場所を示す表現に直すことが必要です。

範例: Yes, I think learning to swim is difficult because many people cannot practice in a swimming pool regularly. Getting used to the feeling of water is challenging without proper practice.

建議: 回答は内容が伝わりますが、文法の誤りや不自然な表現があります。例えば、'comfortable atmosphere'の使い方や、'instead of they go to the pool'の部分を自然な英語に直しましょう。接続詞を使って文をつなげるとより効果的です。

範例: When I was a child, many people liked to swim in the sea because it had a pleasant and relaxing atmosphere that helped reduce stress. However, recently, due to the hot summers, more people prefer swimming pools instead.

建議: 回答は質問に適切に答えていますが、'uh'などの不要な言葉を避け、より流暢で自然な表現を心がけましょう。また、比較のための接続詞を使い、理由を明確に述べると良いです。

範例: Swimming in the sea is more enjoyable because you can admire beautiful landscapes and see marine life like fish and shellfish. In contrast, pools lack this natural experience, so I always prefer swimming in the sea.

× he was a very good at swimming in the pool

✓ he was very good at swimming in the pool

The article 'a' is incorrectly used before the adjective 'very good'. In English, 'very good' is an adjective phrase and does not require an article before it. The correct form is 'he was very good at swimming in the pool.'

× I was not good at swim

✓ I was not good at swimming

The verb 'swim' should be in the gerund form 'swimming' after the preposition 'at'. Using the base form 'swim' is incorrect here. The correct phrase is 'good at swimming.'

× I don't. I didn't like the feeling.

✓ I don't like it. I didn't like the feeling.

The sentence 'I don't.' is incomplete and unclear. It should be 'I don't like it.' to express the present dislike. The second sentence is correct but should be connected logically. The correction improves clarity and grammatical completeness.

× it's very difficult for many people to practice in the house

✓ it's very difficult for many people to practice at home

The preposition 'in the house' is less natural when referring to practicing a skill at one's residence. The correct preposition is 'at home' to indicate location in this context.

× How to feel and get used to the water is very difficult to get the practice in home.

✓ How to feel and get used to the water is very difficult to practice at home.

The phrase 'get the practice in home' is awkward and incorrect. It should be 'practice at home' to correctly express the idea of practicing in one's home environment.

× many people liked to go to the sea, which was very pleasant and comfortable atmosphere

✓ many people liked to go to the sea, which had a very pleasant and comfortable atmosphere

The phrase 'which was very pleasant and comfortable atmosphere' is missing an article before 'atmosphere' and the verb 'was' should be 'had' to correctly describe the sea possessing an atmosphere. The correct form is 'which had a very pleasant and comfortable atmosphere.'

× so that it can reduce the stress of ours

✓ so that it can reduce our stress

The phrase 'the stress of ours' is incorrect. The possessive pronoun 'our' should be used directly before the noun 'stress' to indicate possession. The correct phrase is 'our stress.'

× Recently, people don't like to go to the sea because the summer is too hot, instead of they go to the pool.

✓ Recently, people don't like to go to the sea because the summer is too hot; instead, they go to the pool.

The phrase 'instead of they go to the pool' is incorrect. 'Instead' should be used as an adverb with a semicolon or period before it, not 'instead of' followed by a clause. The correct form is 'instead, they go to the pool.'

× you can't do it on the pool

✓ you can't do it in the pool

The correct preposition to use with 'pool' is 'in' because one is inside the pool when swimming. 'On the pool' is incorrect in this context.