挑战— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and contains grammatical errors that affect clarity. Try to make your response more concise and structured by stating your main point first, then providing specific reasons and examples. Avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure for better naturalness.

範例: Math was the most challenging subject for me during school because I struggled with numbers and calculations. To improve, I often attended extra tuition classes, which helped me understand the concepts better.

建議: Your answer lacks clarity and contains several grammatical mistakes and repetitions. Try to clearly express your ideas in a logical order, using linking words to connect your thoughts. Also, avoid repeating phrases and ensure your sentences are complete and meaningful.

範例: Yes, I like to challenge myself, especially when I feel bored or procrastinate. For example, I set deadlines to complete tasks on time, which motivates me to stay focused and productive.

建議: Your answer conveys your opinion but could be improved by organizing your ideas more clearly and using appropriate linking words. Also, try to avoid repetition and improve sentence structure to sound more natural and fluent.

範例: Currently, I prefer a peaceful life rather than one full of challenges because my schedule is already hectic. Living in Canada can be stressful, and without much motivation, I find it better to avoid additional difficulties.

建議: Your answer is incomplete and unclear, with grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. To improve, provide a clear topic sentence followed by specific steps you take to handle challenges. Use linking words to connect your ideas and complete your thoughts.

範例: When I face challenges in daily life, I first motivate myself to stay positive. Then, I pray for strength and focus to overcome the difficulties. This approach helps me manage stressful situations effectively.

× School days math is very difficult for me because I'm not good at counting and I didn't laugh to learn maths.

✓ During my school days, math was very difficult for me because I wasn't good at counting and I didn't like to learn maths.

The sentence refers to past experiences, so the verbs should be in the past tense. 'Is' should be 'was' and 'didn't laugh' is a typo and should be 'didn't like'. Also, 'school days math' is awkward; 'During my school days, math' is clearer.

× So mostly I'm not much good at maths.

✓ So mostly, I'm not very good at maths.

The phrase 'not much good' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'not very good'. Also, 'maths' is acceptable in Canadian English, but the sentence needs an adverb 'very' to modify 'good' properly.

× So I usually took a tuition and extra classes for maths.

✓ So I usually took tuition and extra classes for maths.

The word 'a' before 'tuition' is incorrect because 'tuition' is an uncountable noun. Also, 'usually took' suggests a habitual past action, which is acceptable here.

× So according to math is very challenging subject during my school days.

✓ So, according to me, math was a very challenging subject during my school days.

The phrase 'according to math' is incorrect; it should be 'according to me'. Also, 'is' should be 'was' to match the past tense, and 'very challenging subject' needs the article 'a' before 'very challenging subject'.

× Yes, sometimes I like to challenge myself whenever I get bored or whenever I didn't do the things on time.

✓ Yes, sometimes I like to challenge myself whenever I get bored or whenever I don't do things on time.

The phrase 'didn't do' is past tense, but the sentence refers to habitual actions, so present tense 'don't do' is appropriate.

× So that time I just I give challenge to myself that I have to do this thing on time.

✓ At that time, I just give myself a challenge that I have to do this thing on time.

The sentence structure is awkward and redundant. 'I just I give challenge to myself' should be 'I just give myself a challenge'. Also, 'that I have to do this thing on time' is clearer.

× If I if I get if I get loser challenge, so I have to do.

✓ If I lose the challenge, I have to do it.

The original sentence is repetitive and unclear. 'If I get loser challenge' is incorrect; it should be 'If I lose the challenge'. The phrase 'so I have to do' is incomplete; 'do it' clarifies the meaning.

× Well, nowadays I have a hectic schedule and I don't like to live a life that has a lot of challenges because in Canada it's already so much stressful life and no one, no one and there is no one who motivate us.

✓ Well, nowadays I have a hectic schedule and I don't like to live a life that has a lot of challenges because life in Canada is already very stressful and there is no one who motivates us.

The phrase 'so much stressful life' is incorrect; it should be 'very stressful life'. Also, 'no one who motivate us' should be 'no one who motivates us' to agree with the singular subject 'no one'.

× So I don't like to live a challenging life. I just want peace life in my life.

✓ So I don't like to live a challenging life. I just want a peaceful life.

The phrase 'peace life in my life' is awkward and redundant. 'Peaceful life' is the correct adjective-noun combination, and 'in my life' is unnecessary.

× I usually do many things whenever I had to deal with challenges in my daily life.

✓ I usually do many things whenever I have to deal with challenges in my daily life.

The phrase 'whenever I had to deal' mixes past tense with present habitual action. It should be 'whenever I have to deal' to indicate present habitual action.

× First of all, I have to give more.

✓ First of all, I have to put in more effort.

The phrase 'I have to give more' is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'put in more effort' clarifies the meaning.

× I have to give motivation to myself and then I just pray to God that I have to win this thing.

✓ I have to motivate myself and then I just pray to God that I will win this challenge.

'Give motivation to myself' is awkward; 'motivate myself' is better. Also, 'I have to win this thing' is incorrect in this context; 'I will win this challenge' expresses the intended meaning.