朋友— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Reduce grammar errors and redundancy; open with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details linked logically. Use correct verb forms and singular/plural agreement, and avoid repeating phrases.

範例: Yes. I have a close friend from college who now lives in Germany. We keep in touch regularly to discuss our work and share how life differs between our countries.

建議: Structure the response: start with a topic sentence describing typical activities, then give specific examples using linking words (for example, when/if). Fix sentence fragments and unclear pronoun use.

範例: Usually we watch movies together or go to a restaurant. If we live in different countries, we catch up by video call to talk about our daily lives and projects.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence and concise specific detail. Remove filler sounds and correct tense/word order. Use linking phrase to compare with childhood friendships.

範例: I usually met most of my friends at university during my college years. I don't have many childhood friends, so most of my social circle comes from college.

建議: Be concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear statement about current situation, then explain reason and a brief contrast with past habits using linkers (however, when).

範例: Not at the moment, because I recently moved to Spain and haven't made many friends yet. In the past I used to go out with friends often, but now I'm focusing on meeting new people here.

建議: Clarify meaning and correct word choice (friends, not France). Use one clear topic sentence stating importance, then give two specific reasons linked logically. Avoid fillers.

範例: Friends are very important to me because they are like a chosen family and I can share my experiences with them. They also help me learn about the world and understand my own feelings.

建議: Begin with a clear topic sentence and give two contrasted, specific situations using linking words (sometimes, but, when). Remove repetition and filler.

範例: It depends on my mood. Sometimes I prefer one-on-one time for serious conversations, but I also enjoy larger groups when we're celebrating a party or social event.

建議: Use correct verbs (invite, not buy) and give a clear conditional sentence: when I have a place I will invite friends. Provide specific examples of activities and avoid repetition.

範例: Yes. When I find a suitable place to live in Spain, I will invite friends for dinner or coffee so we can catch up and chat in a relaxed setting.

建議: Answer directly and clearly, then give a specific example of any small change using linking words (however, now). Reduce hesitations.

範例: I don't see a big difference, although now I meet more people at work than I did before. In the past I mainly met friends at university.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence explaining suitability, then contrast good and bad places with specific reasons. Avoid unclear phrasing and complete the comparisons.

範例: Some places are suitable because they allow conversation, for example coffee shops and parks are relaxed and quiet. In contrast, cinemas and noisy bars are not ideal because it's hard to talk there.

× Yes, I have a friends that I have known from college.

✓ Yes, I have a friend whom I have known since college.

'a friends' mixes singular article with plural noun; use singular 'a friend'. 'that' is okay but 'whom' is more appropriate for a person after 'have known'. Use 'since college' to indicate starting point of knowing someone.

× She is very kind friend that I have.

✓ She is a very kind friend of mine.

Missing article 'a' before 'very kind friend' and awkward phrasing 'that I have'. Use possessive phrase 'friend of mine' for natural expression.

× She's living right now in Germany and we usually talk about our projects, our lives in different countries and I like to keep more friends from long.

✓ She is living in Germany now, and we usually talk about our projects and our lives in different countries. I like to keep long-term friends.

Use simple present continuous 'is living' with 'in Germany now'. Remove redundant 'right now'. 'Our projects, our lives in different countries' is better joined with 'and'. Final clause 'keep more friends from long' is ungrammatical; use 'keep long-term friends' or 'maintain long-term friendships'.

× If I need live near my friends, I like watching movies with them.

✓ If I need to live near my friends, I like watching movies with them.

Missing 'to' infinitive after 'need'. Use 'need to live' for correct verb form.

× Going out to a restaurant or that kind of activities is we are not close.

✓ Going out to a restaurant or doing that kind of activity is what we do when we are close.

Original sentence has incorrect word order and agreement. 'That kind of activities' should be 'that kind of activity' (singular) and structure needs 'is what we do when we are together/close'.

× If we are living in a different country, it's we I I also enjoy talking with them, catching up just you know, doing a video call.

✓ If we live in different countries, I also enjoy talking with them and catching up, for example by doing a video call.

Present continuous 'are living' is awkward here; use simple present 'live' for general situation. Remove duplicated words 'we I I'. Reorder to natural phrasing and add 'for example' to introduce 'video call'.

× Umm, I think the most, uh, of my friends I meet each other with, uh, we were in college or yes, at the university.

✓ Umm, I think most of the friends I met were from college or the university.

Original has confused pronoun and reflexive structure 'my friends I meet each other with'. Use 'most of the friends I met' and 'were from college or the university' for clarity and correct tense.

× I don't have friends for my childhood, for example, but I have many friends from college.

✓ I don't have any childhood friends, for example, but I have many friends from college.

'friends for my childhood' is unnatural; use 'childhood friends'. Add 'any' after negative 'don't have'.

× I don't often go out with my friends now because I'm, I don't have friends here.

✓ I don't often go out with friends now because I don't have any friends here.

Redundant 'I'm, I' removed and 'any' added after negative for natural English. 'With my friends' can be 'with friends' here.

× But when I was close with my friends, I, we, we used to go out often.

✓ But when I lived close to my friends, we used to go out often.

'When I was close with my friends' is unnatural; use 'lived close to my friends'. Remove stuttering 'I, we, we'.

× Umm for me is a new way to learn about world and about my feelings.

✓ For me, it's a new way to learn about the world and about my feelings.

Missing subject 'it' and article 'the' before 'world'. Add commas for clarity.

× I think France to me are very important because there, uh, is the family that I choose, you know, umm, I also like, uh, sharing my experiences with them, uh, like listening to them.

✓ I think friends to me are very important because they are the family I choose, you know. I also like sharing my experiences with them and listening to them.

'France' is a mispronunciation of 'friends'; corrected to 'friends'. 'There is the family' should be 'they are the family'. Ensure subject-verb agreement 'friends...are'. Combine sentences for clarity.

× That depends of my mood.

✓ That depends on my mood.

Use the preposition 'on' with 'depend', not 'of'. This is a fixed verb-preposition collocation.

× Sometimes I prefer uh spend time just with one friend if we are talking about a special thing or something very important.

✓ Sometimes I prefer to spend time just with one friend if we are talking about something special or very important.

After 'prefer' use the infinitive 'to spend' (or the -ing form 'spending'); original omitted 'to'. 'A special thing' is better as 'something special'.

× But I also enjoy spending time with many friends as well if we are celebrating something in a party.

✓ But I also enjoy spending time with many friends if we are celebrating something at a party.

Use 'at a party' not 'in a party'. Remove redundant 'as well'.

× Yes, I would like to buy them to my home when I uh, finally find a space to live here in Spain or wherever.

✓ Yes, I would like to invite them to my home when I finally find a place to live here in Spain or elsewhere.

'Buy them to my home' is incorrect; use 'invite them'. 'Find a space' is better as 'find a place', and 'wherever' here is better 'elsewhere'.

× But I I like to buy them for a dinner or just for a nice talk or a coffee, some bakery and catching up.

✓ But I would like to invite them for dinner or just for a chat, coffee, some pastries, and catching up.

Again 'buy them for a dinner' is wrong; use 'invite them for dinner'. 'Nice talk' -> 'chat'. 'Bakery' is a place; use 'pastries' or 'baked goods'.

× I don't think there is a difference between where I made friends now and where I used to meet in the past.

✓ I don't think there is a difference between where I make friends now and where I used to meet them in the past.

Use present 'make friends now' for current habit. Also include 'them' after 'meet' for clarity. 'Made friends now' mixes past with now.

× Probably I right now I'm meeting more people at work than before.

✓ Right now I'm probably meeting more people at work than before.

Word order corrected: adverb 'right now' and 'probably' placement adjusted for natural English.

× I've seen some places suitable for a meeting are coffee shops or just parks that kind of places and others, uh, are not.

✓ I think places suitable for meeting are coffee shops or parks, and some other places are not suitable.

'Suitable for a meeting' is awkward; 'suitable for meeting' or 'suitable for meetings' is better. 'That kind of places' incorrect; rephrase and add contrast clause.

× I think in cinema because you can talk with anybody there, uh, you know, a bar because it's very noisy or it's.

✓ I don't think the cinema is suitable because you can't talk there easily; a bar can also be unsuitable because it's very noisy.

Original sentence fragments and preposition misuse. Use 'in the cinema' rarely; better 'the cinema' and explain suitability. Clarify negative/positive meaning.