朋友— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer wa ni eigo de shizen de wakariyasui you ni shite kudasai. Tatoeba, 'I have a friend named Himal Gautam, who is also my cousin. We have known each other since we were born because we lived in the same house until we were 18. Now, he lives in Japan, but we often talk and share details about our daily lives.' to iu fuu ni, fukusu no bun de rikai shi yasui you ni setsumei shite kudasai.

範例: I have a friend named Himal Gautam, who is also my cousin. We have known each other since we were born because we lived in the same house until we were 18. Now, he lives in Japan, but we often talk and share details about our daily lives.

建議: Answer wa motto seikaku ni shite, fukusu no bun de setsumei shite kudasai. Rikai shi yasui you ni, 'We usually go to a nearby coffee shop to chat while drinking coffee. Sometimes, we play sports like basketball and football, which helps us enjoy quality time together.' to iu fuu ni setsumei shite kudasai.

範例: We usually go to a nearby coffee shop to chat while drinking coffee. Sometimes, we play sports like basketball and football, which helps us enjoy quality time together.

建議: Answer wa bunpou to eigo no shizen-sa ni chuumoku shite kudasai. Tatoeba, 'We often meet at a nearby coffee shop or at each other's homes, depending on our schedules. Usually, we chat over coffee.' to iu fuu ni, rikai shi yasui you ni setsumei shite kudasai.

範例: We often meet at a nearby coffee shop or at each other's homes, depending on our schedules. Usually, we chat over coffee.

建議: Answer wa motto seikaku ni shite, fukusu no bun de setsumei shite kudasai. Tatoeba, 'Currently, I am very busy with work, so I rarely go out with my friends. However, on weekends or when I have free time, we like to meet, watch movies, and discuss our life plans.' to iu fuu ni setsumei shite kudasai.

範例: Currently, I am very busy with work, so I rarely go out with my friends. However, on weekends or when I have free time, we like to meet, watch movies, and discuss our life plans.

建議: Answer wa bunpou to eigo no shizen-sa ni chuumoku shite kudasai. Tatoeba, 'Friends are very important to me because I left home when I was young. They have played an important role in my personal development. I admire them because they always support me, and I enjoy talking with them.' to iu fuu ni setsumei shite kudasai.

範例: Friends are very important to me because I left home when I was young. They have played an important role in my personal development. I admire them because they always support me, and I enjoy talking with them.

建議: Answer wa motto seikaku ni shite, fukusu no bun de setsumei shite kudasai. Tatoeba, 'I prefer spending time with a group of friends because we can joke around and play sports together. Since I am naturally talkative, I find group activities more enjoyable.' to iu fuu ni setsumei shite kudasai.

範例: I prefer spending time with a group of friends because we can joke around and play sports together. Since I am naturally talkative, I find group activities more enjoyable.

建議: Answer wa bunpou to eigo no shizen-sa ni chuumoku shite kudasai. Tatoeba, 'Yes, I like to invite friends to my home on special occasions like birthdays or weekend nights. We usually play video games and watch sports together, which is very enjoyable.' to iu fuu ni setsumei shite kudasai.

範例: Yes, I like to invite friends to my home on special occasions like birthdays or weekend nights. We usually play video games and watch sports together, which is very enjoyable.

建議: Answer wa motto seikaku ni shite, rikai shi yasui you ni setsumei shite kudasai. Tatoeba, 'Yes, there is a difference. When I was in college, we met near the campus. Now, we usually meet at coffee shops or at someone's home.' to iu fuu ni setsumei shite kudasai.

範例: Yes, there is a difference. When I was in college, we met near the campus. Now, we usually meet at coffee shops or at someone's home.

建議: Answer wa bunpou to eigo no shizen-sa ni chuumoku shite kudasai. Tatoeba, 'Some places are suitable for meeting because they allow social activities, like shopping malls. Others, like libraries, are not suitable because they are meant for quiet study.' to iu fuu ni setsumei shite kudasai.

範例: Some places are suitable for meeting because they allow social activities, like shopping malls. Others, like libraries, are not suitable because they are meant for quiet study.

× Yes, I have a friend with my cousin, his name is Himal Gautam.

✓ Yes, I have a friend who is my cousin, his name is Himal Gautam.

The phrase 'a friend with my cousin' is incorrect because 'with' is not the right preposition to describe the relationship. It should be 'a friend who is my cousin' to correctly express the relationship between the speaker and Himal Gautam.

× We were friends since since our birth as we live in the same house while we were young till the age of 18.

✓ We have been friends since our birth as we lived in the same house while we were young until the age of 18.

The phrase 'We were friends since' is incorrect because 'since' requires the present perfect tense 'have been'. Also, 'live' should be in past tense 'lived' to match the past time frame. 'Till' is better replaced with 'until' for formality.

× We used to talk telly we to share every details of our daily life.

✓ We used to talk daily to share every detail of our daily life.

The phrase 'talk telly we' is incorrect and unclear. It should be 'talk daily'. Also, 'every details' is incorrect; 'every' should be followed by a singular noun 'detail'.

× We usually go to the nearby coffee shop and we used to have talk while drinking our coffee.

✓ We usually go to the nearby coffee shop and we used to talk while drinking our coffee.

The phrase 'have talk' is incorrect; the correct form is simply 'talk' without 'have'.

× Sometimes we go to play some sports such as basketball and football and and we have quality time over there.

✓ Sometimes we go to play some sports such as basketball and football and we have quality time there.

The phrase 'and and' is a repetition error and should be corrected to a single 'and'. Also, 'over there' can be simplified to 'there' for naturalness.

× Either we meet on the nearby coffee shop or we went to is another home.

✓ Either we meet at the nearby coffee shop or we go to another home.

The preposition 'on' is incorrect with 'coffee shop'; it should be 'at'. Also, 'we went to is another home' is incorrect; it should be 'we go to another home' to maintain present tense consistency.

× You know, that's depend upon the day or the work schedule of hours.

✓ You know, that depends upon the day or the work schedule of hours.

The pronoun 'that's' (that is) is singular and requires the verb 'depends' with an 's' to agree in third person singular.

× We usually before going to coffee and have chatting over there.

✓ We usually go for coffee and have a chat there.

The phrase 'before going to coffee' is incorrect; it should be 'go for coffee'. Also, 'have chatting' is incorrect; it should be 'have a chat'.

× it's very hard to find free time to often go to out with my friends.

✓ it's very hard to find free time to often go out with my friends.

The phrase 'go to out' is incorrect; 'go out' is the correct form. The modal verb 'to' is unnecessary here.

× But whenever there is a chance or like in the weekend, we'd like to meet up and watch some movies and talk our life plans.

✓ But whenever there is a chance, like on the weekend, we'd like to meet up, watch some movies, and talk about our life plans.

The preposition 'in the weekend' is incorrect; it should be 'on the weekend'. Also, 'talk our life plans' needs the preposition 'about'.

× They are very important to me because this I have left my home while I was young.

✓ They are very important to me because I left my home when I was young.

The phrase 'this I have left my home' is incorrect and unclear. It should be 'I left my home'. Also, 'while I was young' is better expressed as 'when I was young'.

× I have always been surrounded by my friends, so they have some important role for my creditor development.

✓ I have always been surrounded by my friends, so they have an important role in my character development.

The phrase 'important role for' should be 'important role in'. Also, 'creditor development' is incorrect; it should be 'character development'.

× So I always admire them, they always supports me and I like to talk to.

✓ So I always admire them, they always support me and I like to talk to them.

The verb 'supports' should be 'support' to agree with the plural subject 'they'. Also, 'talk to' needs an object, so 'them' is added.

× Well, I prefer to spend time with a group of friends because we can roast each other or either.

✓ Well, I prefer to spend time with a group of friends because we can roast each other or so.

The phrase 'or either' is incorrect here; 'or so' or 'or something like that' would be more appropriate.

× We can also play in certain sports.

✓ We can also play certain sports.

The preposition 'in' is unnecessary here; 'play certain sports' is correct.

× Since I have such only natural and talkative nature, I prefer to be a group of friends.

✓ Since I have such a natural and talkative nature, I prefer to be in a group of friends.

The phrase 'such only natural' is incorrect; it should be 'such a natural'. Also, 'prefer to be a group' is incorrect; it should be 'prefer to be in a group'.

× Yes, if there is certain occasion, I always prefer to have some friends with me.

✓ Yes, if there is a certain occasion, I always prefer to have some friends with me.

The article 'a' is missing before 'certain occasion'.

× It's such as like birthdays or some weekend night I asked my friends to come over.

✓ It's such as birthdays or some weekend nights I ask my friends to come over.

The phrase 'such as like' is redundant; 'such as' or 'like' alone is sufficient. Also, 'asked' should be 'ask' to maintain present tense, and 'night' should be plural 'nights'.

× We used to play video games and watch some sports.

✓ We used to play video games and watch some sports.

No correction needed; sentence is correct.

× That's why we enjoy ourselves over there.

✓ That's why we enjoy ourselves there.

The preposition 'over' is unnecessary; 'there' is sufficient.

× Yeah, there is a lot of difference when I meet my friends now and before, while I was in college, we used to meet up around the nearby, around the college premises.

✓ Yeah, there is a lot of difference between when I meet my friends now and before. While I was in college, we used to meet up around the nearby college premises.

The phrase 'a lot of difference when' should be 'a lot of difference between'. Also, the sentence was run-on and needed to be split for clarity.

× Now there would be a coffee shop.

✓ Now it would be a coffee shop.

The pronoun 'there' is incorrect here; 'it' refers to the place.

× We used to meet up there, but now we used to certainly meet at different locations or someone's home.

✓ We used to meet up there, but now we certainly meet at different locations or someone's home.

The phrase 'used to certainly meet' is incorrect; 'certainly meet' is correct for present habitual action.

× It is because the different places have different features such as we can meet up in shopping mall and other different kind of of places where normal activities can be done but we cannot meet up with places like library because they are for another purpose.

✓ It is because different places have different features, such as we can meet up in a shopping mall and other kinds of places where normal activities can be done, but we cannot meet in places like a library because they are for another purpose.

The phrase 'in shopping mall' needs an article 'a'. 'Kind of of' is a repetition error and should be 'kinds of'. 'Meet up with places' is incorrect; it should be 'meet in places'. Also, 'library' needs an article 'a'.