挑战— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cải thiện độ tự nhiên và chi tiết cụ thể: trả lời ngắn gọn, trực tiếp rồi nêu 1–2 lý do cụ thể kèm ví dụ. Tránh lặp từ (ví dụ: "in my opinion" và "I think" cùng lúc) và dùng liên từ để mạch lạc.

範例: I find science the most challenging subject because it combines many different topics like biology and physics, each with complex concepts. For example, understanding chemical equations and physics formulas requires a lot of practice and memorization.

建議: Tránh lặp ý và cấu trúc; nói rõ một ví dụ cụ thể hơn và dùng liên từ để làm câu mạch lạc. Giữ độ dài tối đa 3–4 câu, nhấn mạnh lợi ích cụ thể và kết quả đo được.

範例: Yes, I do. Challenging myself helps me improve my skills and build confidence. For example, when I spent extra hours solving science problems, my test scores improved from 65% to 80%.

建議: Cần cấu trúc rõ ràng: bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng (Yes/No/Partly), rồi giải thích lí do với ví dụ cụ thể. Tránh ngôn ngữ không tự nhiên như "witness too much difficulties" hoặc cấu trúc sai "having facing"; dùng từ vựng chính xác hơn.

範例: I prefer a balanced life with some challenges rather than constant struggle. Moderate challenges motivate me to improve, but too many problems can be overwhelming and reduce my productivity.

建議: Chỉnh ngữ pháp và sự tự nhiên: bỏ giới từ thừa ("tackle with" → "tackle"), dùng liên từ để nối ý, và đưa thêm một bước cụ thể (ví dụ: lập kế hoạch hoặc hỏi người khác). Thêm chi tiết cụ thể để thể hiện phương pháp có hệ thống.

範例: I usually tackle challenges by identifying the root cause, researching possible solutions, and trying them step by step. For instance, if a problem set is difficult, I review the related theory, watch a tutorial, and then practice similar exercises until I understand it.

× In my opinion, I think science is the most difficult subject at school because it's very confusing with a lot of knowledge to learn.

✓ In my opinion, science is the most difficult subject at school because it is very confusing and has a lot of material to learn.

The original sentence uses 'confusing with a lot of knowledge to learn', which awkwardly combines an adjective with a prepositional phrase. Replacing 'with' by 'and has' and changing 'knowledge' to 'material' (or 'content') improves clarity and collocation. Also avoid redundant phrases like 'In my opinion, I think' by keeping only one.

× Definitely because I think challenging myself is good for me since I can get better when I challenge myself.

✓ Definitely. I think challenging myself is good for me because I can improve when I do.

The original is a run-on sentence beginning with 'Definitely' followed by 'because', which creates a fragment or awkward structure. Splitting into two sentences and replacing the repeated 'challenge myself' with 'do' makes the sentence concise and grammatically correct.

× On the way, enjoy facing challenges.

✓ On the way, I enjoy facing challenges.

The original is missing the subject 'I', making it an incomplete sentence. Adding 'I' corrects sentence structure and clarifies meaning. The phrase 'On the way' is also unnatural; consider 'Along the way' or 'In life' depending on intended meaning.

× I don't like to witness too much difficulties because having facing challenges moderately will keep a motivation in me to keep going.

✓ I don't like to face too many difficulties because facing challenges in moderation keeps me motivated to keep going.

Several issues: 'witness' is wrong verb for experiencing difficulties; use 'face'. 'Too much difficulties' is ungrammatical—count noun 'difficulties' needs 'too many'. 'Having facing' is incorrect; use 'facing' or 'when I face'. 'A motivation in me' is unnatural; use 'me motivated'. Rewriting improves grammar and register.

× I often tackle with challenges by finding the reason to it and then solve it.

✓ I often tackle challenges by finding the cause of them and then solving them.

The phrasal verb is 'tackle challenges' (no 'with'). 'Finding the reason to it' is incorrect preposition usage; use 'cause of them' or 'reason for them'. 'Then solve it' should be 'then solving them' to maintain parallel gerund structure.

× For example, when I find an exercise hard to solve, I will look up for the knowledge I need, then solve it.

✓ For example, when I find an exercise hard to solve, I look up the knowledge I need and then solve it.

Use of 'will' is unnecessary for habitual actions; present simple 'I look up' fits better. 'Look up for' is incorrect: the correct verb is 'look up' (transitive) without 'for'. Keeping parallel structure 'look up ... and then solve it' improves flow.