游泳— Part 1 評分報告

× Absolutely, as I am a big fan of swimming and in the summer I go to swimming.

✓ Absolutely, as I am a big fan of swimming and in the summer I go swimming.

The phrase 'go to swimming' is incorrect because after 'go' when referring to activities, the verb should be in the '-ing' form without 'to'. The correct form is 'go swimming'.

× Approximately twice a week and I enjoyed this joke and focus in the water.

✓ Approximately twice a week and I enjoy this joke and focus in the water.

The sentence mixes past tense 'enjoyed' with present context. Since the student is talking about a habitual action, present tense 'enjoy' should be used. Also, 'joke' seems incorrect in context; likely intended 'jog' or 'joke' is a mistake, but as per instructions, only grammar corrections are made.

× At first I think it is difficult, but if you get the. If you know some tips, you will the learning of swimming is become easier.

✓ At first I think it is difficult, but if you know some tips, learning to swim becomes easier.

The original sentence is fragmented and contains incomplete clauses. The phrase 'if you get the.' is incomplete and 'you will the learning of swimming is become easier' is ungrammatical. The corrected sentence combines ideas clearly and uses proper verb forms.

× And my coach is great.

✓ My coach is great.

Starting a sentence with 'And' is generally informal and can be considered a sentence structure error. Removing 'And' improves formality and clarity.

× People in my country like to go swimming in indoor swimming pool because you can avoid sunburn and although it is rainy, you can still swim.

✓ People in my country like to go swimming in indoor swimming pools because you can avoid sunburn and, although it is rainy, you can still swim.

The phrase 'in indoor swimming pool' lacks the definite article 'an' or plural form. Since it refers generally, plural 'indoor swimming pools' is appropriate. Also, a comma is added before 'although' for clarity.

× I think the danger degree is different. Dangerous degree is different because in the sea you can you may more dangerous because there are a lot of unknown.

✓ I think the level of danger is different. It is more dangerous in the sea because there are many unknown factors.

The original sentences are awkward and contain redundancy and incomplete phrases like 'you can you may more dangerous'. The correction clarifies meaning and corrects sentence structure.