网站— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Работайте над плавностью речи и сокращением заполнителей («uh», «umm»). Дайте чёткое тематическое предложение и 1–2 конкретных детали (почему посещаете эти сайты). Также избегайте тавтологии («Instagram and Instagram website») и старайтесь не превышать 4–5 предложений.

範例: I often visit social media and video sites like Instagram, Telegram and YouTube. I mainly use Instagram because it lets me follow friends and creators and quickly see photos and short videos. I also use Telegram for messaging and YouTube for longer videos and tutorials.

建議: Улучшите грамматику и точность: используйте правильные подлежащее-описание ("It is" вместо "They are"). Дайте связное основное предложение, затем 1–2 конкретные причины, используя связки (because, so, and). Это сделает ответ более естественным и эффективным.

範例: My favourite website is Instagram because it lets me follow friends and content creators. I enjoy browsing photos and short videos there, which helps me keep up with people and trends.

建議: Сократите запинки и сформулируйте одно чёткое предложение, объясняющее изменения, затем приведите 1–2 конкретных примера с логическими связками (for example, recently, such as). Также корректно используйте времена (present perfect или present simple) для описания изменений.

範例: Yes, these websites often change their features. For example, Instagram frequently adds new options — recently it allowed users to add music to short videos, and it updates the layout and filters from time to time.

建議: Сформулируйте предложение яснее и избегайте повторов. Дайте одно обобщающее утверждение и добавьте конкретное объяснение или пример (кто именно использует эти сайты и почему). Используйте связки (especially, because, for instance) для связности.

範例: Social media and video platforms like Instagram, Telegram, YouTube and TikTok are the most popular in my country. Especially young people use them to watch short videos and follow influencers because these sites are entertaining and easy to access.

× Hmm, I often uh, visit uh Instagram and uh telegram, YouTube, uh websites, umm and the most uh preferable 1 is the Instagram uh there I can uh, follow my.

✓ Hmm, I often visit Instagram, Telegram, YouTube and other websites, and my most preferred one is Instagram because I can follow people there.

The original sentence is disfluent and contains run-on structure and unnecessary fillers. It needs clearer sentence boundaries and correct parallel listing of websites. Use commas to separate items in a list and a separate clause to state the preference. Remove filler words (uh, umm) and correct word choice ('preferable 1' to 'most preferred one'). Suggestion: practice organizing ideas before speaking, use simple sentences, and avoid fillers.

× My favorite website is Instagram. They are uh, I can follow friends and creators, uh, also I can see photos and short videos and keep up with my friends.

✓ My favorite website is Instagram. There I can follow friends and creators, see photos and short videos, and keep up with my friends.

Using 'They are' is incorrect because 'Instagram' is singular and the intended meaning is location or platform, so 'There' or 'On it' should be used. Also combine related actions into one clear sentence and remove fillers. Suggestion: use 'there' or 'on it' for platforms and ensure pronoun/subject references match.

× Yes umm, from time to time I can see on Instagram website uh update us and uh new uh, things, uh uh, sometimes, uh, we can uh, put music to the video.

✓ Yes, from time to time I see updates and new features on Instagram, and sometimes we can add music to videos.

The original mixes awkward constructions ('update us and new things') and unnecessary modal 'can' in a confusing way. Use simple present to describe habitual or general truths ('I see', 'we can add'). Place modifiers ('on Instagram') in the correct position. Suggestion: learn common collocations like 'updates and new features' and practice concise sentence formation.

× Uh, Instagram, Telegram, YouTube, uh, Tiktok are the most popular websites in my country. Umm, not only all the people but also younger generation uh, also umm, like uh, watching this website.

✓ Instagram, Telegram, YouTube and TikTok are the most popular websites in my country. Not only many people but especially the younger generation like watching content on these platforms.

Original has repetition and incorrect phrases ('not only all the people but also younger generation'). Use 'many people' or 'a lot of people' and 'younger generation' with an article or demonstrative ('the younger generation'). Also 'watching this website' is incorrect; say 'watching content on these platforms.' Suggestion: avoid redundancy and use proper collocations ('watching content on platforms').