网站— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 답변이 자연스럽지 않고 문법 오류가 있습니다. 문장을 간결하고 명확하게 구성하며, 주제 문장과 구체적인 세부사항을 연결하는 표현을 사용하세요.

範例: I often visit Wikipedia to find information. Also, I frequently browse gaming websites because I enjoy playing games like Bolivar.

建議: 답변이 중복되고 문장이 길며 명확하지 않습니다. 주제 문장을 명확히 하고, 이유를 구체적으로 설명하는 문장을 간결하게 만드세요.

範例: I don't have a favorite website, but I often use YouTube because it is easy to use and has many interesting videos.

建議: 답변이 불명확하고 중복된 표현이 많습니다. 질문에 직접 답하고, 변화에 대해 구체적인 예를 들어 설명하세요.

範例: I don't visit websites often, so I haven't noticed many changes. However, when I do visit, I sometimes see new features or designs.

建議: 문장이 어색하고 명확하지 않습니다. 주제 문장을 분명히 하고, 구체적인 예시와 이유를 포함하여 답변을 구성하세요.

範例: In my country, popular websites usually provide information about celebrities, social issues, and international news. These websites are good at organizing complex information clearly.

× I often visit Wikipedia and there is some website provides many information of games.

✓ I often visit Wikipedia and there are some websites that provide a lot of information about games.

'There is some website provides' is incorrect because 'there is' should be followed by a singular noun, but 'some website' is vague and 'provides' is a verb that needs a relative pronoun. Correct form is 'there are some websites that provide'. Also, 'many information' is incorrect because 'information' is uncountable; use 'a lot of information' instead.

× I'm really into enjoying games like Bolivar, so I often look.

✓ I'm really into playing games like Bolivar, so I often play.

The phrase 'into enjoying' is awkward; 'into' is usually followed by a gerund that expresses an activity, so 'playing' is more appropriate than 'enjoying'. Also, 'I often look' is incomplete; likely intended 'I often play'.

× I don't have my favorite website because I don't use many website and but if a YouTube or YouTube is also a website that is my February website because it was very comfortable and interested in to me so.

✓ I don't have a favorite website because I don't use many websites, but YouTube is also a website that is my favorite because it is very comfortable and interesting to me.

'Many website' should be 'many websites' (plural). 'My February website' seems to be a mishearing or typo; likely 'favorite website'. 'Interested in to me' is incorrect; correct is 'interesting to me'. Also, 'a YouTube or YouTube' is redundant; just 'YouTube'.

× I don't often visit websites though so so I don't know that umm but if if there are some changes I realize that already I lost that quickly because I have some I I find the some difference.

✓ I don't often visit websites, so I don't know. But if there are some changes, I realize them quickly because I notice some differences.

Sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'I lost that quickly' is incorrect; likely meant 'I notice that quickly'. 'I have some I I find the some difference' is ungrammatical; corrected to 'I notice some differences'. Also, 'that' should be 'them' referring to changes.

× Maybe very popular websites in my country and provides many information such as celebrity and social issues and even other countries issues.

✓ Maybe very popular websites in my country provide a lot of information such as celebrity news, social issues, and even issues from other countries.

'Websites ... provides' is incorrect subject-verb agreement; 'websites' is plural so verb should be 'provide'. 'Many information' is incorrect; 'information' is uncountable, so use 'a lot of information'. 'Other countries issues' should be 'issues from other countries'.

× That website very a good little websites are good at organize the the complex.

✓ Those websites are very good at organizing complex information.

Sentence is fragmented and ungrammatical. 'That website very a good little websites' is incorrect; corrected to 'Those websites are very good'. 'Organize the the complex' is incorrect; corrected to 'organizing complex information'. Also, 'website' and 'websites' confused; plural form used consistently.