朋友— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Améliorez la fluidité et la clarté en évitant les répétitions et en corrigeant la grammaire. Par exemple, utilisez des phrases plus courtes et des mots de liaison pour rendre la réponse plus naturelle.

範例: Yes, I have three friends whom I've known for over ten years. We attended primary, secondary, and high school together. Although we now study at different universities and rarely meet, we keep in touch through social media.

建議: Utilisez des mots de liaison pour organiser vos idées et évitez les erreurs grammaticales. Soyez plus précis dans la description des activités.

範例: We usually hang out and have a meal together. Afterwards, we often visit a photo booth to take pictures and capture memories. Then, we go to a café where we take photos of each other and chat to strengthen our friendship.

建議: Corrigez les erreurs grammaticales et améliorez la cohérence en utilisant des mots de liaison. Soyez plus précis dans la description des lieux et activités.

範例: We usually meet at a café or cinema. After that, we explore different parts of the city together. Sometimes, we spend the night at each other's houses.

建議: Améliorez la grammaire et la structure des phrases. Utilisez des mots de liaison pour rendre la réponse plus fluide et naturelle.

範例: Not often, because I'm a homebody and prefer spending time alone or with my family. However, when I do go out with friends, I really enjoy it and try to make the experience memorable.

建議: Clarifiez vos idées et corrigez les erreurs grammaticales. Utilisez des phrases complètes et des mots de liaison pour exprimer clairement l'importance des amis.

範例: I believe friends are a very important part of everyone's life because we can share moments and stories together. Since most of my friends are my age, it's easy to relate and communicate with them.

建議: Améliorez la clarté et la grammaire. Utilisez des phrases complètes et évitez les répétitions pour exprimer votre préférence clairement.

範例: I have a group of four close female friends with whom I share my daily experiences and challenges. Therefore, I prefer spending time with a group of friends rather than just one person.

建議: Corrigez la grammaire et améliorez la fluidité en utilisant des mots de liaison. Soyez plus précis dans la description des activités à la maison.

範例: Yes, I would definitely invite my friends to my home because I'm a homebody. We enjoy indoor activities like baking cookies or watching movies together on Netflix, which is really fun.

× We spend like primary school, secondary school, high school together and now that we are at different university we rarely see each other but we still keep in touch and stay connected through social media.

✓ We spent primary school, secondary school, and high school together and now that we are at different universities we rarely see each other but we still keep in touch and stay connected through social media.

The verb 'spend' should be in the past tense 'spent' to match the past time frame of attending schools together. Also, 'university' should be plural 'universities' because it refers to different institutions. This correction ensures proper tense and plural form usage.

× We spend like primary school, secondary school, high school together and now that we are at different university we rarely see each other but we still keep in touch and stay connected through social media.

✓ We spent primary school, secondary school, and high school together and now that we are at different universities we rarely see each other but we still keep in touch and stay connected through social media.

The phrase 'spend like' is incorrect; 'spend' is not used with 'like' in this context. Instead, simply listing the schools attended together is appropriate. Also, 'at different university' should be 'at different universities' to indicate multiple institutions.

× We usually hang out together, spend a meal and then go to the photo booth an take a photos to collect our memories together.

✓ We usually hang out together, have a meal and then go to the photo booth and take photos to collect our memories together.

The phrase 'spend a meal' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'have a meal'. Also, 'an take a photos' contains errors: 'an' should be 'and', and 'a photos' should be 'photos' without 'a' because 'photos' is plural.

× Then we can go to the cafe's taking photos of each other and we also gossip a little bit to stay stronger.

✓ Then we can go to the cafe taking photos of each other and we also gossip a little bit to stay closer.

The use of 'cafe's' is incorrect; it should be 'cafe' without the possessive apostrophe. Also, 'stay stronger' is not idiomatic in this context; 'stay closer' or 'stay connected' is more appropriate.

× Most of the time we meet. Each other at a cafe or at a cinema and then we go to different places to explore the city's together.

✓ Most of the time we meet each other at a cafe or at a cinema and then we go to different places to explore the cities together.

The period after 'meet' is incorrect and breaks the sentence unnecessarily. 'Each other' should be part of the same sentence. Also, 'city's' is a possessive form but the plural 'cities' is needed here.

× But sometimes with spend time at each others house to stay a night together.

✓ But sometimes we spend time at each other's house to stay a night together.

'With' is incorrect here; it should be 'we'. Also, 'each others house' should be 'each other's house' to show possession correctly.

× Not really because I'm a homebody so I enjoy spend time alone or with my family rather than going out with friends.

✓ Not really because I'm a homebody so I enjoy spending time alone or with my family rather than going out with friends.

After 'enjoy', the verb should be in the '-ing' form, so 'spend' should be 'spending'.

× But once that I've hang out I really. Enjoy my time with my friends to make it more memorable an.

✓ But once that I've hung out I really enjoy my time with my friends to make it more memorable.

The verb 'hang' in present perfect should be 'hung' (past participle). Also, 'Enjoy' should not be capitalized mid-sentence. The sentence ending 'an' is incomplete and should be removed.

× I think friends at a really important part of every, everyone's life because we can share moments together, share our stories shrinking out.

✓ I think friends are a really important part of everyone's life because we can share moments together and share our stories, strengthening our friendship.

'At' should be 'are' to form the correct verb phrase. 'Every, everyone's' is redundant; 'everyone's' suffices. 'Shrinking out' is incorrect; the intended phrase is likely 'strengthening our friendship'.

× Friendship because mostly at my friends are my age so I can easily share.

✓ Friendship because most of my friends are my age so I can easily share.

'Mostly at my friends' is incorrect; it should be 'most of my friends'. This corrects the pronoun and preposition usage.

× Actually, I have a group of four girls. Who is my girlfriend's that? I can share all my stories an my situation that I have to face in everyday's life so. R like to spend time with a group group of friends.

✓ Actually, I have a group of four girls who are my girlfriends that I can share all my stories and my situations that I have to face in everyday life with, so I like to spend time with a group of friends.

The sentence fragments and pronoun usage are incorrect. 'Who is my girlfriend's that?' should be 'who are my girlfriends that'. 'An' should be 'and'. 'Everyday's' should be 'everyday' as an adjective. 'R like' should be 'I like'. Also, 'group group' is a repetition and should be 'group'.

× Yes, of course I would like to invite my friends to my home because I'm home body so we can spend time doing. In house activities like baking cookies or watch movies together on Netflix, it's really interesting.

✓ Yes, of course I would like to invite my friends to my home because I'm a homebody so we can spend time doing in-house activities like baking cookies or watching movies together on Netflix, it's really interesting.

'Home body' should be 'a homebody' (noun). 'Doing. In house activities' should be 'doing in-house activities' without a period. 'Watch movies' should be 'watching movies' to maintain parallel verb form after 'doing'.