游泳— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer lacks clarity and contains redundancy. Try to respond directly and clearly, avoiding hesitation and repeated words. Also, provide a concise explanation with relevant details to make your answer more natural and effective.

範例: No, I don't like swimming because I had a bad experience when I was 10 years old during a school swimming lesson. Since then, I have felt uncomfortable in the water.

建議: Your answer is repetitive and unclear. Focus on giving a direct response with clear reasons, and avoid filler words. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

範例: Yes, learning to swim is difficult for me because I struggle with breathing underwater and lack confidence in my swimming skills.

建議: Your answer is generally relevant but could be improved by using more precise vocabulary and better linking words. Avoid vague phrases like 'I don't know about the world' and try to be more specific.

範例: People in my country like to swim either in the ocean, such as the East Ocean which has clean water, or in swimming pools because they offer better facilities and clearer water.

建議: Your answer addresses the question but lacks fluency and precise vocabulary. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repetition. Also, provide more detailed comparisons.

範例: There are some differences between swimming in a pool and in the sea. For instance, swimming in the sea is more enjoyable because you can see marine animals, which makes the experience feel more natural.

× I don't do that swimming because I have some trauma.

✓ I don't do swimming because I have some trauma.

The verb 'do' should be followed directly by the gerund 'swimming' without the article 'that'. Using 'that' here is incorrect and unnecessary.

× When I was, uh, 10 years old, my school, uh, visited the swimming pool to learn swimming for students, but I don't do that well.

✓ When I was 10 years old, my school visited the swimming pool to learn swimming for students, but I didn't do that well.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly. Since the event happened in the past, 'don't do' should be changed to 'didn't do' to maintain past tense consistency.

× I don't good at swimming.

✓ I am not good at swimming.

The adjective 'good' needs a linking verb such as 'am' to form a correct sentence. 'Don't good' is grammatically incorrect.

× I don't breathe into the water.

✓ I don't breathe underwater.

The correct preposition to describe breathing while submerged is 'underwater', not 'into the water'.

× So it's very difficult, umm, swimming around swimming skills.

✓ So it's very difficult to swim and learn swimming skills.

The phrase 'swimming around swimming skills' is unclear and incorrect. It should be rephrased to express difficulty in swimming and acquiring swimming skills.

× While some prefer oceans, like East ocean is very good for swimming.

✓ While some prefer oceans, like the East Ocean, which is very good for swimming.

The proper noun 'East Ocean' should be preceded by the definite article 'the' and the sentence structure improved for clarity.

× others like more swimming pool because it's more clear and a good facility to swimming.

✓ others prefer swimming pools because they are clearer and have good facilities for swimming.

'Like more swimming pool' is incorrect; 'prefer swimming pools' is better. Also, 'more clear' should be 'clearer', and 'facility to swimming' should be 'facilities for swimming'.

× I think there are a little, a little difference between swimming in the pool and in the sea because, for example, swimming in the sea gives more realistic and enjoyable.

✓ I think there is a little difference between swimming in the pool and in the sea because, for example, swimming in the sea is more realistic and enjoyable.

'There are a little difference' is incorrect; 'difference' is singular, so 'there is a little difference' is correct. Also, 'gives more realistic and enjoyable' should be 'is more realistic and enjoyable'.

× We can see, really see animals.

✓ We can really see animals.

The adverb 'really' should directly modify the verb 'see' without a comma separating them.

× So it makes more feel realistic, yeah.

✓ So it feels more realistic, yeah.

The phrase 'makes more feel realistic' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'feels more realistic'.