朋友— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答不够清晰，语法错误较多，表达不自然。建议简化句子结构，明确表达朋友的身份和关系，避免使用不确定的词汇。

範例: Yes, I have a friend whom I have known for many years. He is my father's close friend's son, and we live near each other, so we meet almost every day.

建議: 句子结构混乱，表达不连贯。建议分开描述过去和现在的活动，使用连接词使表达更流畅。

範例: During our school days, we often did homework together. Now, we usually play games and share interesting things like music or movies, which really strengthens our friendship.

建議: 表达不准确，词汇使用错误（如consume），语法混乱。建议使用正确的动词，清晰表达见面地点和关系。

範例: He often comes to my home, or I visit his house. We have been classmates from primary school to high school, so we can meet every day.

建議: 表达不完整且有错误（如play in a cat），句子不连贯。建议具体说明过去和现在的活动，避免错误词汇。

範例: Yes, when we were children, we often went to natural places to play, like parks. Recently, we usually go out to explore interesting places.

建議: 表达混乱，代词使用错误，语法不正确。建议明确表达朋友的重要性，使用正确的代词和句子结构。

範例: He is my best friend because he has been with me for a long time, from primary school to high school. He has witnessed many important moments in my life.

建議: 表达不够自然，语法错误，句子不完整。建议简洁表达偏好并说明原因，避免重复和错误。

範例: I prefer spending time with one friend because I enjoy a peaceful and quiet atmosphere. Being in a group can be noisy, which I don't like.

建議: 句子结构混乱，代词使用错误，表达不清晰。建议简化句子，明确表达邀请朋友的原因和情景。

範例: Yes, I often invite my friends to my home, especially for dinner. My parents enjoy cooking delicious food, and I like sharing it with my friends.

建議: 表达基本清楚，但语法和用词有误。建议调整句子结构，使用正确时态和词汇。

範例: During my childhood, I often invited my friends to my home because I lived with my family. But now, as a postgraduate student living on campus, we usually meet in public places.

建議: 表达不完整且有多处错误（如meat应为meet，重复词）。建议完整表达观点，使用正确词汇和句子结构。

範例: In my opinion, the atmosphere is the main reason why some places are suitable for meeting. For example, a quiet atmosphere is very suitable for meeting and chatting.

× I have afraid called the He is my father's close friend's son.

✓ I am afraid he is my father's close friend's son.

这里错误地使用了 'have afraid called'，正确表达应该是 'I am afraid'，表示‘我担心’或‘我害怕’。动词 'have' 不应与 'afraid' 连用。

× His house is near to mine, so actually we almost meet every day.

✓ His house is near mine, so actually we almost meet every day.

'near' 后面不需要加介词 'to'，直接加名词即可。

× During the studying period, we often do homework together than currently we always play together and share some interesting things like music or movies which really strengthen.

✓ During the study period, we often did homework together, but currently we always play together and share some interesting things like music or movies which really strengthen our friendship.

'During the studying period' 应改为 'During the study period'，'than' 用错，应为 'but' 连接两个对比句子。

× He, uh, he always comes to my home or I consume to his home.

✓ He always comes to my home or I go to his home.

'consume to his home' 是错误表达，应使用 'go to his home'。

× And uh, we also the classmates during the primary school to high school.

✓ And uh, we were also classmates from primary school to high school.

缺少动词 'were'，且 'the classmates' 应为 'classmates'，表示我们是同学。

× So actually we can meet everyday.

✓ So actually we can meet every day.

'everyday' 是形容词，表示‘日常的’，此处应使用副词短语 'every day'，表示‘每天’。

× Yes, when we were children we often go out the natural places to play, such as play in a cat, but recently we always go out to to find some interesting things.

✓ Yes, when we were children we often went out to natural places to play, such as playing in a park, but recently we always go out to find some interesting things.

过去时态中，动词应为 'went'，'play in a cat' 应为 'playing in a park'，且 'to to' 是重复错误。

× She is my best friend I can say because he he company the me a long time during the primary school to high school he witnessed a lot of things happened on me so.

✓ She is my best friend, I can say, because she has accompanied me a long time from primary school to high school. She witnessed a lot of things that happened to me.

代词使用错误，'he he company the me' 应为 'she has accompanied me'，且句子结构混乱，需要分句。

× Actually, I prefer to spend the time with a friend because I tend to be a peaceful and quiet atmosphere.

✓ Actually, I prefer to spend time with a friend because I tend to prefer a peaceful and quiet atmosphere.

'spend the time' 应为 'spend time'，且句子中缺少动词，需补充 'prefer'。

× When I was in Group of people, the atmosphere may be noisy so it will terribly.

✓ When I am in a group of people, the atmosphere may be noisy, so it will be terrible.

'Group' 前应加冠词 'a'，'terribly' 应为形容词 'terrible'，且时态应为现在时。

× Yes, I always invite my friends to my home and especially invite their having dinner with my family because my parents are glad to make the making delicious food.

✓ Yes, I always invite my friends to my home and especially invite them to have dinner with my family because my parents are glad to make delicious food.

'their having dinner' 应为 'them to have dinner'，'make the making delicious food' 语法错误，应为 'make delicious food'。

× Actually this during my childhood I often invited them to my home because I live at home.

✓ Actually, during my childhood I often invited them to my home because I lived at home.

描述过去的情况，'live' 应改为过去式 'lived'。

× But recently I study as a post graduate student so I live in the school so we often meet in the public place.

✓ But recently I am studying as a postgraduate student, so I live at school and we often meet in public places.

'study' 应用现在进行时 'am studying'，'in the school' 应为 'at school'，'public place' 应为复数 'public places'。

× From my view, I think the atmosphere is the main reason for some places suitable for meat.

✓ From my point of view, I think the atmosphere is the main reason why some places are suitable for meeting.

'From my view' 应为 'From my point of view'，'suitable for meat' 应为 'suitable for meeting'。

× For example, quite quite atmosphere is very suitable suitable for meat and chatting.

✓ For example, a quiet atmosphere is very suitable for meeting and chatting.

'quite quite' 是错误重复，应为 'quiet'，'suitable suitable' 也重复，应为 'suitable'。