挑战— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答が少し冗長で、文法的な誤りや繰り返しが見られます。より自然で効果的な英語表現を使い、文を簡潔にまとめることが重要です。また、具体的な理由を明確に述べると良いでしょう。

範例: I find business negotiation the most challenging subject at school because I am studying in English, which is not my first language. This makes understanding complex terms and expressing my ideas clearly quite difficult.

建議: 文法の誤りや意味の不明瞭な部分が多く、内容が伝わりにくいです。過去形と現在完了形の使い分けを正しくし、具体的な経験をわかりやすく説明しましょう。

範例: Yes, I enjoy challenging myself. For example, I have played football for 12 years, and I always strive to improve my skills and score goals.

建議: 繰り返しや文法の誤りがあり、表現が不自然です。挑戦したい具体的な活動を正しい形で述べ、文を簡潔にまとめることが大切です。

範例: Yes, I prefer a life full of challenges because it makes life exciting. For example, I want to try skydiving and bungee jumping in the future.

建議: 文の構造が不明瞭で、繰り返しや不自然な表現があります。挑戦に対する具体的な対処法を明確に述べ、論理的に話を展開しましょう。

範例: I usually deal with challenges by working hard and staying positive. Although it can be difficult, I enjoy overcoming obstacles because it helps me grow.

× I think business negotiation is the most challenging course course.

✓ I think business negotiation is the most challenging course.

The word 'course' is repeated unnecessarily, which is a typographical error. Removing the duplicate improves clarity and correctness.

× but I don't I can't speak English very so business is very difficult.

✓ but I can't speak English very well, so business is very difficult.

The phrase 'I don't I can't' is incorrect and redundant. The correct form is 'I can't'. Also, 'very' should be followed by an adverb 'well' to modify the verb 'speak' properly.

× Since I was born in I had I have challenged everything.

✓ Since I was born, I have challenged everything.

The phrase 'I had I have' is incorrect and redundant. The present perfect tense 'I have challenged' is appropriate here to indicate an action continuing from the past to the present.

× For example, I bread I had played football 12 years.

✓ For example, I have played football for 12 years.

'I bread' is incorrect and likely a typo. The present perfect tense 'I have played' is suitable to express an action continuing over a period. Also, 'for' is needed before the duration '12 years'.

× I challenge it to win and get the goals.

✓ I challenge myself to win and score goals.

The reflexive pronoun 'myself' should be used when the subject and object are the same. Also, 'score goals' is the correct collocation rather than 'get the goals'.

× I want to skydiving and bungee jump.

✓ I want to go skydiving and bungee jumping.

After 'want to', the base form of the verb should be used. 'Skydiving' and 'bungee jumping' are gerunds used as nouns here, so 'go' is needed before them.

× I, I, I want.

✓ I want to do them.

The sentence is incomplete and repetitive. Completing it with 'to do them' clarifies the intended meaning.