游泳— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise and correct grammar while giving a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repeating phrases like "used to" twice and correct small errors (e.g., "on the weekends"). Use a linking word to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, I love swimming. When I was young, I spent whole weekends swimming in the river near my house, which helped me become confident in the water.

建議: Start with a clear direct answer, then give one or two coherent reasons with correct grammar and linking words. Avoid double negatives and incorrect verb forms (use "swam" or "have swum"), and remove confusing phrases.

範例: No, I don't think it's very difficult. I learned by practicing a lot when I was young, and because I taught myself through trial and error, I became comfortable in the water.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence, then use linking words to compare city and village habits. Reduce fillers ("uh", "umm") and be more specific (e.g., "riverside", "public pools"). Limit to two to three concise sentences.

範例: People usually swim in public pools in cities, while those in rural areas often swim in nearby rivers. City pools are more convenient and safe, whereas river swimming is cheaper and more adventurous.

建議: Answer directly by acknowledging your limited experience, then offer a reasonable comparison based on general knowledge. Use correct sentence endings and avoid trailing off. Provide one clear contrast with linking words (e.g., "however").

範例: I haven't swum in the sea because Nepal is landlocked, so I only know pools. However, generally pool swimming is calmer and safer, while sea swimming is more challenging because of currents and waves.

× When I was young I used to go to the river nearby my house and used to swim all day in the weekends.

✓ When I was young, I used to go to the river near my house and would swim all day on weekends.

The original sentence has minor word choice and preposition issues combined with past-tense narration. Use 'near' instead of 'nearby' as an adjective before 'my house' and 'on weekends' is the correct preposition for habitual actions in past. Using 'would swim' or keeping 'used to swim' avoids repeating 'used to'. Also add a comma after the introductory phrase for clarity.

× No, it's not that much difficult as I have swimmed a lot of times in when I was young and I don't know nobody teach me it's I just do it on my own.

✓ No, it wasn't that difficult because I swam many times when I was young, and I didn't have anyone to teach me; I just learned on my own.

Multiple errors: tense consistency (use past 'wasn't' to match 'when I was young'), incorrect past participle 'swimmed' should be 'swam', wrong preposition order removed, double negative 'I don't know nobody teach me' incorrect—use 'I didn't have anyone to teach me', and 'I just do it on my own' should be past 'I just learned on my own'. Also use a semicolon or conjunction to join independent clauses.

× In my country mainly people go to the Riverside for swimming and whenever uh, in city areas mostly people go to the swimming pool, local pool around or nearby their house.

✓ In my country, most people go to the riverside to swim, and in cities people mostly go to a nearby public swimming pool.

Preposition and article choices: 'go to the riverside' and 'to swim' are correct collocations. Use 'most people' instead of 'mainly people'. 'In city areas' should be 'in cities' and 'a nearby public swimming pool' is clearer than 'local pool around or nearby their house'. Also add comma after introductory phrase.

× But in village areas it's very umm, good to swim in local rivers and it's very exciting and amazing.

✓ But in villages it is common and enjoyable to swim in local rivers; it is very exciting and fun.

'Village areas' is better as 'villages' and avoid informal fillers. Use 'is common and enjoyable' for clarity. 'Amazing' is fine but 'fun' is more natural with 'exciting'. Also ensure subject-verb agreement and concise phrasing.

× As I am from Nepal, it's landlocked country, there is no sea around us and even I haven't been to any beach so I don't know how to swim in the sea.

✓ As I am from Nepal, it is a landlocked country, so there is no sea nearby and I have never been to a beach, so I don't know what it is like to swim in the sea.

Add the article 'a' before 'landlocked country'. Combine clauses with 'so' for cause-effect. Use 'nearby' instead of 'around us' and correct present perfect 'I have never been' for experience. Use 'I don't know what it is like to swim' to describe unfamiliar experience.

× I don't know like the experience of swimming in sea, but I definitely know and the swimming pool it's amazing.

✓ I don't know what the experience of swimming in the sea is like, but I do know that swimming pools are amazing.

Use 'what...is like' to ask/describe an experience. Include the article 'the' before 'sea'. Change 'I definitely know and the swimming pool it's amazing' to 'I do know that swimming pools are amazing' for grammatical structure and tense consistency.